VN Ren'Py A Perfect Marriage [v0.7.5b] [Mr Palmer]

[Spuul]

I just started this game (which should be titled "A Perfect Exposition"), and I don't mind the slow burn, but I'm at the part shortly after David discovers his father's cyber security breach, and holy hell, the entire discussion is nonsensical. None of it is how business works, especially at the scale referenced in the story. It's so ludicrous, that a Nigerian Prince email scam would have been more believable. It completely destroyed what little bit of immersion I had developed during David's story thus far. Does this toy-train email/phishing scam ridiculousness persist as a significant plot device? I really hope not.... Otherwise, I think the game is fair so far with okay character development (even if it's text heavy), though Anna entertaining Chris's messages, pic requests, and advances seems forced and extremely unrealistic, her elevated hormones notwithstanding (which, incidentally, isn't an excuse for being promiscuous; you can be plenty horny, but still not willing to cheat). It's the one aspect that runs counter to the slow pace and Anna's character development. Plus, there are some inconsistencies, like Jake being a seemingly decent guy on the phone to Kendra in the beginning, Kendra's ability to function at a high level in a law office without meds, etc. Then there's the obvious setup by Alexia that's developing even though David's oblivious. Still, I'll keep playing to see how it unfolds before deciding whether to support the dev.

Anyway,

Watch Animal instincts for NTR lol where husband actually enjoyed being cuckold when his friend fuck his wife.

Shannon Whirry was pretty hot back in the day!

 

[ItsNotUs]

Anna turns around and hits him between the eyes, causing all his teeth to fall out and he is covered in blood

 

[Sophisticurves]

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But jokes aside, she did have some serious boobs.

Lol, I've got several kids, girl and a really attractive wife. I'm not your usual internet incel. (Since I've got a real life, I also don't post as often, only when it's serious.) Those fake silicone boobs totally suck and lots of women look like that unfortunately. It's a real turn off. I'll never understand, why these silly women going for implants don't realize it themselves, that almost always too large silicone implants under their skin look and feel bad.
When I saw these gifs I just had to comment, because I'm too much of a natural breast lover.

 

[Rockpaper345]

Mr_Palmer I have got to congratulate ur friend who draws the art.

Best art in all the f95. The expressions re so perfect in all situations.

The expression on Anna's face in this pic is perfect.

Cheers

 

[nexer]

Lol, I've got several kids, girl and a really attractive wife. I'm not ur usual internet incel. Those fake boobs totally suck and lots of women look like that unfortunately. It's a turn off.
When I saw these gifs I just had to comment, because I'm too much of a natural breast lover.

Ginger's a nice girl, but she has an activist side... and every once in a while, the little bully who sleeps inside her wakes up. She broke some of my bones, so .... I know what I'm talking about

 

[Sophisticurves]

Ginger's a nice girl, but she has an activist side... and every once in a while, the little bully who sleeps inside her wakes up. She broke some of my bones, so .... I know what I'm talking about

Activist for what, ugly fake tits? Maybe she feels stepped on her toes, because she got implants herself.

 

[Chaosguy]

Chris the man is back, badder then ever!! hehehe

 

[nexer]

I haven't finished it, but, a dense plot, predictable as to the direction it will go, but whip players up as to the path chosen.
Anna has chinks in her good-girl armor, has had them from the beginning. I don't know if this has been discussed, but could it be possible that Anna was using Jen? A relationship between Chris and a friend of hers would have caused the 2 couples to be even closer, and Anna to have a continuous source, at least of juicy details
Jen would have noticed who Chris is interested in, she wouldn't have conceived that Anna is so blind and disinterested in the interest shown by Chris, and she has turned away from them both, feeling that they are both using her.

 

[nexer]

Activist for what, ugly fake tits? Maybe she feels stepped on her toes, because she got implants herself.

No, she doesn't.

She defends everyone's right to do what they want, and not be shamed/blamed for it. And when her two qualities come together, her comments are kind of ... acidic

 

[Sadowdark]

I haven't finished it, but, a dense plot, predictable as to the direction it will go, but whip players up as to the path chosen.
Anna has chinks in her good-girl armor, has had them from the beginning. I don't know if this has been discussed, but could it be possible that Anna was using Jen? A relationship between Chris and a friend of hers would have caused the 2 couples to be even closer, and Anna to have a continuous source, at least of juicy details
Jen would have noticed who Chris is interested in, she wouldn't have conceived that Anna is so blind and disinterested in the interest shown by Chris, and she has turned away from them both, feeling that they are both using her.

You may be right. I think Anna was fed up with the constant, ineffective advances of Chris, who is only looking for quick sex and is not interested in long-term relationships with girls. She was very tired of this. And she decided to set him up with someone who would take him from her forever. But Chris is a conqueror, he is bored with girls and needs a new girlfriend all the time. And that's why he cheated on Jen.

 

[nexer]

You may be right. I think Anna was fed up with the constant, ineffective advances of Chris, who is only looking for quick sex and is not interested in long-term relationships with girls. She was very tired of this. And she decided to set him up with someone who would take him from her forever. But Chris is a conqueror, he is bored with girls and needs a new girlfriend all the time. And that's why he cheated on Jen.

No. I would go the other way. Anna needs, at least a little gossip, from the other side, the side of a more adventurous life, even if she doesn't admit it. And Chris is the door to that lifestyle.
Not that Anna wanted Chris to settle down, or that wouldn't have been her main intention, but just to keep him around as a source of... spicy things in her life.

 

[ItsNotUs]

Mr_Palmer I have got to congratulate ur friend who draws the art.

Best art in all the f95. The expressions re so perfect in all situations.

The expression on Anna's face in this pic is perfect.

Cheers

 

[Sadowdark]

No. I would go the other way. Anna needs, at least a little gossip, from the other side, the side of a more adventurous life, even if she doesn't admit it. And Chris is the door to that lifestyle.
Not that Anna wanted Chris to settle down, or that wouldn't have been her main intention, but just to keep him around as a source of... spicy things in her life.

Anna says something like, "hitting on Chris is worth one dollar. If they paid her one dollar a day, she would be a millionaire and wouldn't have to work."

 

[Radnos Salazar]

How long do yall think this game will take to be 100% complete? Anything regarding this disclosed by the dev?

 

[Mr_Palmer]

I just started this game (which should be titled "A Perfect Exposition"), and I don't mind the slow burn, but I'm at the part shortly after David discovers his father's cyber security breach, and holy hell, the entire discussion is nonsensical. None of it is how business works, especially at the scale referenced in the story. It's so ludicrous, that a Nigerian Prince email scam would have been more believable. It completely destroyed what little bit of immersion I had developed during David's story thus far. Does this toy-train email/phishing scam ridiculousness persist as a significant plot device? I really hope not....

Not trying to flame, but please explain what is nonsensical, ludicrous and ridiculous about the phishing scam:
-Darren is tempted by customized email sent to him enticing him to click on a link for his toy train hobby.
-Darren, not being the most tech savvy person and not having good security on his company network, clicks on the link and downloads sophisticated spyware that enables perpetrator access to his system as an administrator (i.e. connect wise).
-Perpetuator studies Darren’s email history to find his frequent customers.
-Perpetuator, acting as Darren as imposter, reaches out to customers asking them to send payment to a new account and to pay now because he needs the money.
-Some customers send payment to new account because Darren’s email looks legit.
-Once Daren discovers this plot, there’s nothing he can do because the fraud account is offshore and has been closed, and since he dropped the ball on getting an insurance policy specific to cyber security that covers him in situations like this, he’s fucked.

If this isn’t realistic please point out why, because I believe this is fairly common, especially when businesses like Darren’s fail to address cyber protection. If I’m completely wrong I’m willing to relook at this scenario in the story because I don’t want to ruin the reader’s immersion by something nonsensical. While I know these scenarios I present aren't perfect (no pun intended), I hope they are pretty close to the mark, and I feel this incident is close to the mark.

I’ll point out, it’s not a major plot point in the story. It’s just one additional layer of shit that happens at the wrong time to enable Kendra’s plot. Even Kendra can't believe how easy it was that Darren foolishly took the bait and didn't have protections in place. And when Darren says "I just want to retire, I'm too old for this stuff" it indicates he's been asleep at the wheel.

Edit: I’ll add, another purpose it serves - David has a choice whether to tell Anna about it. Little does he realize she’d find out from someone else. If he didn’t tell her, Anna isn’t happy. So when he’s accused of cheating on her, it compounds her suspicion that he’s hiding things from her.

 

[Belllm10]

2025 Is the year we'll getting update

 

[DarthSpitz717]

Please explain what is nonsensical, ludicrous and ridiculous about the phishing scam:
-Darren is tempted by customized email sent to him enticing him to click on a link for his toy train hobby.
-Darren, not being the most tech savvy person and not having good security on his company network, clicks on the link and downloads sophisticated spyware that enables perpetrator access to his system as an administrator (i.e. connect wise).
-Perpetuator studies Darren’s email history to find his frequent customers.
-Perpetuator, acting as Darren as imposter, reaches out to customers asking them to send payment to a new account and to pay now because he needs the money.
-Some customers send payment to new account because Darren’s email looks legit.
-Once Daren discovers this plot, there’s nothing he can do because the fraud account is offshore and has been closed, and since he dropped the ball on getting an insurance policy specific to cyber security that covers him in situations like this, he’s fucked.

If this isn’t realistic please point out why, because I believe this is fairly common, especially when businesses like Darren’s fail to address cyber protection. If I’m completely wrong I’m willing to relook at this scenario in the story because I don’t want to ruin the reader’s immersion by something nonsensical.

I’ll point out, it’s not a major plot point in the story. It’s just one additional layer of shit that happens at the wrong time to enable Kendra’s plot.

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"Mr_Palmer, post: 13405184, member: 4960552"]
Please explain what is nonsensical, ludicrous and ridiculous about the phishing scam:
-Darren is tempted by customized email sent to him enticing him to click on a link for his toy train hobby.
-Darren, not being the most tech savvy person and not having good security on his company network, clicks on the link and downloads sophisticated spyware that enables perpetrator access to his system as an administrator (i.e. connect wise).
-Perpetuator studies Darren’s email history to find his frequent customers.
-Perpetuator, acting as Darren as imposter, reaches out to customers asking them to send payment to a new account and to pay now because he needs the money.
-Some customers send payment to new account because Darren’s email looks legit.
-Once Daren discovers this plot, there’s nothing he can do because the fraud account is offshore and has been closed, and since he dropped the ball on getting an insurance policy specific to cyber security that covers him in situations like this, he’s fucked. Nope, this plot thread works well especially if the targeted company is small. It's an account hijack and by the looks of it targeting accounts receivable. Your scammer would first target those accounts that pay electronically--just send new bank routing instructions to the vendor. Further most business have set times they pay their bills mostly toward the end of the month where the money can draw interest from their banks. Second, if the targeted account pays via mail (not that common in today's world), the scammer will know who in that vendor's company handles accounts payable from invoices and email--but with some companies they often contract that out with accounting firms... in either case having access to David's company emails so the scammer knows whom to email or even call (the scammer would just say they are new employee in David's company handling receivables, or mimic the person responsible).

The whole scamming situation would be made far worst if David or his father doesn't do the books on a daily basis. And if David's company uses QuickBooks where the scammer can doctor the accounts to look like business as normal with fraudulent entries would allow the disaster to go on for weeks before being detected.

Now if David's company uses credit cards for most transactions, the company would be fine... but even with VISA and MasterCard debit card accounts tied to the company's bank accounts that would be a disaster. Worst if David's company is old school and uses checks... bank routing number and account number and Ka-Puff! Problem is credit cards charge an interest rate and fee where debit cards act as checks and has a transaction fee.

If this isn’t realistic please point out why, because I believe this is fairly common, especially when businesses like Darren’s fail to address cyber protection. If I’m completely wrong I’m willing to relook at this scenario in the story because I don’t want to ruin the reader’s immersion by something nonsensical. How many players own a business and knows these things or work in financial services? Sure, your game could be all about the hack and would need a lot more details, but it's not. You have a simple enough plausible problem that pushes forward the story's main plots.

I’ll point out, it’s not a major plot point in the story. It’s just one additional layer of shit that happens at the wrong time to enable Kendra’s plot. Inspired by your story, I wrote for another fan on F95 how Grant and Anna's dinner date would go where Grant would win back Anna's trust. Basically, it revolved around an over simplified bunch of technobabble of estate and trusts Grant used to enrich himself and how he would use it to lure back Anna. As well as a spirited rendition of how much a scumbag Grant is while keeping a pleasant face on. The financial world and its inner workings are one of my careers.

 

[nexer]

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[Mr_Palmer]

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That may have been a deleted scene.

 

[BulgariAMARA]

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Anna is very beautiful in this photo.