Wolf Plays™ has already requested Sara's return, so she will be back maybe chapter 5ish I have to find a way to work her back into the story.
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A few minutes in and I'm already of the opinion that if the Stepmother is a LI she can take a long walk off a short dock. Seriously making me consider quoting a Kanye song and I despise Kanye songs.
Honestly I could potentially see the Stepmonster reappearing and sneaking into the MC's bed to try and impregnate herself to get a massive amount of child support off of him.
Let's not with the 'stepmother'. Gold diggin bitch.She will make a brief appearance in the next chapter. (But not like that)
BadMustard
Please consider my words as some kind of feedback, 'cause unfortunately I can say little good about a game, but quite a lot about the opposite. Well, to be frank to the bone, the game has a story, that's a plus.
Renders. Overall it's not bad but it's low-res pictures, on my 1920x1080 it's really grainy. Big, really big minus is a giant cock. I see you changed some info about traffic accident, let me explain you what you showed us in MC's renders. Erect cock almost reaching diaphragm is slightly more than 40 cm. And girls are jumping on this cock as it's 15 cm ( upper medium length of male reproductive organ). IRL MC will have a real problem to find a girl - sex with that dick frightens women, it's painful for them and, yeah, their vaginas aren't bottomless. Width of that cock, I suppose, can bring them pleasure (theoretically), but it's still monster cock. And women actually look at that as some monster thing (which is tiotally not exciting for them). It's even less real that staying alive after car crash at 200 mph.
Gameplay. Game has no real choices so it must have kinetic novel tag. Now it isn't. Either put a tag or add some real choices. Another issue. I don't know why but after every transition, every change of scene I watched render with hospital whore (with some Christian name) laying on a side looking at MC. Maybe it's a bug or something else but it was really annoying. Please look into your code, there must be something in there.
Story and all that's near. Right now story is close to story of porn movie with promise for something better. Game needs to have boring explanations. For example, why MC stand near sport car and why there's a girl looking inside that car? Player don't know what you think, player don't know where MC is, what he did or didn't, we only know what you said in game. It was uncomfortable to jump from one scene to scene with Sophie without any transition. Another thing, character motivation. Right now there's no such thing. There's goldgigger slut that sleeps with anyone other than MC. With no reason for that (beside she's a slut). There's Asian twins, that whoring themselves to MC without any reason. They do not talk about birth control and MC don't ask, such a gentleman! Maybe they're golddiggers, maybe they're just sluts, we don't know and you're not telling us. There's their neice which can have a normal story ark, but just mildly lust for MC. Why? Beacause her heart is broken? Really? Is that a reason to sleep with someone? And there's Sophie, a damsel in distress (by her role in story), real gift for players with "knight complex" (I don't know how it's really called, I know that I have such a complex). She decided to pay MC for good evening with her body, i.e. whore herself out. Why? MC never asked that. Is she a slut?
And strange hint about sex with judge. Please don't go there, it's gerontophilia, not everyone likes that if I say it really mildly.
P.S. Plese, check spelling, it's really horrible right now. Especially for those whose native language is not English.
Please consider my words as some kind of feedback, 'cause unfortunately I can say little good about a game, but quite a lot about the opposite. Well, to be frank to the bone, the game has a story, that's a plus.
Renders. Overall it's not bad but it's low-res pictures, on my 1920x1080 it's really grainy. Big, really big minus is a giant cock. I see you changed some info about traffic accident, let me explain you what you showed us in MC's renders. Erect cock almost reaching diaphragm is slightly more than 40 cm. And girls are jumping on this cock as it's 15 cm ( upper medium length of male reproductive organ). IRL MC will have a real problem to find a girl - sex with that dick frightens women, it's painful for them and, yeah, their vaginas aren't bottomless. Width of that cock, I suppose, can bring them pleasure (theoretically), but it's still monster cock. And women actually look at that as some monster thing (which is tiotally not exciting for them). It's even less real that staying alive after car crash at 200 mph.
Gameplay. Game has no real choices so it must have kinetic novel tag. Now it isn't. Either put a tag or add some real choices. Another issue. I don't know why but after every transition, every change of scene I watched render with hospital whore (with some Christian name) laying on a side looking at MC. Maybe it's a bug or something else but it was really annoying. Please look into your code, there must be something in there.
Story and all that's near. Right now story is close to story of porn movie with promise for something better. Game needs to have boring explanations. For example, why MC stand near sport car and why there's a girl looking inside that car? Player don't know what you think, player don't know where MC is, what he did or didn't, we only know what you said in game. It was uncomfortable to jump from one scene to scene with Sophie without any transition. Another thing, character motivation. Right now there's no such thing. There's goldgigger slut that sleeps with anyone other than MC. With no reason for that (beside she's a slut). There's Asian twins, that whoring themselves to MC without any reason. They do not talk about birth control and MC don't ask, such a gentleman! Maybe they're golddiggers, maybe they're just sluts, we don't know and you're not telling us. There's their neice which can have a normal story ark, but just mildly lust for MC. Why? Beacause her heart is broken? Really? Is that a reason to sleep with someone? And there's Sophie, a damsel in distress (by her role in story), real gift for players with "knight complex" (I don't know how it's really called, I know that I have such a complex). She decided to pay MC for good evening with her body, i.e. whore herself out. Why? MC never asked that. Is she a slut?
And strange hint about sex with judge. Please don't go there, it's gerontophilia, not everyone likes that if I say it really mildly.
P.S. Plese, check spelling, it's really horrible right now. Especially for those whose native language is not English.
But some of us don't like to see unreal things. Magic, non-humans, other worlds - that's acceptable. Giant dicks and boobs are not. Some people like them. OK, there are games for these people, just look for appropriate tag. Why majority must be uncomfortable for minority comfort? World don't work that way.
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Average dick size depending on ethnicity is roughly 40-60% of what the MC is packing, so unless the game is to start showing evidence of vaginal/anal gaping to appease the niche fetish... pony cocks belong on ponies.
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and normal sized cocks belong in love stories written for women. Why don't you go read those and stay out of non-reality based AVN's. This story is a work of fantasy where I try to obey some physics laws mostly.
Yes in the first part the cock is HUGE, I know, but if you can pry your eyes away from your own groin for a few scenes you would notice that it's got smaller. While it's still not realistically sized THIS IS FANTASY not reality. (DELTA HOTEL)
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Brief as in phone call. (GDB avoided)
I would send you chapter 5, but it's rougher than asphalt at 55MPH.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation is currently being check by a third party, so there will be improvements coming!
So, I try to be nice in this thread and get deleted, while fuckwads like you guys, don't? Well, now I'm not going to be nice. All you little dick evangelists should just move along. This game is BadMustard 's game. If he wants to add a 20 inch cock to the MC, it doesn't matter wtf you guys want, he can add it. Just move along to a game that has what you want.
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"I was a car" - MC feels like an object.. that's odd thing to know.
Adressing "??????" nurse by the actual name before even knowing it.
vitiam pill.. brain shrinking.. so much of new concepts to digest..
It needs some good work on Engrish even before grainy renders part.
Adressing "??????" nurse by the actual name before even knowing it.
vitiam pill.. brain shrinking.. so much of new concepts to digest..
It needs some good work on Engrish even before grainy renders part.
Comas are a strange place!!"I was a car" - MC feels like an object.. that's odd thing to know.
Adressing "??????" nurse by the actual name before even knowing it.
vitiam pill.. brain shrinking.. so much of new concepts to digest..
It needs some good work on Engrish even before grainy renders part.
Don't go getting a lobotomy just yet, problem solved, crisis averted.
(Thank you!)Most of the spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors should be solved on the next release, Or maybe there will be a bunch of new ones still undecided about that!!
Chapter 4 will be out in the next few days, all the images are rendered, new spelling, punctuation and grammatical errors have been entered. I just have to update the gallery and photoshop over 100 images yyeaahhh.
"Proud supporter of the Itty Bitty Titty Committee. <\/> Not a harem if you have to share or whore them out.
Hard pass on trannies, NTR, sharing, and femdom. <\/> Fuck all the idiotic male best friends in these games."
You sir are truly a man of culture!
Oh, yeah you're going to like chapter 4 and Chapter 6.
Thank you for the review!!
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Check out my post over here https://f95zone.to/threads/the-pubi...ad-definitely-nsfw.21252/page-16#post-5310514 to see an image from the upcoming chapter 4.
It's a Chapter 4 Release party.
Standard PC, Linux, and Mac (Mac untested)
and Now with Android releases.
Not sure who moderates this thread but can you please wait 3 days before updating the original post, so I can track the number of downloads at itch.io.
Please and thank you.
Enjoy and stay safe out there!
Standard PC, Linux, and Mac (Mac untested)
and Now with Android releases.
You must be registered to see the links
(project page)
You must be registered to see the links
(developers log for the update)Not sure who moderates this thread but can you please wait 3 days before updating the original post, so I can track the number of downloads at itch.io.
Please and thank you.
Enjoy and stay safe out there!
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If you see a problem, Please let me know, so I can fix it.
(physics, plot line, spelling, grammar and punctuation)
Thank you.
(physics, plot line, spelling, grammar and punctuation)
Thank you.