So went through a majority of it and have about ~20 more mistakes I saw, instead of uploading all the images, I'll just write them out on text and describe it.
1 - Slave Kristin didn't display her picture when finding out more info on her like most other characters. Usually has text describing a person with their picture on the right. This was after I charmed her.
2 - Sofia Interrogation, (Character Name).. Will I feel anything? Am I still going to be me?" Needs a starting "
3 - Miku in the Attic, "Hello, (Character Name) Any progress in your search?" Should be worded "Hello (Character Name), any progress..."
4 - Same as 3 except Miku is now the familiar, ...polite bow. "Hello, (Character Name) Do you need..."
5 - Angela Explains, Great!You tell Angela"You can't imagine..." Should be worded Great! You tell Angela, "You can't imagine..."
6 - Miku sensing mana reply, "Miku smirks" I also know...", Just needs that " next to the I instead of smirks, "Miku smirks "I also...
7 - Ellie in the meeting, 3 errors of , after ? or !, so "...got my approval!", you are... should be "...got my approval!" You are...
Other two are "...wiggles for you!", she throws... and How do you like them?", Ellie..." Needs a " at the start as well.
8 - Finish talking to Leanne still friendly, I think you're a good person..." needs a " at the start.
9 - Leanne girlfriend, "I missed you, ." She says..." Should be worded "I missed you." She says...
10 - Angela helping looking for Sofia, "my Love! I've heard..." needs a capital M. "...are too thin anyway.", she pleads... , removes and capital S. ...please you, Sje continues, should be she. "...woman in her mind twenties..." mid twenties. "...are you looking for?" she asks. Should be She asks.
11 - Mia and Bambi Playing, ...to play togather, and they strip off, and as you watch... Can be worded better. ...to play together, they strip off and as you watch..., As they do they takj about what they want... they talk that part is supposed to be I think.
12 - Charming a ghost, ...just her limbs are sightly trans Old Japanese... Should be ..are slightly transparent. Old Japanese..
13 - Tracy in the Laundry, ..."Well you're back,(Little Bro/Sis)"... Just needs that space.
14 - Catherine under a charm spell ...Quickly she strips you nakedshe kneels to... Just needs a space.
15 - Daria Worshipping You (female)...knows how to please her Goddess!/p>, think a piece of code got caught there.
16 - Legion in living room, "...I am a creature of habit,(Character Name), and my word is binding." Needs a space on the name.
17 - Interrupting Mom in her bedroom, "why have I been feeling..." Capital W.
18 - Embracing Tine, She looks at you a smiles,... looks at you and smiles,
19 - Your Mother if soft charm(Not full Incest), ... the right choice to place Mom Mom under your powers... Bit of a gap there.
20 - Option when talking to Mom under Hypnosis, So you were watching me and Tracy", needs a " at the start.
That's it. Probably more out there but I'll post em if I do another play through sometime.