VN Ren'Py Onhold A Ring or the Shield [Demo BugFixed] [Mr.Nonnypants]

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Mr.Nonnypants

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Jan 13, 2021
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Don't know if this has been pointed out already, but I've seen twice now where the MC is referred to as "MC" instead of the name you give him. I don't know if it does it if you use the default name, because I almost always use my name instead.
Thanks for pointing this out. I will have them fixed now.
 

BK186

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May 18, 2017
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Cecilia's figure is very good. The story is going well. I just think the number of renders is low. MC should also be in control of alternative routes. It can even be part of it.
 

Ithcer

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Jan 21, 2018
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Models look great but the intro is too much words and not much of hints of what content might come. Maybe make the intro skippable for future updates. Also the timed choices were bit too fast to even read the choices. Over all looks good but hope it doesn't take too long to get to corruption scenes with the girls
 

Minheer

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Dec 1, 2021
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Patreon is not in the cards so... No. No patch necessary or even needed at this early in the game. ;)
You are the artist, but giving people the freedom to change non-essential variables like names, relationships, ... is a good way to increase player engagement. Obviously, your vision is what matters.
 

Minheer

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Dec 1, 2021
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Honestly, I just defaulted to BBC because its so common. Though, I am into that stuff.

Interracial is just really broad, y'know. I mean, Asian and Latino IR isn't as common as BBC stuff is. Hell, I've even seen some Muslim IR stuff, but not a lot of it.
I don't know how to create the art, but would it not be pretty straightforward to generate different versions of the protagonist, with varying skin colors. Then everyone can get what they like.
 

Minheer

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Dec 1, 2021
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I will explain the point of the game over mechanic below.
Unfortunately while I did like the Tyrant, I didn't believe the idea that the player character would willingly share the women. However desperate times call for desperate measures.


:WeSmart:
This will not be an interracial focused game but a game with interracial elements.


Thank you for finding this and pointing it out. I will look back through the code to see where I messed up.


Ideas evolve. Things change. :whistle:




The Game Over mechanic is considered a Bad End. This will kick you back to the Main Menu as usually a Bad End occurs because the families cover is blown and so the Accounting Department eliminates the moles. How the eliminate the moles will change based on the choices made in game. All Bad Endings are based on player choices however some are more apparent than others. I wanted this experience to have stakes and therefore choices are important to both the story as well as to the player progression. Make no mistake, this story is set in a dangerous situation and making a major mistake can and will end the mc's life.

The Netorare mechanic is intended as mitigating/corrupting influence depending on the player's decisions. If the cover is damaged by the player decisions then Cecilia will try her best to distract from it. This actions go against her wishes as she is a very loyal and conservative woman however she understands the danger the entire family is in, intimately, and is willing to sacrifice her modesty if it increases the chances of the investigation and keeping everyone safe.

Meta Explanation:
The player choices reflect the story. If the player is extremely good at maintaining their cover then Netorare content will be limited if not excluded entirely. This leaves the player open to engage with the Love Interests that appear in the game without too much interference from the AD.

If the player is not good at maintaining their cover then the Netorare content will appear as a result of Cecilia trying to desperately distract from the player's decisions. Netorare content will increase in spread and scope over time. Keep in mind the Mc does not want this to happen so the story and dialogue will reflect those desires.

Bad Ends are just that. Endings to the story because the player made too many bad decisions.

Overly simplified TLDR:
2 paths. Vanilla and Netorare. High cover = Vanilla, Lowering cover = Netorare, Too low cover = Cover Blown: Game Over Bad Ending.
" Netorare content will increase in spread and scope over time. Keep in mind the Mc does not want this to happen so the story and dialogue will reflect those desires. " Sounds like a good plan. Will keep most people happy.
 

BK186

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May 18, 2017
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I will explain the point of the game over mechanic below.
Unfortunately while I did like the Tyrant, I didn't believe the idea that the player character would willingly share the women. However desperate times call for desperate measures.


:WeSmart:
This will not be an interracial focused game but a game with interracial elements.


Thank you for finding this and pointing it out. I will look back through the code to see where I messed up.


Ideas evolve. Things change. :whistle:




The Game Over mechanic is considered a Bad End. This will kick you back to the Main Menu as usually a Bad End occurs because the families cover is blown and so the Accounting Department eliminates the moles. How the eliminate the moles will change based on the choices made in game. All Bad Endings are based on player choices however some are more apparent than others. I wanted this experience to have stakes and therefore choices are important to both the story as well as to the player progression. Make no mistake, this story is set in a dangerous situation and making a major mistake can and will end the mc's life.

The Netorare mechanic is intended as mitigating/corrupting influence depending on the player's decisions. If the cover is damaged by the player decisions then Cecilia will try her best to distract from it. This actions go against her wishes as she is a very loyal and conservative woman however she understands the danger the entire family is in, intimately, and is willing to sacrifice her modesty if it increases the chances of the investigation and keeping everyone safe.

Meta Explanation:
The player choices reflect the story. If the player is extremely good at maintaining their cover then Netorare content will be limited if not excluded entirely. This leaves the player open to engage with the Love Interests that appear in the game without too much interference from the AD.

If the player is not good at maintaining their cover then the Netorare content will appear as a result of Cecilia trying to desperately distract from the player's decisions. Netorare content will increase in spread and scope over time. Keep in mind the Mc does not want this to happen so the story and dialogue will reflect those desires.

Bad Ends are just that. Endings to the story because the player made too many bad decisions.

Overly simplified TLDR:
2 paths. Vanilla and Netorare. High cover = Vanilla, Lowering cover = Netorare, Too low cover = Cover Blown: Game Over Bad Ending.
I liked what I saw and what you wrote about the future. I think it is important that Cecilia's approach to things is not compromised by her own unique conservatism. NTR events will happen not because she wants them to, but because she has to. I like that
 

Guardra

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May 29, 2018
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i am curious who are all the LIs and will they be the target of ntr like Cecilia? Also if Cecilia is not one of the MCs LI how is it ntr?
 

holis_craiolis

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Great start for a game, I disagree with some people here saying you need to get fast to the corruption but I do think that small glances at it would be good,nothing major smt like tank slapping Cecilia's ass or Cecilia having a more open boob window when she is working gets the mind working.

In other topic are you comfortable sharing the models you use for your characters? Its always fun to make fanart of games and maybe you could find someone to fill the artist position that way
 

Emperor1

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Aug 1, 2017
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Hi, I loved the prologue

Pros:
Art and visuals
Story
MomNTR(yay)
Characters

Cons:
The cliche family

Now I am not a developer but with the experience of playing porn visual novels and games for over 1000+ hours I'd like to give some suggestions if you'll have it.

1. There are many haters for NTR games(heck for any type of games for that matter) don't take it personally just go with what YOU want to do.
2. The art is great, in the ending you said something about getting an artist, i seriously don't think you need one, it will be waste of time/money.
3. While the story is good it falls into the cliche family trope, maybe make it so the mc was really given up has a baby and then met online or something and finally he decided to join them?
4. Don't make too many characters, I mean most of the games i play have soo many characters that they end up with low content or it will make updates take longer to develop and many times people start losing interest, instead try making side quest, i mean like one update will complete the whole character storyline.
5. If this is your first game i suggest you don't make it sandbox type, cause well if you played those you'll understand how terrible some of those end up.
6. Don't rework the game, you may end up learning a lot and want to rework the earlier chapters but please don't, maybe you'll release a remaster version in future but I have seen many try to rework the earlier chapter and end up micro changing and take way to long to update anything and lose fans.
7. Don't try making a huge game, many try end up burning and abandoning the game, so far I love this and I don't want to see this in abandoned post.

Now I know you probably have a plan with this game, but if you have some time would mind adding some of these to the game pwetty pwease

1. More outfits depending on the place (many games just end up with same clothes or bikinis)

2. Femdom (bdsm/pegging?)

3. Trans Li(very underrated (maybe transformation?))

4. Netorase (where the mc is fine with cuckolding and encourages it while the fc likes it (maybe humiliates the mc and enjoys it))

And that's it, if you read through my whole post THANK YOU, no seriously thank you I know this become VERY long, i didn't intend to it just happened so sorry.


P.S. I am also trying to learn the daz and little bit of coding to make a game, maybe you can tell me where to start, as you are staring it, maybe you'd know?
 
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Mr.Nonnypants

Member
Game Developer
Jan 13, 2021
121
619
Hi, I loved the prologue

Pros:
Art and visuals
Story
MomNTR(yay)
Characters

Cons:
The cliche family

Now I am not a developer but with the experience of playing porn visual novels and games for over 1000+ hours I'd like to give some suggestions if you'll have it.

1. There are many haters for NTR games(heck for any type of games for that matter) don't take it personally just go with what YOU want to do.
2. The art is great, in the ending you said something about getting an artist, i seriously don't think you need one, it will be waste of time/money.
3. While the story is good it falls into the cliche family trope, maybe make it so the mc was really given up has a baby and then met online or something and finally he decided to join them?
4. Don't make too many characters, I mean most of the games i play have soo many characters that they end up with low content or it will make updates take longer to develop and many times people start losing interest, instead try making side quest, i mean like one update will complete the whole character storyline.
5. If this is your first game i suggest you don't make it sandbox type, cause well if you played those you'll understand how terrible some of those end up.
6. Don't rework the game, you may end up learning a lot and want to rework the earlier chapters but please don't, maybe you'll release a remaster version in future but I have seen many try to rework the earlier chapter and end up micro changing and take way to long to update anything and lose fans.
7. Don't try making a huge game, many try end up burning and abandoning the game, so far I love this and I don't want to see this in abandoned post.

Now I know you probably have a plan with this game, but if you have some time would mind adding some of these to the game pwetty pwease

1. More outfits depending on the place (many games just end up with same clothes or bikinis)

2. Femdom (bdsm/pegging?)

3. Trans Li(very underrated (maybe transformation?))

4. Netorase (where the mc is fine with cuckolding and encourages it while the fc likes it (maybe humiliates the mc and enjoys it))

And that's it, if you read through my whole post THANK YOU, no seriously thank you I know this become VERY long, i didn't intend to it just happened so sorry.


P.S. I am also trying to learn the daz and little bit of coding to make a game, maybe you can tell me where to start, as you are staring it, maybe you'd know?
Thanks for the encouragement I am trying not to bite off too much however I might have to rain on your parade a little bit.
1. For sure. That I'd why I am using sprites.
2. Pegging is a no. Femdom bdsm is unlikely but regular bdsm is ensured.
3. No.
4. Potentially but not a main focus.

Renpy coding is really simple so picking that up won't take too long if you go through the basic tutorials. I am still and absolute beginner in DAZ but youtube and sheer time investment have been my best idea in getting better. (I still hate posing though)
 
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