VN Ren'Py Abandoned Alive Alone [v0.1 Demo] [Draven]

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RandomGuy99

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Nov 11, 2018
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The renders and art is good but the story is messy and all over the place. The dev trying to make the story mysterious but it is actually backfiring when there is too much of it.
 
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TiffanyMonroe

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May 29, 2018
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Really short. Spelling and grammar in serious need of work, I'm assuming Dev is not native English speaker. I don't mind the seemingly random (but isn't) zig-zag intro, lots of movies and books start out confusing flashback style. The fact that the last picture shows the MC with long hair and tattoos, and the earlier dialog references him being 16 (underage for porn activity) and in the "last year of middle school" (which would mean he was 13-14ish, probably meant last year of High School, but then he would be 17-18) means this is a flashback/memory before the start of the game we will be actively playing.
Overall it looks bizarre, weird, nightmarish, confusing and.........interesting because of all of those :LOL:, at least to me. Of course I like stories like that.
I hope it works out as well as it looks like it could, but things almost never do. Either way I'm going to watch this closely for an update or two at least. (y)
But does he hit a growth spurt?:unsure:
 

HogRocket

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why is it that they all look tiny
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Sorry, couldn't help myself :ROFLMAO::ROFLMAO::ROFLMAO:

I don't think they look that small. I grew 2 inches (in height, that never grew again unfortunately) in college. Maybe our hero is a late bloomer, or just short-ish (like me, 5'9"/1.75M)
 

Uzhirian

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Interesting start. Has potential, but needs some engrish elimination. The MC is catching beds and catching dinner, will end up catching covid and dying if he keeps at it.
 
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Dec 11, 2021
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Hi,

Story seems interesting but I am one hell of confused and don't know what the hell is going on...

Artwork has nice quality, also the transitions and the split screen phone chat.

But the MC looks too small and if someone could not decide if 14 or 40 years old.. thats distracting.

I am still interested so good luck and keep it coming.

Regards
 

punisher2099

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So this demo told us everything and nothing at the same time. I kind of sympathized with the Mc at the end there I had to lie down too after that...
 
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4.00 star(s) 2 Votes