It feels like all the secrets and mystery is coming at the expense of a real feeling of intimacy with the LIs. We can't really get a feel for them because they are all kind of bipolar. I can't really tell if they're doing us wrong or if they are just reflecting how much of a piece of shit the MC is.
I hate to say it but the sex scenes need to be completely redone. The camera is just way WAY too far away from the action. It feels like we're a voyeur in the window looking in rather than being a participant. Give us some different angles and perspectives. Also, narrate the sex scenes or at least include a bit of dialogue. They're gonna end up feeling all the same and repetitive if you're just showing a couple of animations and calling it a day.
With the lack of intimacy with the LI's and the sense of distance in the sex scenes, the whole game just comes off as very cold and detached.
Maybe it starts with us understanding the MC better? What does he actually want? He's chasing multiple women but we don't really get a sense of what's motivating him. Is he a sex addict? Does he want a harem? Is he just incapable of saying no? Does he feel bad about what he's doing.? Does he feel bad about or regret what he did to his business partner? Is he seeking redemption or trying to forget it ever happened? How does he feel about the secrets being kept by others? How does he feel about the secrets he's keeping?
The writing does this thing were the MC has suspicions or questions but it doesn't really include how that makes the MC feel. Is he filled with dread about the uncertainty of his relationships or by the revenge his business partner wants? Does he want the answers or is he afraid of what they might be? Does he intend on investigating things for himself or would he rather the answers come from building up the trust in these relationships?
Help us to understand him better.
I hate to say it but the sex scenes need to be completely redone. The camera is just way WAY too far away from the action. It feels like we're a voyeur in the window looking in rather than being a participant. Give us some different angles and perspectives. Also, narrate the sex scenes or at least include a bit of dialogue. They're gonna end up feeling all the same and repetitive if you're just showing a couple of animations and calling it a day.
With the lack of intimacy with the LI's and the sense of distance in the sex scenes, the whole game just comes off as very cold and detached.
Maybe it starts with us understanding the MC better? What does he actually want? He's chasing multiple women but we don't really get a sense of what's motivating him. Is he a sex addict? Does he want a harem? Is he just incapable of saying no? Does he feel bad about what he's doing.? Does he feel bad about or regret what he did to his business partner? Is he seeking redemption or trying to forget it ever happened? How does he feel about the secrets being kept by others? How does he feel about the secrets he's keeping?
The writing does this thing were the MC has suspicions or questions but it doesn't really include how that makes the MC feel. Is he filled with dread about the uncertainty of his relationships or by the revenge his business partner wants? Does he want the answers or is he afraid of what they might be? Does he intend on investigating things for himself or would he rather the answers come from building up the trust in these relationships?
Help us to understand him better.
