The scenes look like they have just been plopped down from stock assets with no real care or thought.
Everything is levitating in its own space, too much clipping to mention each one.
Emergency lights are on for some reason.
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Is it a flying car?
Why is he wearing an earpiece?
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Her tits are showing through the top.
They are all levitating.
The bitumen is shiny like glass.
Whatever word that is on the ground, its three dimensional.
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If the other guy is supposed to be a detective, why is he in a "traffic division" cop car and not just a random blacked out car?
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More example of the lack of care and thought put into the scenes.
Whats up with the sidearm? Why has he got it on and how is it holstered?
Why is he wearing tactical gloves?
Her hand is clipping the skirt.
Also note he has no earpiece on, so he must have put it on when he changed into the suit.
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Uh?
Anyone can empty and clean a house.
There was no one there, whoever did it wasn't on a time crunch.
Nothing that indicated any difficulty was shown.
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Then we levitated out to the middle of nowhere, still with the emergency lights and spotlights on, for some reason.
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And arrived at ...
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Which also levitates and has strange, abruptly ending, pavement.
And an open front door.
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Then we levitated off to our next destination.
And we know it's levitating because not only is there no dust on this dirt road, but levitation also seems to break other laws of physics by eliminating shadows.
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Rather than engage in open corruption, why not just have that conversation at the completely deserted "Bob's Vintage", back in the "lack-of-shadow realm"?
Why go to the police station at all if the MC "isn't here"?
It turns out that exactly zero important information was exchanged in this secret meeting anyway, that whole conversation could have happened in the initial car ride.
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Pick better camera angles and stop showing the edges of the scene and assets.
We can easily see that the scene ends right behind the car.
The power-pole, for example, doesn't connect any further.
When can see where the hill, driveway and its attached walls end with nothing beyond.
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Bruh, the texture ... Do I need to say more?
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Pay attention to scale and perspective.
First a large car rolls up beside a small door, then suddenly the car looks much smaller and the door much larger.
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I tried ignoring this sort of thing, but it's jarring.
I ignored that she's dressed like a hooker...
But someone in her position/role shouldn't be speaking like this.
This is how the average worthless hoe out in Miami speaks, at this point I'm surprised she isn't ending sentences with "n*gga!".
She also shouldn't be shocked at wealth; she supposedly came from somewhere that she was about to be added to the harem of a national "ruler" who can afford to give away private jets.
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Look at the office, this dude doesn't own a computer, he doesn't have anything on his desk, in fact the room doesn't seem to even have electric lighting.
Furthermore, why would you tell anyone about your supercomputer in your secret lair and where said lair is?
Worse yet, if you really need extra computing power, you'd just rent some cloud service, it'll have far more power available than anything you can put in your cave.
I say this to illustrate the point about putting more thought into how the story is portrayed.
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It's the USA [there is a flag in at least one render], so everyone who isn't a felon can open-carry or if desired obtain a CCW, nothing to do with being military, ex or otherwise.
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That'll do for now, I could keep going, but I think that covers most of the main issues.
I don't say all that as an attack or to give you shit about your VN, it's to give solid examples of what can be improved if you intend to see this through to its conclusion.
) but if I have some free time, I will look at this game also, but it will definitely take a while. Probably because I charge the exorbitant rate of $0.00.
