Jess2001

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we need your beautiful and touching story, I can't do it anymore, I can't live on your literature, I need my dose, if you want I'll pay you. :cry: :cry: :cry: :cry: :cry: :cry:
No payment required. This is free :) But I must also say that my interest in this story is decreasing day by day... Too many unnecessary characters added. Chris, Jack, Hank, and Marvin's paths would suffice. It's okay for the actions in the story to be delayed... But if she's going to have something with someone, I'd rather the plot be well-designed. Like the war going on inside her and why she lost it. I didn't like that she turned into public property in one day.
 

secretcador

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No payment required. This is free :) But I must also say that my interest in this story is decreasing day by day... Too many unnecessary characters added. Chris, Jack, Hank, and Marvin's paths would suffice. It's okay for the actions in the story to be delayed... But if she's going to have something with someone, I'd rather the plot be well-designed. Like the war going on inside her and why she lost it. I didn't like that she turned into public property in one day.
"She's a whore" is the easiest explanation for whatever she do in the future, hence the public groping is crucial in order to whorewash whatever she's doing. If a random person can touch her, that means anything that move can eventually grope and do her, "Nothing personal she's just a whore".
 

Krat0$

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Since this route anna is supposed to be more doubtful about he whole cheating thing, it could be scenes like dinner and them trying to understand each other just a little, maybe there are moments of taking care of their baby together, etc. It doesn't have to be full sex till the end, since she might be a little doubtful, but dev could of shown some moments like this since anna is supposed to be more trusting of David, but no dev is liar and will never give this route anything, I guess.
just watch rom com my guy.
This game ain't for you.
 

Sadowdark

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I just wanted David to come in and see this whore giving his best friend the blowjob she always denied him!

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She hates giving blowjobs when someone forces her to, she broke up with her boyfriend because he kept forcing Anna to give blowjobs. David should wait and stand in front of her with his penis and wait patiently, and Anna will gladly give him a blowjob:love:. Because when no one forces her, she gladly gives blowjobs and is happy, especially since she suddenly became an expert (like a cheap, experienced, paid whore in a dirty alley), since she recently started practicing on the banana.:eek::ROFLMAO:
 
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L0b0ts

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Anna may admit one day that she gave Chris a blowjob if David gets aggressive enough. In reality a very beautiful women may have a great personality as well, but an overbearing boyfriend like David cause them to question themselves and crushes their personality and creativity, it's like not like this, do it like this, etc and constantly. the women really likes the guy like Anna likes David so they put up with it like Anna puts up with David and now she is going on her revenge streak rampage and he is getting worse like charging into her office and carrying on about Hank the Tank even though Hank saved his fathers business.
 
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Adhdclassic

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Basically floor bj she is not heavily corrupted, Car bj she is highly corrupted. interesting weak david car bj, balanced david floor bj.
 

Adhdclassic

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Except your forgetting David never got a bj from Alexia, just because Anna believes he did and everybody is lying to her telling her this doesn’t mean he got one
Yea I was just acknowledging how davids actions choose type of bj. If he is a weak man she goes in the car and does it happily. Where if he has some sort of backbone she does it on the floor with some reluctance. I do like the version where she can choose to do it or not just like in the shower it shows internal conflict.
 

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Warning: This is even longer than a DarthSpitz717 comment lol.

I wasn't sure what to make of this update. Parts were great, parts were bad and everything inbetween. I don't know why the dialogue, internal monologues and narrator speech is so simple and as if every little thing needs to be explained, like it's written for children to understand. I saw a little bit of this in the previous update but now it's constant. Anna's internal thoughts are always shown, even when in conversation with others for no reason. We can already see how she's acting. No need to write each emotion she's feeling every second line. Mr Palmer originally never wrote like this and even in his Literotica short was much more nuanced with smarter writing. Is he actually still writing this? To me it seems completely opposite from before, when he did such an amazing job of plot development and conveying great emotions through characters. This new style reminds me of how European devs write the dialogue for their VNs. By over explaining things which are already obvious. Exposition dialogue is shown so blatantly, not even tried to blend in with conversation. Even the previous built up reasoning behind characters actions and some plot points have been thrown to the side with no care. I'm hoping that the worst hasn't happened!

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Scotty, never a good idea to invoke the Spitz :devilish:

Finally had time to play through the update and I don't know what to think. About every prediction I've made was totally wrong. More am I surprised at how fast and far Mr. Palmer moved the story and plots along as well as what he added to the mix.

The Add

So lactation was added to the story (sort of) to round out Anna's situation. Minor note but it does flesh out Anna being a new mom and it could be expanded on in the kink area or just a tool as it was in this release. A huge plot development was how Anna went off on Marvin. How will MP resurrect the Anna/Marvin path after Anna has gone nuclear on him-- near on path ending. Sure down the road an Anna in a better mood could use some little facts that she knows Marvin has a key to the breast pumping room, and or Anna can torture Marvin in making him beg for forgiveness, but that leaves a lot of plausibility problems.

Yawn Fest :sleep:

So I played the Jake path just to see it and wasn't disappointed in a good way. The twist was a bit of what now is going to be part of the troupes cock worship. Not only with Jake, but somewhat with Robinson nearly having his junk in Anna's face during the massage, and of course with Chris (surprise, surprise, NOT!), though the BJ occurred soon than I expected it. Sigh... again most women are not into how the dick looks or see it as the Holy Rod of God but take interest in it for what it can do. Now on it's going to be commentary from Anna how so-and-so stacks up against David in size. The best part out of all this is Anna recognizing Chris has more staying power than David-- now when the story gets to the pipe laying events and techniques are compared then the story starts to fall back into reality.

Ka-Blam!

What the Hell! Timothy and Dale scene was the best part of the whole release. Not that two randos whom we are likely never to see again got in a good ass grope of Anna, and Anna was in total character being too aroused and letting it go too far. A bit of a taste with it with Robinson. Anna being dominated and objectifying makes sense of her character fits all the other content previously and makes total sense of the Chris/Anna shower scene.

Cock Blocking

David threatening to come over to Robinson's house knowing she is there... now that was surprising. Sad it ended the scene but in a long list of stupid tags you can put on David that one was the second most devastating to his marriage. So now we have a panty-sniffer- nude-pic collector. The deal Chris struck with Leanard pretty much rules out Leanard from the running, so it's going to be dueling cocks between Robinson and Chris while those to great friends (sic) shaft David over his wife.

David, all hail the idiot king

This post could be just on the Idiot King alone! If there was a book "Pissing off your wife for dummies," David wrote it. Bad enough Anna is leaning on cold calculations and contingencies for the worst, but Sophie-blackmail...WTF. Sure it's not all blackmail directly but putting the idea of shared custody and legal rights when your situation with the wife is perilous to begin with...o_O Compound that with "my wife this," "my wife that" demands as if Anna is an object or possession, David is lucky to not be not sleeping in the backyard in a tent. But... then what one would expect of David. "Careful of the company you keep," never a cautionary tale David lived by. Everyone of his friends is a POS. That is more a David thing. A pile of dog turds in a yard can't help but be s***. But going forward for any of those playing to save the marriage, how does MP recover the marriage while David is pouring gas on his bridges to Anna, and Anna is reaching for the match herself!
 

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Scotty, never a good idea to invoke the Spitz :devilish:

Finally had time to play through the update and I don't know what to think. About every prediction I've made was totally wrong. More am I surprised at how fast and far Mr. Palmer moved the story and plots along as well as what he added to the mix.

The Add

So lactation was added to the story (sort of) to round out Anna's situation. Minor note but it does flesh out Anna being a new mom and it could be expanded on in the kink area or just a tool as it was in this release. A huge plot development was how Anna went off on Marvin. How will MP resurrect the Anna/Marvin path after Anna has gone nuclear on him-- near on path ending. Sure down the road an Anna in a better mood could use some little facts that she knows Marvin has a key to the breast pumping room, and or Anna can torture Marvin in making him beg for forgiveness, but that leaves a lot of plausibility problems.

Yawn Fest :sleep:

So I played the Jake path just to see it and wasn't disappointed in a good way. The twist was a bit of what now is going to be part of the troupes cock worship. Not only with Jake, but somewhat with Robinson nearly having his junk in Anna's face during the massage, and of course with Chris (surprise, surprise, NOT!), though the BJ occurred soon than I expected it. Sigh... again most women are not into how the dick looks or see it as the Holy Rod of God but take interest in it for what it can do. Now on it's going to be commentary from Anna how so-and-so stacks up against David in size. The best part out of all this is Anna recognizing Chris has more staying power than David-- now when the story gets to the pipe laying events and techniques are compared then the story starts to fall back into reality.

Ka-Blam!

What the Hell! Timothy and Dale scene was the best part of the whole release. Not that two randos whom we are likely never to see again got in a good ass grope of Anna, and Anna was in total character being too aroused and letting it go too far. A bit of a taste with it with Robinson. Anna being dominated and objectifying makes sense of her character fits all the other content previously and makes total sense of the Chris/Anna shower scene.

Cock Blocking

David threatening to come over to Robinson's house knowing she is there... now that was surprising. Sad it ended the scene but in a long list of stupid tags you can put on David that one was the second most devastating to his marriage. So now we have a panty-sniffer- nude-pic collector. The deal Chris struck with Leanard pretty much rules out Leanard from the running, so it's going to be dueling cocks between Robinson and Chris while those to great friends (sic) shaft David over his wife.

David, all hail the idiot king

This post could be just on the Idiot King alone! If there was a book "Pissing off your wife for dummies," David wrote it. Bad enough Anna is leaning on cold calculations and contingencies for the worst, but Sophie-blackmail...WTF. Sure it's not all blackmail directly but putting the idea of shared custody and legal rights when your situation with the wife is perilous to begin with...o_O Compound that with "my wife this," "my wife that" demands as if Anna is an object or possession, David is lucky to not be not sleeping in the backyard in a tent. But... then what one would expect of David. "Careful of the company you keep," never a cautionary tale David lived by. Everyone of his friends is a POS. That is more a David thing. A pile of dog turds in a yard can't help but be s***. But going forward for any of those playing to save the marriage, how does MP recover the marriage while David is pouring gas on his bridges to Anna, and Anna is reaching for the match herself!
Yeah I agree about Marvin, he really fucked it up and the new Timothy and Dale storyline is taking the game next level and they know to shut up about it or ruin it with Anna. I would more say Anna is a size Queen, than cock worship, she isn't obsessed with cock but she likes bigger size and as her journey progresses she will experience bigger and bigger cock and Chris will be left in the wake.
 
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Sadowdark

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Scotty, never a good idea to invoke the Spitz :devilish:

Finally had time to play through the update and I don't know what to think. About every prediction I've made was totally wrong. More am I surprised at how fast and far Mr. Palmer moved the story and plots along as well as what he added to the mix.

The Add

So lactation was added to the story (sort of) to round out Anna's situation. Minor note but it does flesh out Anna being a new mom and it could be expanded on in the kink area or just a tool as it was in this release. A huge plot development was how Anna went off on Marvin. How will MP resurrect the Anna/Marvin path after Anna has gone nuclear on him-- near on path ending. Sure down the road an Anna in a better mood could use some little facts that she knows Marvin has a key to the breast pumping room, and or Anna can torture Marvin in making him beg for forgiveness, but that leaves a lot of plausibility problems.

Yawn Fest :sleep:

So I played the Jake path just to see it and wasn't disappointed in a good way. The twist was a bit of what now is going to be part of the troupes cock worship. Not only with Jake, but somewhat with Robinson nearly having his junk in Anna's face during the massage, and of course with Chris (surprise, surprise, NOT!), though the BJ occurred soon than I expected it. Sigh... again most women are not into how the dick looks or see it as the Holy Rod of God but take interest in it for what it can do. Now on it's going to be commentary from Anna how so-and-so stacks up against David in size. The best part out of all this is Anna recognizing Chris has more staying power than David-- now when the story gets to the pipe laying events and techniques are compared then the story starts to fall back into reality.

Ka-Blam!

What the Hell! Timothy and Dale scene was the best part of the whole release. Not that two randos whom we are likely never to see again got in a good ass grope of Anna, and Anna was in total character being too aroused and letting it go too far. A bit of a taste with it with Robinson. Anna being dominated and objectifying makes sense of her character fits all the other content previously and makes total sense of the Chris/Anna shower scene.

Cock Blocking

David threatening to come over to Robinson's house knowing she is there... now that was surprising. Sad it ended the scene but in a long list of stupid tags you can put on David that one was the second most devastating to his marriage. So now we have a panty-sniffer- nude-pic collector. The deal Chris struck with Leanard pretty much rules out Leanard from the running, so it's going to be dueling cocks between Robinson and Chris while those to great friends (sic) shaft David over his wife.

David, all hail the idiot king

This post could be just on the Idiot King alone! If there was a book "Pissing off your wife for dummies," David wrote it. Bad enough Anna is leaning on cold calculations and contingencies for the worst, but Sophie-blackmail...WTF. Sure it's not all blackmail directly but putting the idea of shared custody and legal rights when your situation with the wife is perilous to begin with...o_O Compound that with "my wife this," "my wife that" demands as if Anna is an object or possession, David is lucky to not be not sleeping in the backyard in a tent. But... then what one would expect of David. "Careful of the company you keep," never a cautionary tale David lived by. Everyone of his friends is a POS. That is more a David thing. A pile of dog turds in a yard can't help but be s***. But going forward for any of those playing to save the marriage, how does MP recover the marriage while David is pouring gas on his bridges to Anna, and Anna is reaching for the match herself!
You forgot about the scenes in Penguin's office, buddy.
 
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