- Aug 29, 2023
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I am going to give it a look see and find out if there is anything here worth exploring. Some of these types if games are good.
- Thread starter Bob69
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- Jan 18, 2020
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Well just finished playing through and have to say the game is ok so far. The main character is annoying as fuck though and is to clingy and paranoid which makes me want him to get cucked in a way. Like it would be different if she showed signs of cheating but there are no signs of cheating, he just acts like a whiney tool which is just so annoying to play as. But that's just my review so far hopefully the game improves.
not a fan at all of real porn in any of these games but you did a really really good job implementing it into the game.Thanks for sharing.
We welcome all feedback, good or bad.
there was a decent amount of content for the first release, I didn´t expect this.
The story looks promising even if the MC is an overprotecting annoying idiot in my opinion, but thats probably how you should feel about him.
I like how Luna starts teasing him and am looking forward where this all will get.
That idiot definitly deserves to get cucked.
The AI models look great too.
The story looks promising even if the MC is an overprotecting annoying idiot in my opinion, but thats probably how you should feel about him.
I like how Luna starts teasing him and am looking forward where this all will get.
That idiot definitly deserves to get cucked.
The AI models look great too.
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Thanks for the warning, will definitely be a hard Pass.
Great game so far, with all the ways your building for the hubby to get fucked over by the wife and her friends, you have to include at leasrt one route where he packs up and tells em all To bugger off.
Don't get me wrong illl play and enjoy all the routes, theres just that special satisfaction to see him leave the whore for a proper woman while it finally occurs to her what she really gave up.
Don't get me wrong illl play and enjoy all the routes, theres just that special satisfaction to see him leave the whore for a proper woman while it finally occurs to her what she really gave up.
- Mar 21, 2019
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Yes, yes, this is what's annoying, it looks like they took it from another game, A Wife's Life, or are they going to drag it out again!
- Mar 21, 2019
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the game is not bad, but damn again these games where many scenes are via phone via message? damn how it is taken clearly similar to another game A Wife's Life
- Dec 31, 2023
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Well, you forgot 3 more games similar to this one. And why rush, because speed is needed when catching fleas. Or are you in a hurry like a naked man to fuck? The game will find its fans. A wonderful start and I hope that the developer will move his game line as he himself conceived and not give in to certain desires from the outside.
after playing the game so far i have noticed its either paranoid mc and trusting mc. I personally feel as though you should turn them into separate styles. with paranoid being full ntr/cuck and trusting being a sharing route instead. you have potential don't break it by becoming yet another carbon copy ntr phone game. primes example is "a wife's life" started great then just went insanely downhill that it only really receives negativity.... best of luck, I'll be following closely (for now)
- Mar 23, 2024
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HEY EVERYONE!
It's me! That annoying girl from A Wife's Life!
I'm kidding but am I really?So. A Wife's Loyalty.. Hang on to your butt D3sire cos this is gonna get brutal.
SO here we go.
I love this story. Period. Stop comparing it to A Wife's Life. I don't even care if D3sire was in any way
influenced by it. I already made the joke about D3sire wanting to cheat with Kerosine_NTR hahaha
Kerosine_NTR needs to stop and have a really long look at how this should be done. Don't worry, I'm
going to let rip on my negatives soon enough. But please stop the unhelpful comparisons.
They are NOT alike.
The MC in A Wife's Loyalty has a legit reason for the way he is. Problem is it's left out of the narrative and D3sire
really needs to lead with it. What caused the MC to have anxiety. Because it's not his wife. I think it's Luna.
He keeps calling her Auntie and there is deep friction there but D3sire needs to explain it. She seems to
be leading the charge to fuck with his life. But WHY? We don't need a full explanation and I have my ideas.
And they are good ideas if it's really what D3sire has in mind. I would love to talk to you in private to see if
my guess is right.
The MC does not suffer from small dick OR premature ejaculation and he does satisfy his wife. Completely.
She adore his dick and for good reason. I love this man's dick and want to be his wife. Dude can work it.
The issue is his anxiety. And I love that. Cos it's real and I can utterly relate to that.
Some back ground on me. My exes had issues like this. Which lead to very abusive situations.
It all started great and fun and sexually adventurous. Then lead to over possession, jealousy, paranoia, abuse.
I've been with people that wanted to see me sleep with other men and women. And I have done my best to
make my partners as happy as I can. Which has lead to me being called a cheater and a whore more times
than I can count. I have, however not cheated on my partners. What I do I do for them, not for myself.
So I have never gone off behind their back and fucked a boss, friend or stranger. So I feel I have a certain
perspective about this topic. I like my men to be strong, confident Alpha men. I have yet to find one.
That is my fantasy. To have a partner that doesn't give in to being a cuck and takes full control.
And that is how I play these male MC NTR stories. I want my Husband to fight back, not be weak,
not cheat and have confidence enough to either have faith that I live for him and if push comes to shove
be the Dominant in our marriage and drive me (the wife character) to do things to please him.
Like in Netorase Phone. My boyfriend in that is NOT a cuck and gets pissed if anyone suggests he is.
I am his good slut. Period. And all of these NTR stories have got to have that path.
A Wife's Loyalty, as it currently stands DOES have that path foundation.
There is a moment, for those that want to compare A Wife's Loyalty with A Wife's Life. where the husband
is confronted with a really bad situation unfolding right in front of him - I'm keeping this spoiler free -
and unlike the MC in A Wife's Life, this MC loses his shit and does what a real man would do and unleashes
hell on a door. Good job D3sire! Had he walked away I would have burned your "game". Somehow haha
This MC never just lays down and takes it. In fact, this is what I love. If you loose your shit and give
in to your anger, you risk pushing your wife away. So you have the choice of giving in to your anxiety or not.
Getting angry or not. Or trusting her or not.
Which makes A Wife's Loyalty closer to A Wife's Phone than A Wife's Life.
All of these should follow A Wife's Phone's lead. Just not the after the blackmail BBC shit.
STOP the BBC shit. Especially when the MC is packing an equal or bigger penis.
You aren't representing a short dick, sexually weak male MC when you use videos of hubbies with
BWC pounding the shit out of their wives. So when you have black antagonists mocking them you look
stupid as devs. When you have the depraved friend trying to talk the wife in to BBC and the wife
has a BWC at home that fucks her good again makes the devs look stupid.
So now we're crossed in to criticism.
1. Stop making the MC needlessly stupid. Everyone knows what a cuck is, stop being all what is that?
Just make him either curious to learn more or say fuck no. Don't be like they don't know.
2. Stop with the puritanical bullshit. These aren't Amish men. And this isn't 1898. The sexual revolution
started in the Victorian Era. To have every sexual thing fluster the MC like it's the first time they have seen
porn is stupid. And to be THAT repulsed is retarded. They can disagree with something but to be utterly
disgusted makes no sense. Yes I know guys that are like that but make it a path. Either they are some
close minded weirdo or they aren't. The husband needs the same corruption mechanics as the wife.
3. THIS PISSED ME OFF D3SIRE!!! Not spoilers but there is a part where something happens relating to a bar
visit that pisses the wife off and the MC is not give a choice to avoid it. And it's innocent, unless you choose
not to keep it innocent. You get THAT choice.
But in the end you and your wife COMMUNICATE and solve your problems and it actually makes your
relationship stronger. And I was soo happy I wanted get on all my social media feeds and praise D3Sire and
this story..... AND THEN.... the next day... it starts amazing and I was SO HAPPY.....
And you have the husband lash out at the wife, she suddenly loathes him everything that happened over
the weekend goes immediately to shit, she turns to Luna and not her sister and the story immediately ends
with a big FUCK YOU to the reader. WHAT. THE. FUCK!
You had it. You just needed more choices and pathing. That's it. You were cruisin free and clear and amazing.
And then you took a massive shit in the bed. YOU know.. you devs need a fucking women to help advise you
cos you all keep making the same stupid mistakes. I was a loyal fucking wife until that last moments of this
God Damned story >.<
My character (The Wife) knew what her boss was doing and didn't like it! Wasn't comfortable with it!
She had NO reason to lash out at the husband! NONE. She should have agreed with him. She should have
agreed that he had a reason to dislike the guy. She should have agreed with him at dinner. She should have
confronted her boss for disrespecting her husband like that. SHE SAYS SHE DID NOT LIKE HER BOSS.
Katherine talks her into ignoring it merely in the hope that she can control it and remain professional.
She makes it clear there will never be anything but a professional relationship there.
But you lead with with the MC's paranoia about the boss. Which you shouldn't have.
If you want a boss path fine. This is way too early and you have to make her hate her hubby enough
to do that. OVER TIME. If the MC keeps making those choices to make her hate him.
Having a loving understanding trusting husband and stable relationship does not merit how .01 ends
Sorry D3sire. I truly love what you have here but you also made me seriously fucking hate you in the end.
So I hope you read all this and didn't just choose to ignore me. You've been doing great following this
forum. And I am more than happy to continue giving my feedback and perspective.
But make me love this story please. I really want to. I read these as the wife, not the male MC.
And I love my character in this. She's so like me in reality.
As for the Ai art. I love it. Want more of it. Ignore anyone complaining about it.
OH! And at one point you accidentally make the MC black and hispanic in a few videos. Careful with that.
Can't claim BBC is the bestest evr and have your MC suddenly turn in to Ricky Johnson or Mike Adriano .
Peace out all you gorgeous male MCs
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- Sep 24, 2024
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HEY EVERYONE!
It's me! That annoying girl from A Wife's Life!
So. A Wife's Loyalty.. Hang on to your butt D3sire cos this is gonna get brutal.
SO here we go.
I love this story. Period. Stop comparing it to A Wife's Life. I don't even care if D3sire was in any way
influenced by it. I already made the joke about D3sire wanting to cheat with Kerosine_NTR hahaha
Kerosine_NTR needs to stop and have a really long look at how this should be done. Don't worry, I'm
going to let rip on my negatives soon enough. But please stop the unhelpful comparisons.
They are NOT alike.
The MC in A Wife's Loyalty has a legit reason for the way he is. Problem is it's left out of the narrative and D3sire
really needs to lead with it. What caused the MC to have anxiety. Because it's not his wife. I think it's Luna.
He keeps calling her Auntie and there is deep friction there but D3sire needs to explain it. She seems to
be leading the charge to fuck with his life. But WHY? We don't need a full explanation and I have my ideas.
And they are good ideas if it's really what D3sire has in mind. I would love to talk to you in private to see if
my guess is right.
The MC does not suffer from small dick OR premature ejaculation and he does satisfy his wife. Completely.
She adore his dick and for good reason. I love this man's dick and want to be his wife. Dude can work it.
The issue is his anxiety. And I love that. Cos it's real and I can utterly relate to that.
Some back ground on me. My exes had issues like this. Which lead to very abusive situations.
It all started great and fun and sexually adventurous. Then lead to over possession, jealousy, paranoia, abuse.
I've been with people that wanted to see me sleep with other men and women. And I have done my best to
make my partners as happy as I can. Which has lead to me being called a cheater and a whore more times
than I can count. I have, however not cheated on my partners. What I do I do for them, not for myself.
So I have never gone off behind their back and fucked a boss, friend or stranger. So I feel I have a certain
perspective about this topic. I like my men to be strong, confident Alpha men. I have yet to find one.
That is my fantasy. To have a partner that doesn't give in to being a cuck and takes full control.
And that is how I play these male MC NTR stories. I want my Husband to fight back, not be weak,
not cheat and have confidence enough to either have faith that I live for him and if push comes to shove
be the Dominant in our marriage and drive me (the wife character) to do things to please him.
Like in Netorase Phone. My boyfriend in that is NOT a cuck and gets pissed if anyone suggests he is.
I am his good slut. Period. And all of these NTR stories have got to have that path.
A Wife's Loyalty, as it currently stands DOES have that path foundation.
There is a moment, for those that want to compare A Wife's Loyalty with A Wife's Life. where the husband
is confronted with a really bad situation unfolding right in front of him - I'm keeping this spoiler free -
and unlike the MC in A Wife's Life, this MC loses his shit and does what a real man would do and unleashes
hell on a door. Good job D3sire! Had he walked away I would have burned your "game". Somehow haha
This MC never just lays down and takes it. In fact, this is what I love. If you loose your shit and give
in to your anger, you risk pushing your wife away. So you have the choice of giving in to your anxiety or not.
Getting angry or not. Or trusting her or not.
Which makes A Wife's Loyalty closer to A Wife's Phone than A Wife's Life.
All of these should follow A Wife's Phone's lead. Just not the after the blackmail BBC shit.
STOP the BBC shit. Especially when the MC is packing an equal or bigger penis.
You aren't representing a short dick, sexually weak male MC when you use videos of hubbies with
BWC pounding the shit out of their wives. So when you have black antagonists mocking them you look
stupid as devs. When you have the depraved friend trying to talk the wife in to BBC and the wife
has a BWC at home that fucks her good again makes the devs look stupid.
So now we're crossed in to criticism.
1. Stop making the MC needlessly stupid. Everyone knows what a cuck is, stop being all what is that?
Just make him either curious to learn more or say fuck no. Don't be like they don't know.
2. Stop with the puritanical bullshit. These aren't Amish men. And this isn't 1898. The sexual revolution
started in the Victorian Era. To have every sexual thing fluster the MC like it's the first time they have seen
porn is stupid. And to be THAT repulsed is retarded. They can disagree with something but to be utterly
disgusted makes no sense. Yes I know guys that are like that but make it a path. Either they are some
close minded weirdo or they aren't. The husband needs the same corruption mechanics as the wife.
3. THIS PISSED ME OFF D3SIRE!!! Not spoilers but there is a part where something happens relating to a bar
visit that pisses the wife off and the MC is not give a choice to avoid it. And it's innocent, unless you choose
not to keep it innocent. You get THAT choice.
But in the end you and your wife COMMUNICATE and solve your problems and it actually makes your
relationship stronger. And I was soo happy I wanted get on all my social media feeds and praise D3Sire and
this story..... AND THEN.... the next day... it starts amazing and I was SO HAPPY.....
And you have the husband lash out at the wife, she suddenly loathes him everything that happened over
the weekend goes immediately to shit, she turns to Luna and not her sister and the story immediately ends
with a big FUCK YOU to the reader. WHAT. THE. FUCK!
You had it. You just needed more choices and pathing. That's it. You were cruisin free and clear and amazing.
And then you took a massive shit in the bed. YOU know.. you devs need a fucking women to help advise you
cos you all keep making the same stupid mistakes. I was a loyal fucking wife until that last moments of this
God Damned story >.<
My character (The Wife) knew what her boss was doing and didn't like it! Wasn't comfortable with it!
She had NO reason to lash out at the husband! NONE. She should have agreed with him. She should have
agreed that he had a reason to dislike the guy. She should have agreed with him at dinner. She should have
confronted her boss for disrespecting her husband like that. SHE SAYS SHE DID NOT LIKE HER BOSS.
Katherine talks her into ignoring it merely in the hope that she can control it and remain professional.
She makes it clear there will never be anything but a professional relationship there.
But you lead with with the MC's paranoia about the boss. Which you shouldn't have.
If you want a boss path fine. This is way too early and you have to make her hate her hubby enough
to do that. OVER TIME. If the MC keeps making those choices to make her hate him.
Having a loving understanding trusting husband and stable relationship does not merit how .01 ends
Sorry D3sire. I truly love what you have here but you also made me seriously fucking hate you in the end.
So I hope you read all this and didn't just choose to ignore me. You've been doing great following this
forum. And I am more than happy to continue giving my feedback and perspective.
But make me love this story please. I really want to. I read these as the wife, not the male MC.
And I love my character in this. She's so like me in reality.
As for the Ai art. I love it. Want more of it. Ignore anyone complaining about it.
OH! And at one point you accidentally make the MC black and hispanic in a few videos. Careful with that.
Can't claim BBC is the bestest evr and have your MC suddenly turn in to Ricky Johnson or Mike Adriano .
Peace out all you gorgeous male MCs
First of all, this is the longest comment I've ever read
. Of course, I read all of them. Thank you very much for this detailed feedback. We continue to improve ourselves in terms of the story and this is our first project. We read every comment here and understand better what the players want and don't want. Of course, we are aware that we can't please everyone. But we aim to please the majority. It was a really valuable comment. I hope we continue to receive such feedback in the new updates we will release and we will continue to develop this game beautifully together with our community. You can send us a private message here or a private message on patreon to give us direct feedback. You can also come to our discord server.Some thoughts:
You really need to set it up in a way that, if you make the right decisions, she never cheats on you.
You also need to make it so that the MC can call out the FMC for her bull. She doesn't just get to go out clubbing and stay overnight with her friend out of the blue without the MC threatening her with divorce.
You should also make reasons why MC (if he chooses not to start an affair with Luna) won't just show FMC the texts he's getting and getting everything out in the open. It makes sense for him to keep Luna's texts from FMC if they suggest or demonstrate an affair, but if the MC himself chooses to be faithful, he should have the option of showing everyone else's cards to the FMC and get her to become aware of their manipulation. It actually would be fun for the MC to get out manipulated by the other men and the FMC'S friends as a consequence of his own infidelity.
I also think Luna should be called out for not explaining her meeting with MC to FMC. Even if she didn't tell FMC like she was supposed to, it's not clear to me why the MC doesn't get anger with Luna for not explaining the situation to FMC afterwards so she can get over it and forgive MC —he shouldn't even talk to her unless she clears up the situation to FMC first. It's not even the biggest deal in the world —the meeting wasn't with a random stranger, but FMC's friend. This could be a "go to bed early and be angry for a day or two problem," but it's not a "stay over sister's house and talk about it being the last straw" kind of problem, even if MC is a little hypocritical about not keeping the standards he sets up for her (unless the FMC is aware Luna is trying to manipulate MC into bed —then in that case her over reaction makes some sense).
MC should also have the option(s) in a couple situations of telling FMC that even if MC trusts her, she needs to avoid setting up a situation where the appearance of wrongdoing could be possible (he could point out that she wouldn't like it if he spent a lot of time after work alone with his boss —a good way to introduce MC's boss as a potential sexual partner for MC too). This doesn't mean she can't keep falling into those traps anyway out of naivity and/or untapped, unconscious lust, but I think the MC seems smarter and more realistic if he's able to articulate this more clearly. Having it that the MC and the other male characters play a cat and mouse game trying to out manipulate a naive FMC into either falling into infidelity or escaping it by the MC being smart would be very fun to play. Naturally of course, MC doesn't need to just be able to manipulate FMC away from infidelity —he could be the one who manipulates FMC to cheat behind the scenes in the first place because of a fetish, without her even knowing.
Remember that if NTR is unavailable, it's no longer a game but a story —making decisions matters only when there are real consequences to those decisions, and the biggest consequence that keeps us on edge is the first acts of cheating. Fidelity must either be rewarded with fidelity or with satisfying revenge against the guilty parties (unless MC chooses to enjoy his wife's infidelity). Otherwise our decisions feel powerless. Cheating should not be fated —it should either be chosen or a result of bad behavior on the MC's part.
Praisewise, I applaud you making the cheating videos and pictures ambiguous so that, given what decisions the MC makes, either the FMC is cheating on him the whole time or her friends/coworkers were playing him and she's been loyal the whole time. At least, that's how I think you were going with it, right? Keeping what actually happened in certain situations left unsaid for at least a period time builds tension too. You might want to consider making it so that MC/FMC's relationship leaves them both satisfied unless they start cheating on each other. Like, if FMC starts sampling other men, she starts to be less satisfied with MC during sex, and if MC starts cheating he starts to have ED problems because of guilt (but can still get it up with his mistresses). You could even use this as a sign that FMC cheated even if it's not explicitly said/shown.
You should consider a counter-arc where MC out manipulates the other men and the FMC friends and makes FMC a cuckqueen bisexual slut instead of a hotwife.
You should allow for revenge on both sides, like if MC's gym friend sleeps with FMC, give the friend a hot girlfriend for MC to ruin, of give MC a way to threaten FMC boss to back down (and the other way— let the boss or other men be able to blackmail MC if he cheats or does any wrong doing).
Izmeraldas is right too that giving MC a reason why he is so anxious, such as a former relationship with Luna or at least familiarity about how she works, also makes him more realistic.
And, just as an aside, she can be unfaithful with white guys too, like MC's friend. Maybe Luna feels bad about her husband and decides to manipulate FMC into sleeping with him in order to fix problems in her relationship? Who knows?
Other than the couple times MC wasn't allowed to make the realistic decision that made me annoyed, and the ending being too quick (yes, I know it's incomplete and you are leaving us on a cliffhanger), I enjoyed it. Thank you
You really need to set it up in a way that, if you make the right decisions, she never cheats on you.
You also need to make it so that the MC can call out the FMC for her bull. She doesn't just get to go out clubbing and stay overnight with her friend out of the blue without the MC threatening her with divorce.
You should also make reasons why MC (if he chooses not to start an affair with Luna) won't just show FMC the texts he's getting and getting everything out in the open. It makes sense for him to keep Luna's texts from FMC if they suggest or demonstrate an affair, but if the MC himself chooses to be faithful, he should have the option of showing everyone else's cards to the FMC and get her to become aware of their manipulation. It actually would be fun for the MC to get out manipulated by the other men and the FMC'S friends as a consequence of his own infidelity.
I also think Luna should be called out for not explaining her meeting with MC to FMC. Even if she didn't tell FMC like she was supposed to, it's not clear to me why the MC doesn't get anger with Luna for not explaining the situation to FMC afterwards so she can get over it and forgive MC —he shouldn't even talk to her unless she clears up the situation to FMC first. It's not even the biggest deal in the world —the meeting wasn't with a random stranger, but FMC's friend. This could be a "go to bed early and be angry for a day or two problem," but it's not a "stay over sister's house and talk about it being the last straw" kind of problem, even if MC is a little hypocritical about not keeping the standards he sets up for her (unless the FMC is aware Luna is trying to manipulate MC into bed —then in that case her over reaction makes some sense).
MC should also have the option(s) in a couple situations of telling FMC that even if MC trusts her, she needs to avoid setting up a situation where the appearance of wrongdoing could be possible (he could point out that she wouldn't like it if he spent a lot of time after work alone with his boss —a good way to introduce MC's boss as a potential sexual partner for MC too). This doesn't mean she can't keep falling into those traps anyway out of naivity and/or untapped, unconscious lust, but I think the MC seems smarter and more realistic if he's able to articulate this more clearly. Having it that the MC and the other male characters play a cat and mouse game trying to out manipulate a naive FMC into either falling into infidelity or escaping it by the MC being smart would be very fun to play. Naturally of course, MC doesn't need to just be able to manipulate FMC away from infidelity —he could be the one who manipulates FMC to cheat behind the scenes in the first place because of a fetish, without her even knowing.
Remember that if NTR is unavailable, it's no longer a game but a story —making decisions matters only when there are real consequences to those decisions, and the biggest consequence that keeps us on edge is the first acts of cheating. Fidelity must either be rewarded with fidelity or with satisfying revenge against the guilty parties (unless MC chooses to enjoy his wife's infidelity). Otherwise our decisions feel powerless. Cheating should not be fated —it should either be chosen or a result of bad behavior on the MC's part.
Praisewise, I applaud you making the cheating videos and pictures ambiguous so that, given what decisions the MC makes, either the FMC is cheating on him the whole time or her friends/coworkers were playing him and she's been loyal the whole time. At least, that's how I think you were going with it, right? Keeping what actually happened in certain situations left unsaid for at least a period time builds tension too. You might want to consider making it so that MC/FMC's relationship leaves them both satisfied unless they start cheating on each other. Like, if FMC starts sampling other men, she starts to be less satisfied with MC during sex, and if MC starts cheating he starts to have ED problems because of guilt (but can still get it up with his mistresses). You could even use this as a sign that FMC cheated even if it's not explicitly said/shown.
You should consider a counter-arc where MC out manipulates the other men and the FMC friends and makes FMC a cuckqueen bisexual slut instead of a hotwife.
You should allow for revenge on both sides, like if MC's gym friend sleeps with FMC, give the friend a hot girlfriend for MC to ruin, of give MC a way to threaten FMC boss to back down (and the other way— let the boss or other men be able to blackmail MC if he cheats or does any wrong doing).
Izmeraldas is right too that giving MC a reason why he is so anxious, such as a former relationship with Luna or at least familiarity about how she works, also makes him more realistic.
And, just as an aside, she can be unfaithful with white guys too, like MC's friend. Maybe Luna feels bad about her husband and decides to manipulate FMC into sleeping with him in order to fix problems in her relationship? Who knows?
Other than the couple times MC wasn't allowed to make the realistic decision that made me annoyed, and the ending being too quick (yes, I know it's incomplete and you are leaving us on a cliffhanger), I enjoyed it. Thank you
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Yeah I agree with everything here. When the MC goes to talk to Luna, the wife goes nuclear on him when she's been doing the same thing to him. This has been his complaint about her. And she super seriously over reacts going to her sister's house. So at this point it's pretty clear to the player that she's not cheating, she takes the marriage dead serious and she's super possessive of her hubby. I don't want this removed or changed. It's amazing, it's real, and it brings the two closer together in a way that no other NTR story does. They actually sit down and talk and communicate. What's missing is the wife's realization that Luna is playing her, lied to her, deceived her and manipulated this situation. In A Wife's Phone a similar situation happens and the MC tells his wife to not talk to that "friend" again and the wife agrees and breaks off all contact. Because she knows it's for the best. Not because she's manipulated in to it.Some thoughts:
You really need to set it up in a way that, if you make the right decisions, she never cheats on you.
You also need to make it so that the MC can call out the FMC for her bull. She doesn't just get to go out clubbing and stay overnight with her friend out of the blue without the MC threatening her with divorce.
You should also make reasons why MC (if he chooses not to start an affair with Luna) won't just show FMC the texts he's getting and getting everything out in the open. It makes sense for him to keep Luna's texts from FMC if they suggest or demonstrate an affair, but if the MC himself chooses to be faithful, he should have the option of showing everyone else's cards to the FMC and get her to become aware of their manipulation. It actually would be fun for the MC to get out manipulated by the other men and the FMC'S friends as a consequence of his own infidelity.
I also think Luna should be called out for not explaining her meeting with MC to FMC. Even if she didn't tell FMC like she was supposed to, it's not clear to me why the MC doesn't get anger with Luna for not explaining the situation to FMC afterwards so she can get over it and forgive MC —he shouldn't even talk to her unless she clears up the situation to FMC first. It's not even the biggest deal in the world —the meeting wasn't with a random stranger, but FMC's friend. This could be a "go to bed early and be angry for a day or two problem," but it's not a "stay over sister's house and talk about it being the last straw" kind of problem, even if MC is a little hypocritical about not keeping the standards he sets up for her (unless the FMC is aware Luna is trying to manipulate MC into bed —then in that case her over reaction makes some sense).
MC should also have the option(s) in a couple situations of telling FMC that even if MC trusts her, she needs to avoid setting up a situation where the appearance of wrongdoing could be possible (he could point out that she wouldn't like it if he spent a lot of time after work alone with his boss —a good way to introduce MC's boss as a potential sexual partner for MC too). This doesn't mean she can't keep falling into those traps anyway out of naivity and/or untapped, unconscious lust, but I think the MC seems smarter and more realistic if he's able to articulate this more clearly. Having it that the MC and the other male characters play a cat and mouse game trying to out manipulate a naive FMC into either falling into infidelity or escaping it by the MC being smart would be very fun to play. Naturally of course, MC doesn't need to just be able to manipulate FMC away from infidelity —he could be the one who manipulates FMC to cheat behind the scenes in the first place because of a fetish, without her even knowing.
Remember that if NTR is unavailable, it's no longer a game but a story —making decisions matters only when there are real consequences to those decisions, and the biggest consequence that keeps us on edge is the first acts of cheating. Fidelity must either be rewarded with fidelity or with satisfying revenge against the guilty parties (unless MC chooses to enjoy his wife's infidelity). Otherwise our decisions feel powerless. Cheating should not be fated —it should either be chosen or a result of bad behavior on the MC's part.
Praisewise, I applaud you making the cheating videos and pictures ambiguous so that, given what decisions the MC makes, either the FMC is cheating on him the whole time or her friends/coworkers were playing him and she's been loyal the whole time. At least, that's how I think you were going with it, right? Keeping what actually happened in certain situations left unsaid for at least a period time builds tension too. You might want to consider making it so that MC/FMC's relationship leaves them both satisfied unless they start cheating on each other. Like, if FMC starts sampling other men, she starts to be less satisfied with MC during sex, and if MC starts cheating he starts to have ED problems because of guilt (but can still get it up with his mistresses). You could even use this as a sign that FMC cheated even if it's not explicitly said/shown.
You should consider a counter-arc where MC out manipulates the other men and the FMC friends and makes FMC a cuckqueen bisexual slut instead of a hotwife.
You should allow for revenge on both sides, like if MC's gym friend sleeps with FMC, give the friend a hot girlfriend for MC to ruin, of give MC a way to threaten FMC boss to back down (and the other way— let the boss or other men be able to blackmail MC if he cheats or does any wrong doing).
Izmeraldas is right too that giving MC a reason why he is so anxious, such as a former relationship with Luna or at least familiarity about how she works, also makes him more realistic.
And, just as an aside, she can be unfaithful with white guys too, like MC's friend. Maybe Luna feels bad about her husband and decides to manipulate FMC into sleeping with him in order to fix problems in her relationship? Who knows?
Other than the couple times MC wasn't allowed to make the realistic decision that made me annoyed, and the ending being too quick (yes, I know it's incomplete and you are leaving us on a cliffhanger), I enjoyed it. Thank you
This is good for the non cuck husband path. If he choses to do what he's given a choice to do at the bar, Luna
should have told the wife in an act of manipulation, which is why she went nuclear and left and SHE doesn't trust
the MC. Choosing to continue her friendship with Luna to spite him. Leading to the cucked husband path.
If you want a good ice breaker in to the non-cuck hubby path, you can use the new neighbors as a springboard in
to opening the MC and FMC in to that world and if on the non cuck path with the FMC still mad at Luna, have the
MC suggest the FMC seduce Daniel as a pivotal
non cuck path moment. Making the FMC and Luna rivals and competitors. Both out to top each other and leading more and more in to corruption with the MC leading the way with his wife. Which could have it's own balancing system. The MC has to keep the FMC loyal to him. If he fails then she strays and its back to the cuck path. If he succeeds then they are even stronger in their shared perversions.
And DO NOT break Jack's character and make him an antagonist. Leave the MC someone he can lean on, confide in and trust. That whole Rick thing in A Wife's Life is infuriating. The MC should have cut Rick's balls off for that betrayal. Not ben like "I hope he doesn't come visit." NO. You tell him to fuck the hell off your wife and piss off
haha
Jack should be a team player and supportive of the MC and the wife. Maybe even giving the MC advice on things to try.
And IF you plan to have the FMC and Jack hook up at some point it should be a threesome (on the non cuck route), since
Jack is on team MC and part of their action and not because he's a backstabbing POS.
On a cuck route he should be based on how much he and the FMC dislike/distrust the MC.
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@DesiringYouAll8Some thoughts:
You really need to set it up in a way that, if you make the right decisions, she never cheats on you.
You also need to make it so that the MC can call out the FMC for her bull. She doesn't just get to go out clubbing and stay overnight with her friend out of the blue without the MC threatening her with divorce.
You should also make reasons why MC (if he chooses not to start an affair with Luna) won't just show FMC the texts he's getting and getting everything out in the open. It makes sense for him to keep Luna's texts from FMC if they suggest or demonstrate an affair, but if the MC himself chooses to be faithful, he should have the option of showing everyone else's cards to the FMC and get her to become aware of their manipulation. It actually would be fun for the MC to get out manipulated by the other men and the FMC'S friends as a consequence of his own infidelity.
I also think Luna should be called out for not explaining her meeting with MC to FMC. Even if she didn't tell FMC like she was supposed to, it's not clear to me why the MC doesn't get anger with Luna for not explaining the situation to FMC afterwards so she can get over it and forgive MC —he shouldn't even talk to her unless she clears up the situation to FMC first. It's not even the biggest deal in the world —the meeting wasn't with a random stranger, but FMC's friend. This could be a "go to bed early and be angry for a day or two problem," but it's not a "stay over sister's house and talk about it being the last straw" kind of problem, even if MC is a little hypocritical about not keeping the standards he sets up for her (unless the FMC is aware Luna is trying to manipulate MC into bed —then in that case her over reaction makes some sense).
MC should also have the option(s) in a couple situations of telling FMC that even if MC trusts her, she needs to avoid setting up a situation where the appearance of wrongdoing could be possible (he could point out that she wouldn't like it if he spent a lot of time after work alone with his boss —a good way to introduce MC's boss as a potential sexual partner for MC too). This doesn't mean she can't keep falling into those traps anyway out of naivity and/or untapped, unconscious lust, but I think the MC seems smarter and more realistic if he's able to articulate this more clearly. Having it that the MC and the other male characters play a cat and mouse game trying to out manipulate a naive FMC into either falling into infidelity or escaping it by the MC being smart would be very fun to play. Naturally of course, MC doesn't need to just be able to manipulate FMC away from infidelity —he could be the one who manipulates FMC to cheat behind the scenes in the first place because of a fetish, without her even knowing.
Remember that if NTR is unavailable, it's no longer a game but a story —making decisions matters only when there are real consequences to those decisions, and the biggest consequence that keeps us on edge is the first acts of cheating. Fidelity must either be rewarded with fidelity or with satisfying revenge against the guilty parties (unless MC chooses to enjoy his wife's infidelity). Otherwise our decisions feel powerless. Cheating should not be fated —it should either be chosen or a result of bad behavior on the MC's part.
Praisewise, I applaud you making the cheating videos and pictures ambiguous so that, given what decisions the MC makes, either the FMC is cheating on him the whole time or her friends/coworkers were playing him and she's been loyal the whole time. At least, that's how I think you were going with it, right? Keeping what actually happened in certain situations left unsaid for at least a period time builds tension too. You might want to consider making it so that MC/FMC's relationship leaves them both satisfied unless they start cheating on each other. Like, if FMC starts sampling other men, she starts to be less satisfied with MC during sex, and if MC starts cheating he starts to have ED problems because of guilt (but can still get it up with his mistresses). You could even use this as a sign that FMC cheated even if it's not explicitly said/shown.
You should consider a counter-arc where MC out manipulates the other men and the FMC friends and makes FMC a cuckqueen bisexual slut instead of a hotwife.
You should allow for revenge on both sides, like if MC's gym friend sleeps with FMC, give the friend a hot girlfriend for MC to ruin, of give MC a way to threaten FMC boss to back down (and the other way— let the boss or other men be able to blackmail MC if he cheats or does any wrong doing).
Izmeraldas is right too that giving MC a reason why he is so anxious, such as a former relationship with Luna or at least familiarity about how she works, also makes him more realistic.
And, just as an aside, she can be unfaithful with white guys too, like MC's friend. Maybe Luna feels bad about her husband and decides to manipulate FMC into sleeping with him in order to fix problems in her relationship? Who knows?
Other than the couple times MC wasn't allowed to make the realistic decision that made me annoyed, and the ending being too quick (yes, I know it's incomplete and you are leaving us on a cliffhanger), I enjoyed it. Thank you
"MC should also have the option(s) in a couple situations of telling FMC that even if MC trusts her, she needs to avoid setting up a situation where the appearance of wrongdoing could be possible (he could point out that she wouldn't like it if he spent a lot of time after work alone with his boss"
I'm pretty sure his boss is a future obstacle and problem haha
See this is another problem I have with these stories. But not with this one. This one makes sense.
The MC here has what other girls want. And he's desirable. But in these other stories how can the devs
call their MCs pathetic and weak and short dick and yet... they can easily rail other women?
They can't satisfy their wife and cum early but they are masters with other women... really?
At least in Cucktales that MC is weak and uber nerdy and not remotely attractive but has a hot girlfriend
that adores him.
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