VN Ren'Py A Perfect Marriage [v0.7.3b] [Mr Palmer]

[atlas114]

I'm a gold patron, and he did reply to a question of one of the other patrons and said that David's side wouldn't be that long but it'll be more impactful to the story. Sounds good to me!

appreciate you sharing that bit of info! the wait is the hardest part and hopefully we’ll be treated to some preview images soon!

 

[Morgan12]

Finally....

Took some time to play the latest release and do some experimenting with the routes. And see how the story's plausibility tracks as well as how the characters are being developed.

The first thing I have noticed is Anna and Grant Stenstromber route. It was the loosest connect prior to this point and also runs parallel with Hanks. Both Grant and Hank are old, out of shape and generally gross. The flashback of Anna and Grant while Anna was home from college solves the plausibility issue of Anna and old men theme. Could Grant have conditioned Anna throughout her life? Maybe, but regardless of what happened in the more distant past, Anna considered Grant and might have if her father wasn't home.

It is at that point we ask ourselves what if Anna's father wasn't home during her visit? So something in Anna's phycology would allow such a relationship. More development in the story is needed but it does put Anna and old men into play. Also, would develop Anna's character more and her thinking. Worst is it does cost more time in rendering and story. And it's time consuming when one considers the other routes. Its already a busy story and has a few more curves added to it. Honestly, I think the developer ought to "just use" the other males as background information and stick with David, Jake, Chris, Hank, Grant, Marvin and Marcel for primary content. The rest of the male cast can add "complicate" things for the main male love interest. And to add to the "save the marriage" route the others could accidently revile the plot.

With David:
It's pretty easy route. Some clues fall into place and David follows the breadcrumbs that leads to his innocence. A few key player choices that accidently puts David on that path would be fun; think like a boobytrap if the player is looking for the NTR routes.

With Jake:
Again pretty easy route. Handsome boy wonder woos Anna through charm and wit. His most likely would be the "love" path to get Anna. If Anna thinks her marriage is over and she believes Jake has real feelings for her, Anna might start have real feelings for Jake.

With Chris:
Where in the past I thought the only way Chris would get Anna would be for Chris to exploit Anna's emotional vulnerability. That after some emotional traumatic interaction with David, Chris would simply make a play on Anna. But another 2 maybe 3 possibilities that work together is another Chris path to Anna. Anna could make an "excuse" for sleeping with Chris as revenge against David's cheating and because Anna is curious about Chris' large member.

With Hank:
It's still a bully play of domination and submission. Though Anna isn't attracted to old fat men, she still would consider it as witnessed with the Grant/Anna interaction. However, in Hank's path having dangled making Anna a partner and setting her career is one part, the fact that Anna had an over domineering father helps. It's daddy issues from one of being dominating and wanting to please that works.

With Grant:
Anna has known Grant all her life and has fond memories of their past. And Anna had a friendly ear in Grant being there for her as she endured her father's dominating personality. In a way it's the kind of love she wanted from her father (caring and nurturing) that she didn't get from her father that Grant gave her. It's those old feelings Grant cultured all those years he knew Anna that Grant plays on. He can't and shouldn't play the "I wish you were my daughter" line--that would likely creep Anna out. But if Grant can put on an act that reminds Anna of the good old days with Grant and touches her heart.

With Marvin:
There is the weakness in the whole story and plot line, Marvin and Anna. Instead of Marvin BEGGING to touch Anna's butt, Marvin should have just did it like the criminal he is. A bank robber isn't going to ask the bank if he can rob the place--he just does it. Now in my version of events Anna would have act shock and surprised at the touch and left speechless. At that point the player would have been given the choice of stopping Marvin or not. If not, Anna would meekly asked Marvin to stop, but he continues till Anna musters enough strength to stop him. But while the touching was going on Anna could have been feeling strange arousal over it. And it leads to the path of more Marvin boldness.

With Marcel:
The fact he is 19 and Anna 29 plays right into Anna's self-esteem that a young attractive male is interested in her. And that kind of attention vindicates that Anna still is beautiful and desirable. It's been well played that Anna is just as upset that David cheated on her but with a much younger woman. Now.... here is where it gets ugly and is up to the developer just what kind of fetishes get put into the story. So would the story go down the interracial fetish for Anna...? Does Anna embrace the "Couger" fetish? And is Anna on the pill or taking birth control and does it or would it make for another fetish for all the above, including Marcel?

The last point is the Kendra twist. And I think the developer has done one hell of a job bring some of Anna's actions to make Kendra proud of her for some of her misdeeds. It's like teenage girls looking for each other's approval--and I have actually seen several times that women get into situations they shouldn't have because of "peer pressure."

I would hope the dev would put the choice in the players hands as to get on or off birth control. Not worried about Chris or Jake knocking her up as they will prefer to nut in her tits or face. Marvin may want to nut inside Anna, so pregger possibly there, as well as old Grant, but boss won't risk it and young guy will nut deep in her fertile womb.......but Kendra should get preggers as well, for being a nut job.
Alexia should end up preggers by gym guy player...he he. Neighbor creep dude will risjpk knocking her up, I don't think.

 

[DIRTY FILTHY Animal]

The next update, Taylor Swift shows up, and ruins everything, game over, noO pussy.

gotta admit it would be funny if she wrote a song about this game

 

[david449]

I'd prefer Anna with a bush. She's a lonely wife and new mom. She probably wouldn't take care of things down there these days. Too busy with the baby and work. Plus barely any sex. Although it might change later. Wonder if Mr Palmer is thinking to start her off untrimmed then go to shaved. Maybe depends on the artist he hired too.

A great sense, we love to see this.

 

[Sadowdark]

Mr. Palmer



Maybe I can have you pick some outfits or hairstyles for Anna. Monday wouldn't be the right day to offer that, because I already have Anna's look planned with a purpose. And no - I'm not saying she's going to dress provocatively on Monday - but perhaps some things will happen on Monday that prompt her to start dressing more daring as the week goes on?

I hate surveys in games because customers always choose crappy things. And then I have to tolerate it, their bad choice. . The survey was supposed to help the creator, but it's a draw and how can both sides be satisfied? The poll is a draw and the creator has a hard time, he usually gives up after a draw because he doesn't know what to do ?

 

[Sadowdark]

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If any advice is of any use is the character Marvin and how he interacts with Anna. There are plenty of ways to move Marvin more into a plausible relationship with Anna. As I look at the game play, Anna is motivated between being a good wife to either being naughty or submissive. And it seems to track that Anna and Marvin are more naughtiness pathway, and having Marvin begging for treats rules out submission. However, with a slight toning of Marvin's behavior (boldness) and Anna intending to be a harmless tease to give an old man a thrill keeps the plausibility of the relationship valid. And I think that "harmless teasing" that things get out of hand that borders both naughty and submission is a better Anna and Marvin interaction.

Old Fish Marvin is a sex offender who faces a long prison sentence for his crimes. And a relationship with Anna is not at all suitable - he will blackmail her with compromising materials that he collects. It's like kissing a black mamba and asking for trouble.

 

[hzjujk]

Old Fish Marvin is a sex offender who faces a long prison sentence for his crimes. And a relationship with Anna is not at all suitable - he will blackmail her with compromising materials that he collects. It's like kissing a black mamba and asking for trouble.

I'm not sure if the blackmail would work. As you said, Marvin is a convicted sex offender. Although he can blackmail Anna, his position is weak due to his criminal record.
I think he can push Anna in the right (his) direction with one or two hints, but if he overdoes it he'll be out of the window faster than the old guy can put his cock back in his pants.
I think it's more believable if Anna thinks that she can control the situation and always be the one on top because of her background.
And after he fucks her for the first time and makes Marvin feel like he's still in control, blackmail isn't necessary.

 

[Sadowdark]

I'm not sure if the blackmail would work. As you said, Marvin is a convicted sex offender. Although he can blackmail Anna, his position is weak due to his criminal record.
I think he can push Anna in the right (his) direction with one or two hints, but if he overdoes it he'll be out of the window faster than the old guy can put his cock back in his pants.
I think it's more believable if Anna thinks that she can control the situation and always be the one on top because of her background.
And after he fucks her for the first time and makes Marvin feel like he's still in control, blackmail isn't necessary.

But old fish Marvin thinks he will blackmail her , otherwise he wouldn't collect compromising materials and then use them against Anne. For now, they are very weak, but he may get better ones in the future

 

[sonne1999]

gotta admit it would be funny if she wrote a song about this game

As long as I don't have to listen to it then it's a good idea.

 

[garret64]

But old fish Marvin thinks he will blackmail her , otherwise he wouldn't collect compromising materials and then use them against Anne. For now, they are very weak, but he may get better ones in the future

The best blackmail material for Marvin would be if he gets his hands on footage of Hank and Anna that clearly shows Anna engaging in sexual acts.

The worst thing for Anna would be if everyone in the company saw that she had slept her way up.

Anna's personality and narcissism can't allow that in my opinion

 

[arobet33]

Mr Palmer dont talk here, first sneak peek please !

 

[Eye-switcher]

Can we please get the action going, this is getting ridiculous, we know she has hormone problems, from her point of view she has gotten lied to , cheated on, what its gonna take? an asteroid to the head? get on it with it!!!

 

[xert13]

Can we please get the action going, this is getting ridiculous, we know she has hormone problems, from her point of view she has gotten lied to , cheated on, what its gonna take? an asteroid to the head? get on it with it!!!

Patience Grasshopper. Just think how satisfying it will be if/when she strays?

 

[mulerider]

Can we please get the action going, this is getting ridiculous, we know she has hormone problems, from her point of view she has gotten lied to , cheated on, what its gonna take? an asteroid to the head? get on it with it!!!

Its how they make money, prolong it for 10 years

 

[deadh30775n]

Can we please get the action going, this is getting ridiculous, we know she has hormone problems, from her point of view she has gotten lied to , cheated on, what its gonna take? an asteroid to the head? get on it with it!!!

Aphrodisiacs can speed up the progress

 

[Christ P Bacon]

Can we please get the action going, this is getting ridiculous, we know she has hormone problems, from her point of view she has gotten lied to , cheated on, what its gonna take? an asteroid to the head? get on it with it!!!

nah, you need to wait until all male npc and the dog in this game jerk off to anna picture at their phone

 

[TammyVeriyan]

Its how they make money, prolong it for 10 years

Thats what some do. But i dont think this game gonna be like that. Lingerie shopping with Jake, Pool time with Marvin alone, meeting with that Oldman these things gonna be hot for sure.. Sophi… ahm hmm… Some Female MC get to this point after 6 years of development.

 

[DarthSpitz717]

The Marvin/Anna dynamic needs a fix. She needs to be the one dictating. Have her want to be a tease, otherwise it gets to the point where he's the one groping her without her consent (at least initially). Then it falls into a submission route for her if she agrees to go further after he started, which was not whats stated for the in game chart. She needs to be the one teasing him. Like it says in the Stats: Anna either enjoys toying with Marvin or not. So if we have selected the toy with Marvin path, she needs to be the one instigating the action.

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This Marvin and Anna relationship is the most complicated of all the routes. And by complicated, I mean difficult to nail down to have a good story.

"Have her want to be a tease, otherwise it gets to the point where he's the one groping her without her consent (at least initially)." Yes, as I said a bank robber doesn't ask the bank if he can rob it. But it comes down to two things about Anna's thinking and character build. I suggested Anna see Marvin as being harmless old "flirt," with puppy love and Anna humors him with teasing thus, allowing Marvin to get in close. Well Marvin already crossed the Rubicon and Anna is on to him based on this latest release. However, Anna's main character issue is being naive and trusting. Second is Anna's inexperience in life. Her whole world is upside down and under great pressures from work and life.

Things that affect Anna is her past. First an overbearing father demanding perfection from Anna. Her father dominated her forcing her into being submissive to gain his approval. She lived more in fear of her father's disapproval then having a loving relationship. So overwhelmed, Anna turned toward Grant for emotional support and trusted him.

"Then it falls into a submission route ..." The only one Anna, "She needs to be the one dictating" is David. But Anna is already submissive by nature-- it was how she was brought up. David is different because Anna trusts him and he isn't controlling and dominating, meaning David is "safe." With Marvin there is a possible trap of Anna's own making waiting for her. The trap is first letting Marvin get too close to her and the second how her body reacts favorably to Marvin as if it's a form of punishment for being a naughty girl.

To correct the Marvin/Anna path, the story needs a more treacherous and devious Marvin. By now Marvin knows what Kendra is up too and can't really trust Kendra. Marvin sees what's going on in the office and it wouldn't take long before Marvin sees how she is trying to maneuver Jake to be the one to get Anna. With that in mind Marvin is just as likely to get dirt on Kendra (hidden cameras, installing spyware on her work computer, following her and taking pictures...etc.) Also, Marvin would seek to eliminate Jake as a rival. Perhaps get information on Jake to give to Hank. From a game designing point of view certain actions Marvin takes could trigger events. It's also a good device the developer can use for players to save the marriage when all the villains are tripping over themselves to undermine Anna.

lastly, ever notice in the story Anna doesn't have any real friends? Normally the bridesmaid in their wedding is the best friend. Anna doesn't and has clung on to Kendra to be that friend. Going back to Anna's you with a dominating father such close friends are hard to have. Now Anna has a friend and is trying to win Kendra's approval, even though what Anna is doing goes against her better nature.

 

[Scotty Doesn't Know]

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This Marvin and Anna relationship is the most complicated of all the routes. And by complicated, I mean difficult to nail down to have a good story.

"Have her want to be a tease, otherwise it gets to the point where he's the one groping her without her consent (at least initially)." Yes, as I said a bank robber doesn't ask the bank if he can rob it. But it comes down to two things about Anna's thinking and character build. I suggested Anna see Marvin as being harmless old "flirt," with puppy love and Anna humors him with teasing thus, allowing Marvin to get in close. Well Marvin already crossed the Rubicon and Anna is on to him based on this latest release. However, Anna's main character issue is being naive and trusting. Second is Anna's inexperience in life. Her whole world is upside down and under great pressures from work and life.

Things that affect Anna is her past. First an overbearing father demanding perfection from Anna. Her father dominated her forcing her into being submissive to gain his approval. She lived more in fear of her father's disapproval then having a loving relationship. So overwhelmed, Anna turned toward Grant for emotional support and trusted him.

"Then it falls into a submission route ..." The only one Anna, "She needs to be the one dictating" is David. But Anna is already submissive by nature-- it was how she was brought up. David is different because Anna trusts him and he isn't controlling and dominating, meaning David is "safe." With Marvin there is a possible trap of Anna's own making waiting for her. The trap is first letting Marvin get too close to her and the second how her body reacts favorably to Marvin as if it's a form of punishment for being a naughty girl.

To correct the Marvin/Anna path, the story needs a more treacherous and devious Marvin. By now Marvin knows what Kendra is up too and can't really trust Kendra. Marvin sees what's going on in the office and it wouldn't take long before Marvin sees how she is trying to maneuver Jake to be the one to get Anna. With that in mind Marvin is just as likely to get dirt on Kendra (hidden cameras, installing spyware on her work computer, following her and taking pictures...etc.) Also, Marvin would seek to eliminate Jake as a rival. Perhaps get information on Jake to give to Hank. From a game designing point of view certain actions Marvin takes could trigger events. It's also a good device the developer can use for players to save the marriage when all the villains are tripping over themselves to undermine Anna.

lastly, ever notice in the story Anna doesn't have any real friends? Normally the bridesmaid in their wedding is the best friend. Anna doesn't and has clung on to Kendra to be that friend. Going back to Anna's you with a dominating father such close friends are hard to have. Now Anna has a friend and is trying to win Kendra's approval, even though what Anna is doing goes against her better nature.

There is also Kendra in Anna's ear making her want to do naughty things. So eventually we will see Anna want to be more daring and be the one who starts off as the instigator. Whether thats with Marvin or others who knows. Marvin may become more devious, or he could just be a tool in the game for Anna to gain more confidence teasing men. Hes only done very small things so far. You seem to think he's on a blackmail route in the future, I'm not so sure... Maybe.
Yes I've said that previously about Anna having no female friends. Its what Mr Palmer has orchestrated so she will only have Kendra to rely on & guide her.

 

[DarthSpitz717]

There is also Kendra in Anna's ear making her want to do naughty things. So eventually we will see Anna want to be more daring and be the one who starts off as the instigator. Whether thats with Marvin or others who knows. Marvin may become more devious, or he could just be a tool in the game for Anna to gain more confidence teasing men. Hes only done very small things so far. You seem to think he's on a blackmail route in the future, I'm not so sure... Maybe.
Yes I've said that previously about Anna having no female friends. Its what Mr Palmer has orchestrated so she will only have Kendra to rely on & guide her.

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Actually, I am thinking Marvin will continue to try to get away with as much as he can with Anna.

What I am suggesting is Marvin to become more devious with everyone around him. I can't see a way Marvin can get any blackmail on Anna. Likely Marvin doesn't want to risk upsetting Anna trying to blackmail her. But he certainly can with Kendra. Kendra's mistake was taking Marvin into her plans against Anna because it tips her hand. And it's that information Marvin has about Kendra that might motivate Marvin to "get an insurance policy" against Kendra.

Already Marvin and Jake are at odds. But Jake is a pretty boy and likely Marvin has been hearing rumors about him and may even see Jake's efforts to woo Anna. So Marvin has motivation to deal with Jake.

Now likely coming into the story are more attacks on Anna. Kendra isn't just going to try and destroy Anna with her relationship. Kendra from the beginning though that she deserved to have Anna's job. So I suspect Kendra will secretly try and sabotage a project Anna is working on. And here Marvin can play the ends against the middle and save Anna getting him into her good graces.

Right now Marvin is too simple a character and has the hardest uphill climb to get Anna and he knows it. The best plan for Marvin to make sure he is in first position with Anna. The only real problem Marvin isn't aware of is Chris-- unless the developer introduces Chris and Marvin. Considering Marvin is a lowlife, its likely he might have other lowlife friends that may help him.