So the biggest issue i can see is there continue too be way too many branching paths.
Every update cannot have players downloading and playing the game with no content due to the paths. The dev should be shamed for that. Its ridiculous.
How long has it been since the last update? Couple months? This is all in a couple months? One continuous scene?
Again have to say im glad i havent patreoned again, its a shame this game had real promise. Hell i bet this scene is fantastic but its just not enough.