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Anna1990

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They had every reason to text that night and talk alone about groping and the thing that grilled Anna's butt just 2-3 hours ago, and she was also pissed with David because he ruined her alone time. So why didn't she text Chris:rolleyes:? Maybe Chris sent another D picture, but Anna can't because of David's presence. But in the morning, with her hornyness, she decide to sent some pictures to Chris in the bathroom with a good morning note:love:. So that encourages Chris to visit the bathroom. It's more like Anna invited him to the bathroom. yeah! Only Chris thinks like that. (To Anna, it was only to tease Chris and repay last night's Dic picture.) Otherwise, why would he risk years of work just to see Anna's butt and maybe be kicked out by Anna forever? and also that way, Anna can't kick him out because it's her fault too to send nude and give him hope:).
 

Skep-tiker

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I think it would be most interesting if the wife learns in any case, that (if? Only remember that case) her husband hasn't cheated, even if she has fooled around. Will the revelation that she I the cheater instead of her husband destroy her? Or will it be a dissapointing 'I dont care"?
 

Rassor

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the most of people not Kwon from the first part thise game some of the beginners are played only part 3 thats why they don't Kwon the power stroy but who played from part 1 they are legends Kwon about game a lot lol.
 

Repressed

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No I mean he was criticizing the game...I was just listening because obviously there might be many who dont like the update after playing the update and it's understandable...He is criticizing the game without playing the update...so that makes me wonder why is he doing that? lol..

I mean play the update then criticize lol..everyone is free to criticize.

Yeah I stopped reading his reply after he said he hasn't played it but was yapping regardless.

Like you said, no issues with criticism, but play the thing first and then write your essays lmao.

And like many others, I do agree that this shouldn't have taken 4 months.
 
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I've got to agree with some other users, the update was short for 5 months of waiting. Either this dev isn't time efficient at all or he likes to idle in between. Given the fact, that someone else is doing the art for him (including time consuming rendering), it makes me wonder even more.

Still it's a turning point and I really hope for the sake of this vn, that updates from now on will include optional escalations between Anna and one of the many pursuers/predators. It was possible to reject Chris in this update, which is fine, while all others could finally get a glimpse of some action after years of absurd teasing.



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Anna's all natural very much realistic tits were absolutely gorgeous in my opinion. Great shape, tear drop, lovely areolas and nipples at the right anatomically correct spot (lower third of the breast, so many other artists do that wrong or just recreate the ugly silicone/fake tits look). The very erotic slight sagging is also hyper realistic, if you take the cup size into consideration, her age (close to 30) and breastfeeding her child. I really loved her tits in this update.

Mr. Palmer's hired artist did a wonderful job with Anna's breasts. It was about time to finally show these beauties!

Although her hips and waist could have been a little bit wider, after having given birth.

I was not so happy about her very artificial looking pubes. This very thin landing strip is maintenance heavy, because it needs to be trimmed regularly and the surroundings need to be shaved, causing itchiness sooner or later. (Trimming is quickly done, but a combination of trimming and shaving takes time, especially if you want it to look symmetric)

I had hoped for a trimmed triangle (easy to maintain with a long hair trimmer) or a more natural small mommy's bush or something like that, after all she's a career woman, has got a baby to take care of and on top of it marriage problems. But still she looks like a single woman between her legs... So having such care (and therefore time) intensive pubes doesn't make much sense for me in her situation. In fact having a baby alone is such a challenging and time consuming task, that most moms just have to cut corners somewhere.



Indeed, the story does have plot holes and ISN'T that much realistic as some people claim. This most recent update once again involuntarily spotlighted it.

It's very much astonishing, not to say unbelievable, how Kendra manages to control all people around her and makes them do exactly what she wants. Not only all the gym employees do exactly what she wants, now also the receptionist woman in the office... even Jake, Marvin and Anna dance after her pipe to some degree. Surely there are highly manipulative individuals in this world, but still Kendra seems to top them all. Even getting away with threatening people at gun point... I don’t consider this to be realistic, sorry.



True, that bothered me too. Rob and Anna were way too friendly with each other all of a sudden.

Additionally there were some other minor issues concerning realism:

If Anna is breastfeeding, her nipples would be most likely sore. So Chris squeezing her sore nipples under the shower would have been a rather unpleasant experience for Anna, instead of being turned on. That's once again porn logic at work.

It's also very much unrealistic that their baby sleeps peacefully the whole night, never wakes up and doesn’t rob David & Anna of their sleep as it would be totally normal.
Also Anna doesn't seem to breastfeed her baby in the morning before going to work... She'll be away at work for the next 8+ hours (including travel time). Which mom would not want to at least breastfeed her baby in the morning and hold it in her arms, before she leaves for work?

Or that Anna drinks alcohol despite breastfeeding (not in this update, although Chis tried to convince her to drink during dinner, but during the one with Kendra, Jake and Marvin, where the latter groped her under the table). Drinking and breastfeeding is a no-go. Even if the mom pumps milk before, she'll have to wait like 2 days or so, to be able to give the baby the breast again, because alcohol breaks down slowly. So a mother has got to think ahead a lot, if she wants to drink. But Anna doesn't and is totally thoughtless concerning alcohol: in her inner mologue she just thinks about her next work day as a reason for not drinking, instead of her baby.

Anyway I hope the just teasing and hiding behind the excuse of realism bullshit belongs to the past from now on! There is plenty of porn logic at work already. Some people just don't want to realize it or don't want their illusions about this vn destroyed.
This doesn't mean that Anna should just jump on everybody's cock from now on. Progress, build-up and escalations between characters should still be believable ofc. But each update from now on should have at least one optional erotic scene between characters.
I agree with most things you said. Anna's tits were exactly how I was hoping they would look. Big nipples, large areola, little bit of sag. Perfect! I too wish her pussy was hairier or at least not a landing strip. Not sure why so many Devs are so afraid to put some hair there. Married or women in long term relationships don't trim or shave that often down there. Especially if they're not getting much action.

The update time of 4 1/2 months is not good at all. When this had a very low render count with heavy dialogue. To me the updates take 2 hours playing leisurely each time. I didnt see a difference in this one. No problem with that for me. I just hope this timeframe between updates is a one off. I get the feeling the shower scene was made last minute or not shown as originally intended. I predicted that we would see nudity on the 2 year anniversary of the game. Since this update was so late it probably was meant to be in the following update.

Breastfeeding and showing the baby is tough because you can't make it that realistic as Patreon rules ban so much of it including showing minors in an adult game.
I was worried for Mr Palmer with Chris groping Anna's ass in the nursery the first time he came over for dinner. Womens nipples aren't always sore even when they are engorged. Alcohol in breast milk lasts the same as in the blood stream. Having a few drinks, going to sleep, then waking up to breastfeed would be fine. Sounds like you haven't had a wife with kids or been around new moms. They drink lol. If they're really careful they will only have a bit to drink and not feed until the next day or two. She is meant to feed the baby in the morning. This has been said before in the game. Obviously can't show it though. But I think a lot of us would love to see some lactation in lewd scenes or even just a wet leaking top.

I think only half the male characters have gone far enough before with Anna to be able to have good scenes now. Marvin, Rob, Chris, Stenstromber.
Hank, Jake, Leonard, Marcel haven't really done anything with her yet, so I think they won't get that far in their next scene. Even though the action will be ramped up. They will likely need at least one more scene with Anna, to get to the Chris stage.

The writing to me has always been top notch, basically as good as I've seen for a VN. Yes there's a few little issues but nothing that takes me out of the story. Theres nowhere near as much porn logic as you describe. I do think the last couple updates have been stretching that though. Kendra being associated and controlling everyone she sees, is too much especially with the gun. Now even both gym and law firm receptionists. Easily could have just had Kendra see David coming through and hid. No need for everything to be setup with her. Why is everyone doing this for her anyway when she's meant to be unlikeable from everyone that knows her? She's not that rich or can offer them anything that valuable. The reasoning for her manipulation of so many, seems quite strange.

The marriage relationship drama and dialogue has always been a strong point. This update felt a step down. People always speaking their feelings and generic lines. Not to say it was bad at all. But not the high level I expected from him.

Glad to see many on here also thought the kitchen scene was the most erotic. I just wish it went a bit further, then have it finished off in the bathroom the next morning.
The people wanting the sexting to come to a better end. I think that might have been the original updates end. Having her send a nude tit pic to Chris in bed. For a few reasons I think that was scrapped and instead, have Anna show herself off completely in the flesh. Just my opinion.

All these are only nitpicks. Because the writing was so strong previously I always expect perfection out of him. This is still my fav game and has been for about a year now. Glad we are finally into the first stages of the slut zone with Anna!
 
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John Bon Clay

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I don't care about time in between releases. I mean i do but not seriously as I'm pirating it.
If I was paying for it I would've thought differently I'm sure. Also when it's a dev that does a hobby project or a dev that is an actual business and those in between.
Thing is.. If I was to pay for it I would need to trust the developer and that they actually finishes their games. Kind of like the developer of treasure of nadia. If that one made games tailored for me I would.
 

DIRTY FILTHY Animal

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Agitated rant - don't make me laugh.
I realise the time scale of production is entirely your opinion, but at least base it on some kind of knowledge of what it entails.
How do you know how long it would or should take, if you've never done it yourself?

And as for me, I've been submitting stories to Literotica for over 10 years, so I certainly know how to take criticism and abuse.
Sadly, I have no recollection of your criticism on this thread about the plot holes in my story, it is quite possible that I missed it as I don't spend a lot of time on here, so maybe you'd like to find it and send it to me?
I forget if you answered this before, but have any other of your literotica stories been turned into a game or kinetic novel?
 
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ItsNotUs

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I don't care about time in between releases. I mean i do but not seriously as I'm pirating it.
If I was paying for it I would've thought differently I'm sure. Also when it's a dev that does a hobby project or a dev that is an actual business and those in between.
Thing is.. If I was to pay for it I would need to trust the developer and that they actually finishes their games. Kind of like the developer of treasure of nadia. If that one made games tailored for me I would.
Stopper has the same opinion! xdd Time doesn't matter! :ROFLMAO:
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Skep-tiker

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I think it would be most interesting if the wife learns in any case, that (if? Only remember that case) her husband hasn't cheated, even if she has fooled around. Will the revelation that she I the cheater instead of her husband destroy her? Or will it be a dissapointing 'I dont care"?
 
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John Bon Clay

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Stopper has the same opinion! xdd Time doesn't matter! :ROFLMAO:
No clue what you're on about. I'm not one who reads meme's etc so if you want to make conversation then.. Do it properly.
I get the feeling that you think you were super smart and cool though.. Good for you.
Personal opinion maybe but being able to communicate properly is far cooler and better.
 

Gearz24

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I am pretty sure it wasn't good and I haven't played it but based on my experiences with the past slow, boring, dev milking his patreon's updates and multiple people on here unhappy with the update I am glad I chose NOT to waste anymore of my time on this super slow, super boring, pile of well something that might get me banned.

The people that are Masochists you have fun getting jerked around until this horrible dev abandons the game after having next to NOTHING happen for how long?
Have not played this in a while and don't think I will again,2 years in and seems boring as hell still ,looking at some of these posts, sounds like it ranks right up there with John by stopper
 
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3.80 star(s) 117 Votes