Playing this game again after a year or so and good *lord* I'd forgotten just how badly this writer needs an editor. They write like they're trying to fill out a word count quota and worse, they have no clue how to structure an actual scene. Sophia as a character is so tedious and uptight and annoying, which is a problem cause she's literally in every single scene.
Sophia/Ellie makeout scenes make it worth it though. I approve.
The sauna scene really highlighted this for me. I know that this thread has talked about the need for an editor before, but between the translator issues and the script writing, it's really coming to a head. L&P is not a native English speaker, so I cut him a lot of slack, but that doesn't make the writing magically better. I think that's why so much of the game's dialog reads like a courtroom transcript as people convey facts. Writing fact-based dialog is probably a hell of a lot easier for someone who isn't a native English speaker.
DeShawn- "Do you have children?"
Sophia- "Yes, I have two children."
D- "Where do you work?"
S- "I'm a teacher, but I only work part-time, so I have a side job too."
etc, etc, etc. Writing dialog for a conversation though would be much more difficult. It's probably why the narrator is so busy in this game telling the player about all of the interesting things being said, but we never actually read dialog containing all of these interesting things.