First I like the art, second I´m interessted in your future updates and where this story will lead you...
But I don´t know if you go so straight forward in the first scene, its a bit to fast for my opinion.
Wish u luck, anyway
First of all,if you didn't read it she was felt already betrayed by her ex-boyfriend and best friends that neither of them told her about hers boyfriend is cheating with hers bestie and finding such a thing happen can drastically change the person; Secondly she say that she is desperate because she doesn't have any money and still don't have a job,she never worked before and just moved to a new city without her parrents support anymore - once again that also can drastically change a person if he/she felt really desperate and need a place to stay!
Also,this way is much better instead like in some other games trying to slowly corrupt some innocent and normal girl - here it looks like we have a girl with middle-rich parrents that always support her till she graduaded and because of that she was always feeling like a lucky girl,get everything and have fun(not like the ones that never tryed anything,never had sex,always listen to her parrents and didn't have fun,go to partys,dared to wear more revealing clothes to look more sexy in the eyes of the boys,always try to study hard and so on...you got my point) but after graduating everything changes - hers parrents was no longer able to support her(may be they have some problems at work or other things) and since she is grown up they believe she can do on her own and find a job to work...but because of what happen with hers boyfriend she somehow felt a lot more affective and just like that without thinking too much she decide to pack up some stuff and leave hers city and go to another one where she can start a new life and show everyone she can do on hers own without needing anyone to help her and without any friends... I believe that's how the developer decide to make this new really good loking project and like i already say,this way is much better and fun! Too bad the first release is so short but I hope the next one will be a lot more longer!