VN Ren'Py A Perfect Marriage [v0.7.3b] [Mr Palmer]

[peanutpeanut]

Thx for update.
Best game

 

[robrize2169]

gotta hand it to Janet aka Kendra aka Loonie Cunt. she sure has thought of everything so far. David can't even get an opportunity to see her at the office since he has to be allowed in at the front desk. and having the gym trainer call Anna with even more lies was a big blow to David's attempts to prove his innocence. the odds are stacking up against him. which is why it was a welcome sight to see David and Anna block Chris from gaining access to their bedroom again. seeing him all pissed off as he walks away there was sweet poetic justice to me.
haven't played the cheating path part of the update yet..but..it's on my to do list..
#DEATHTOCHRIS

 

[curioushub]

perfect

 

[TheUnDoge]

Great stuff keep it up!..my fave VN on the Citadel

 

[Freedom9555]

I hope there's an ending where Anna ends up with Chris and they get married!

I hope, he gets the dog shit beaten out of him.

But we have to wait and see.

 

[chocolatemoli]

The first gf character in ntr game made me feel disgusted and annoyed, maybe it's more like reality instead of a porn game.

 

[thatoneguy543w745387]

wait, you mean not a slutty whore that flirts and will most likely be sucking dick thats not her husbands.... well in like 3 years at this rate? Or do you mean totally slutty, fucks everyone she meets 2 days after getting married. People do have different ideas about what a perfect wife would be.

they need to bring back the facepalm emoji

 

[TeamEquipe]

This is a forum, people exchange their opinions about vns and also the behavior of devs. 5 months for a shower scene is too much, period!
Silly fanboys like you get all agitated when criticized. But that's your problem, not mine. I have a full time job and a family myself btw.
And if this dev really has got a family, I wonder why he is so absolutely clueless about mothers with babies in his writing?

Anyway TeamEquipe I don't think you're capable of criticism in general, which you already showed when I dared to criticize the plot holes in your original story, right here in this thread, but a long time ago. That's quite immature of you. Hence I'm not wasting my time with your agitated rant. You weren't able to counter even a single of my points of criticism.
Instead you come up with the typical reaction of pouting children.

Agitated rant - don't make me laugh.
I realise the time scale of production is entirely your opinion, but at least base it on some kind of knowledge of what it entails.
How do you know how long it would or should take, if you've never done it yourself?

And as for me, I've been submitting stories to Literotica for over 10 years, so I certainly know how to take criticism and abuse.
Sadly, I have no recollection of your criticism on this thread about the plot holes in my story, it is quite possible that I missed it as I don't spend a lot of time on here, so maybe you'd like to find it and send it to me?

 

[xert13]

Loved the update. Nice slow boil. When the payoff comes it will be epic (I hope.)

 

[Deleted member 6573146]

I've got to agree with some other users, the update was short for 5 months of waiting. Either this dev isn't time efficient at all or he likes to idle in between. Given the fact, that someone else is doing the art for him (including time consuming rendering), it makes me wonder even more.

Still it's a turning point and I really hope for the sake of this vn, that updates from now on will include optional escalations between Anna and one of the many pursuers/predators. It was possible to reject Chris in this update, which is fine, while all others could finally get a glimpse of some action after years of absurd teasing.



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Anna's all natural very much realistic tits were absolutely gorgeous in my opinion. Great shape, tear drop, lovely areolas and nipples at the right anatomically correct spot (lower third of the breast, so many other artists do that wrong or just recreate the ugly silicone/fake tits look). The very erotic slight sagging is also hyper realistic, if you take the cup size into consideration, her age (close to 30) and breastfeeding her child. I really loved her tits in this update.

Mr. Palmer's hired artist did a wonderful job with Anna's breasts. It was about time to finally show these beauties!

Although her hips and waist could have been a little bit wider, after having given birth.

I was not so happy about her very artificial looking pubes. This very thin landing strip is maintenance heavy, because it needs to be trimmed regularly and the surroundings need to be shaved, causing itchiness sooner or later. (Trimming is quickly done, but a combination of trimming and shaving takes time, especially if you want it to look symmetric)

I had hoped for a trimmed triangle (easy to maintain with a long hair trimmer) or a more natural small mommy's bush or something like that, after all she's a career woman, has got a baby to take care of and on top of it marriage problems. But still she looks like a single woman between her legs... So having such care (and therefore time) intensive pubes doesn't make much sense for me in her situation. In fact having a baby alone is such a challenging and time consuming task, that most moms just have to cut corners somewhere.



Indeed, the story does have plot holes and ISN'T that much realistic as some people claim. This most recent update once again involuntarily spotlighted it.

It's very much astonishing, not to say unbelievable, how Kendra manages to control all people around her and makes them do exactly what she wants. Not only all the gym employees do exactly what she wants, now also the receptionist woman in the office... even Jake, Marvin and Anna dance after her pipe to some degree. Surely there are highly manipulative individuals in this world, but still Kendra seems to top them all. Even getting away with threatening people at gun point... I don’t consider this to be realistic, sorry.



True, that bothered me too. Rob and Anna were way too friendly with each other all of a sudden.

Additionally there were some other minor issues concerning realism:

If Anna is breastfeeding, her nipples would be most likely sore. So Chris squeezing her sore nipples under the shower would have been a rather unpleasant experience for Anna, instead of being turned on. That's once again porn logic at work.

It's also very much unrealistic that their baby sleeps peacefully the whole night, never wakes up and doesn’t rob David & Anna of their sleep as it would be totally normal. Also Anna doesn't seem to breastfeed her baby in the morning before going to work...

Or that Anna drinks alcohol despite breastfeeding (not in this update, although Chis tried to convince her to drink during dinner, but during the one with Kendra, Jake and Marvin, where the latter groped her under the table).

Anyway I hope the just teasing and hiding behind the excuse of realism bullshit belongs to the past from now on! There is plenty of porn logic at work already. Some people just don't want to realize it or don't want their illusions about this vn destroyed.
This doesn't mean that Anna should just jump on everybody's cock from now on. Progress, build-up and escalations between characters should still be believable ofc. But each update from now on should have at least one optional erotic scene between characters.

At this point i like your writing more than palmer's lol

 

[D2taA]

A fellow man of many words, lol. I like it.

So, as far as the big scene goes I have made my feelings known already. I would only add as a direct relay to your take that I see what you mean but also think it could (should) be something else. To
*This is all from the unfaithful or promiscuous route perspective, btw*

First, in actual life that would have 100% led to sex. In no actual situation would that go down as shown and it not lead to at least getting head. No disagreement there at all and I even said as much.
I just also think in the grand scheme it's fine to have kept it at what it was. No believable in an IRL way but close enough to be above-average in a porn story.

The final point I'd share is that I think it could be and SHOULD be a sign that Anna has officially crossed a line with Chris. No more pussyfooting or pretending to not want it. She does and should fully believe David cheated, want a little revenge and realize/admit that she does find him attractive.
This scene, IMO, said that blatantly so going back on that would be insane. It would be a sign of milking at worst and awful writing at best.

Even if she takes David back or believes him or whatever else, her relationship with Chris is forever changed. That can't be undone.

The only lines left are with the other men and I won't speculate where or how those should go as no lines have been crossed with them as of now.

Well if David does come back she'll tell him bout what happened with Chris. And he want be seen again, so basically he traded his friendship to try n get a piece of ass. Even if they divorced, he wouldn't be around that long, he'd a rebound dude n after a few months she'd tire of him.

 

[slavegal]

Seems everything is built on the stupidity of the couple

 

[TheUberstuff]

they need to bring back the facepalm emoji

I mean, your not wrong but what does that have to do with my post?

 

[Rabonixxx]

I don´t know what to say, game is perfect, one of the best NTR I played (and I played many). I had emotions and that gut feeling all the time practically. I like NTR or cheating when MC is a moron.

Here is not the case, one of the first time I want to save the MC, especially for the situation and the family stuff; would be interesting too that the brainplotter had some karma.

 

[TheUberstuff]

I don´t know what to say, game is perfect, one of the best NTR I played (and I played many). I had emotions and that gut feeling all the time practically. I like NTR or cheating when MC is a moron.

Here is not the case, one of the first time I want to save the MC, especially for the situation and the family stuff; would be interesting too that the brainplotter had some karma.

It is so far from perfect I don't know what to say about your taste in games. Now this one is about as close as you can get to perfect.

https://f95zone.to/threads/the-office-wife-v0-91-hotfix1-j-s-deacon.44541/

 

[Rabonixxx]

It is so far from perfect I don't know what to say about your taste in games.

I mean, was a way of talking man, obviously the perfect game doesn´t exist, but I´m tired of dumb NTR that does not make any sense practically. Here is builded up and you decide if want or not to do it.

About the taste, well, I play practically all games hahahahaha, I just enjoy Devs work

 

[robrize2169]

i am getting off on having Anna cockblock all the pathetic losers chasing her. sure David is a moron, but he is a good guy and is surrounded by cunts trying to steal his wife. and now that Darren has said it out loud, David is beginning to wonder about his so called best friend's intentions with his wife. starting to notice that Chris is not really being that helpful. and hopefully this leads to David discovering that Chris sent Anna pics of his dancing with Alexia which began Anna questing whether David was cheating or not. certainly not helping his friend in any way. there has to be a time when David will check Chris' phone and see the text history with Anna, including the pics of her in lingerie. especially since i believe Chris was using one as his screen photo. that would be a good way for David to discover it. Chris is out of the room, left his phone there, receives a text, it lights up and Anna's pic is there, David sees it, picks the phone up..and Nuclear Explosion is ignited..i could continue, but think i will leave it there.
#DEATHTOCHRIS

 

[TheUberstuff]

I mean, was a way of talking man, obviously the perfect game doesn´t exist, but I´m tired of dumb NTR that does not make any sense practically. Here is builded up and you decide if want or not to do it.

About the taste, well, I play practically all games hahahahaha, I just enjoy Devs work

True enough, I started off liking this game and while I do enjoy some slow burn games this one is boring me to tears with how long and drawn out it is with almost nothing happening for a long time. In my view you need a balance or people will get sick of the slowness. Clearly there are people here who like the game but I am no longer one of them.

 

[Shrimpotato23]

Jesus, i almost forgot this game existed

 

[TheUberstuff]

Just wanna express my disappointment of the abandoned sexting buildup, again.

man, so many naughty things could've happened, Anna shouldn't ignore Chris' text on Chris Path.
and when David insist on sleep in bed, Anna could've got pissed and said, "fine, I will sleep on the couch." right? then start sexting. (she needs to masturbate to sleep well anyway).
or like I share my vision earlier, she sexts Chris and then go send nudes in the washroom, and she can masturbate there fully naked after sending nudes.

The Dev already built up the "send nudes" thing to 80% previously for years, so when it's at 100% the nude selfie reveal should be HUGE and this would absolutely elevate the shower scene, but pffff, he threw it away.

Again, the Dev's been building up the sexting for years, to what end? ... ... ...

I hope god tells the Dev, add the sexting the night before the shower as a Chris special in the future, to complete Chris Path.

Honestly that is a real issue, making people wait who are on a specific path and then jerking them around after they have spent who knows how much time is a real jerk thing for the dev to do. I was already sick of the game myself anyways but if I had spent a ton of time and got next to nothing for it I would be pissed.