Ren'Py Abandoned A Heartfelt Visit [Ch.3] [Secret Arcade]

[KiGa]

When the MC asks Nina "How you've been Nina? Nick still a handful?" And Nina replies "Nothing a mother can't handle from her own son". Is this what my dirty imagination imagines or am I just imagining things ?

More the opposite. I think he will be Cody 2.0

 

[leopren]

the game finishes in the same spot as last update (while driving with Kate and is abot to change station)?

 

[Vortex@]

the game finishes in the same spot as last update (while driving with Kate and is abot to change station)?

yes. 2 new scenes were added into the old content and bugs were fixed. It still ends where it did before

 

[SecretStudios]

yes. 2 new scenes were added into the old content and bugs were fixed. It still ends where it did before

That's right!!

Story will be continued in next update.

 

[CleanJebboy]

where is Lana ?

I'm stuck here as well. I can't click on her door to enter her house though I can enter everyone else's. Did it ever work for you?

 

[blackares]

So far, it looks good, I can't wait for the next update.

 

[TempTitle]

There's a couple things a bit scuffed with the timeline (alternately, "there's some typos") as of chapter 2. Maybe overlaps with chapter 1.

We 'start' with the visit being about done (so, a week's worth of time passed), with Lana's bit having taken one extra day to complete before sliding into a timeskip, but then being quoted as "it's been three days of dodging." Maybe that's nothing, maybe it's just days changing without warning sometimes.

Also there's some odd regret from MC, when up to this point it was very much a "gonna go for whoever I can get and use their problems to get 'em." Okay, maybe he took a few days to discover post-nut clarity, maybe it's character development, I dunno, that's neither here nor there. But, after that,

MC discovers NickleOss stewing in his BO and Nina calls that out, then invites MC down for breakfast. Next scene, it's played as if that happened yesterday, and Chloe also indicates her conversation with MC (from the second day) also happened 'yesterday.' (Also in that same scene, Nina refers to us as 'MC' directly, btw).

 

[SecretStudios]

There's a couple things a bit scuffed with the timeline (alternately, "there's some typos") as of chapter 2. Maybe overlaps with chapter 1.

We 'start' with the visit being about done (so, a week's worth of time passed), with Lana's bit having taken one extra day to complete before sliding into a timeskip, but then being quoted as "it's been three days of dodging." Maybe that's nothing, maybe it's just days changing without warning sometimes.

Also there's some odd regret from MC, when up to this point it was very much a "gonna go for whoever I can get and use their problems to get 'em." Okay, maybe he took a few days to discover post-nut clarity, maybe it's character development, I dunno, that's neither here nor there. But, after that,

MC discovers NickleOss stewing in his BO and Nina calls that out, then invites MC down for breakfast. Next scene, it's played as if that happened yesterday, and Chloe also indicates her conversation with MC (from the second day) also happened 'yesterday.' (Also in that same scene, Nina refers to us as 'MC' directly, btw).

Thank you for your detailed feedback.

Will definitely fix it in the next update.

 

[Midnight Prophets]

There's a couple things a bit scuffed with the timeline (alternately, "there's some typos") as of chapter 2. Maybe overlaps with chapter 1.

We 'start' with the visit being about done (so, a week's worth of time passed), with Lana's bit having taken one extra day to complete before sliding into a timeskip, but then being quoted as "it's been three days of dodging." Maybe that's nothing, maybe it's just days changing without warning sometimes.

Also there's some odd regret from MC, when up to this point it was very much a "gonna go for whoever I can get and use their problems to get 'em." Okay, maybe he took a few days to discover post-nut clarity, maybe it's character development, I dunno, that's neither here nor there. But, after that,

MC discovers NickleOss stewing in his BO and Nina calls that out, then invites MC down for breakfast. Next scene, it's played as if that happened yesterday, and Chloe also indicates her conversation with MC (from the second day) also happened 'yesterday.' (Also in that same scene, Nina refers to us as 'MC' directly, btw).

I noticed that as well it's like there's two stories being told at once or at least two styles of writing. The tone is inconsistent also.

 

[SecretStudios]

I noticed that as well it's like there's two stories being told at once or at least two styles of writing. The tone is inconsistent also.

Hey there, I completely understand your feedback, and I want to assure you that I am working hard to improve the game.

While it still has a few bugs and some areas that need proofreading, my goal is for A Heartfelt Visit to become a high quality game soon.

The game’s story is a collaborative effort: 10% written by me, 60% by one writer, and 30% by another. I know there are some inconsistencies, but I am aware of them and I will add/improve stuff from first two Chapters with each update. In fact, the writer who contributed 60% is actively working on revising my parts, and I'm also planning to add some new scenes to fix the timeline issue once and for all.

 

[Midnight Prophets]

Hey there, I completely understand your feedback, and I want to assure you that I am working hard to improve the game.

While it still has a few bugs and some areas that need proofreading, my goal is for A Heartfelt Visit to become a high quality game soon.

The game’s story is a collaborative effort: 10% written by me, 60% by one writer, and 30% by another. I know there are some inconsistencies, but I am aware of them and I will add/improve stuff from first two Chapters with each update. In fact, the writer who contributed 60% is actively working on revising my parts, and I'm also planning to add some new scenes to fix the timeline issue once and for all.

I believe you will also. I really wish you good luck here on out. My only advice with multiple writers on a project is to make sure everyone is on board that should eliminate inconsistencies. For example, I noticed that one minute the MC sounded sympathetic and more well rounded with the way he spoke maybe a little more mature? And then the next it was like he only cared about getting laid.

 

[gillou04091977]

find joe solution

 

[dario4esh]

I think i am stuck it says to talk to lana again but i cant find her anywhere and there are some doors i cant click on

 

[demon9801]

i cant find lana the second time helpppp

 

[Deleted member 36687]

Ch. 2.5

 

[tomct1991]

Nice game, a lot of horny milfs

 

[nozu]

So, when is the next update?

 

[nozu]

Any news about the update?

 

[Manford]

On track for an October release.

 

[DirtyB]

Hey Dev, this one looks great. Thanks for your effort and looking forward to what's next.