You're not a native English speaker, right? You absolutely need to get a native English speaker to proofread all of your writing. I was not kidding about nearly every line written having some fundamental problem that negatively effected both readability and basic understanding. It is hard to keep track of what is going on when, for example, you have dialogue of someone being super critical of another followed by a dire warning of '...careful, they
can be trusted'. These mistakes are permeated throughout the entire experience.
But this is the one that really stuck with me...
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The United States is a cultural hegemony, anyone familiar with English outside of the US is going to be heavily influenced by the media created and exported by the US. When it comes to the usage of the language, Hollywood sets the standard for the baseline of 'normal' conversational English the world over. The cadence and accent of English as depicted in Hollywood is the 'default' that all others are compared against.
In every depiction of a wedding I have ever seen, in games, movies, television, or even the half a dozen ones I've been to myself in real life; the correct call and response for marriage vows is '
I do'.
How do you mess that up? How are you so completely oblivious to something so universal? I'm not upset, but rather I am aghast. I am stupefied, befuddled, and a slew of other old timey synonyms for 'perplexed'. That this managed to make itself into the final product is indicative of something fundamentally wrong. Whoever put this to script is someone who has an alien's (as in, not of this world, and thus unfamiliar with it) grasp of the language. It is unsettling and off-putting in the extreme to get something so simple, so completely and fundamentally wrong.
Even if this is perhaps technically correct insofar as the definitional meaning of the words, or is in use in some English speaking parts of the world; I'll remind the folks at home that the story in game is explicitly about a US CIA agent, with the setup and introduction happening in California. They are a stone's throw away from the cultural epicenter of Hollywood.
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