That's a whole lot of words to say, "I prefer shorter, punchier stories, I think you should write more short sex stories and less longer ones." Though I must give you credit, your attempt at influencing the developer was more articulately written then most of the posts from a very vocal minority clogging up damn near every page of this discussion thread.-snip-
I must point out though, everything you talked about is personal preference or vague doomsaying about a single unfinished web-story. Length has absolutely nothing to do with quality, whatsoever. Plenty of people love The Wheel of Time because of its meticulous attention to detail and intricate plot with a large, varied cast of characters. Other people think it's boring, and long-winded. And guess what.
That's fine. Both opinions are valid.
What isn't valid is attempting to dress up one's preferences as valid criticism. Because there are people who prefer longer stories will a well-developed plot. So even if the dev decided to listen to you, and completely rewrite the entire game to make it shorter and add more sex earlier, there's people who would be disappointed. Quite possibly more than would be happy about the change, so please, leave the developer to make the game the way they want, and the people who enjoy it as is, in peace.
If people don't enjoy the game because it takes too long to get to the sex, they should go play one of the other THOUSANDS of games on this website that cut to the smut within the first five minutes, and kindly leave those of us who enjoy a good build-up our (very few) slow burns, preferably also without filling Every Single Page of the thread with endless whining that the game isn't to their specific tastes.
TL;DR: Let the man cook. And if you don't like the flavor, go somewhere else, please.