VN Ren'Py Altered [v0.6] [Mr.J]

Mr.J_Dev · Aug 28, 2025

FatGiant said:
I left a few things out of my thoughts list above. Mostly the subjective parts of my impression of this.

For a first project, it is a quite decent effort. Not only in the graphics part but also on the story that has serious grip. Sure, the graphics are a WIP. Daz3d isn't exactly known to be easy and flexible, has a seriously steep learning curve. We can see some improvement from the first images to the last.

It wouldn't be fair to not point out that the graphics aren't top of the line, but, it is a really decent effort that many of the first projects seen here would compare favorably. It is also fair to point out that it is improving.

The same with the posing and generally speaking the other cinematic or photography elements. It is a complex set of skills to develop, something more akin to Directing a Movie or a Photoshoot, but also having the responsibility of setting the scenes and the actors expressions, both facial and all the body language.

One point I'd like to mention to Mr.J_Dev is the eyes expressions. In almost all your renders they are static. I know how hard it is to make them talk, but it is a very important skill to master, then the smiles and frowns... and so on. I noticed that some poses in the last chapter there was already some work done there. I enjoyed it, but, it needs to be worked still.

Your usage of the "Camera" needs some work too, my suggestion would be to see some tutorials on photography to understand the concepts of depths, shadows and angles. Because even if most people don't understand it, with 3D rendering, you may create the most beautiful scene, but if you don't know how to shoot it, it's all for nothing.

Anyway, I rated this with a 4. I don't regret it. But, to be absolutely transparent, it is mostly for effort. I see the improvements and I see the work. I respect that, a LOT.

Good Job.

Peace

I'll try to answer as much as I can.
Honestly I've been learning everything as I go. I learned as much as I could on my own, and I have been looking up things when needed. I pretty much trial and error until things look or work how I want them to.
As for the camera work I've only recently started putting more effort into it.
Poses and expressions I've been trying to put more effort in recently as well, but like I said they do take a lot of time.
All in all I do appreciate the feedback. I'll try to improve what I can

Mr.J_Dev · Aug 28, 2025

Dark Silence said:
I mostly agree with you on the parts that I've played so far. However, with that said, at the point I'm at, just before the party, the story seems a bit disjointed to me. The repetitive convos makes it play it out way too slowly. Hearing the same thing repeated over and over is a bit much. I think during the times that we have to explain things again, it should just fade to black and say that we explain to whoever we were talking to.

Also, I think the renders are better than a lot of other games. Even a few long-time devs can't compare to the quality that these have. But I do agree that the eyes are static and seem very lifeless to this point. I'm no expert, I'm also not the guy who really cares about eyes blinking or being expressive.

There's also several typos here and there. Not to mention wrong words being used. The game could do with a good English speaking proofreader. I would offer my time for this, but I'm helping a few other devs already, so I really don't have the time to do so.

But all in all, I'm liking the game, especially Saeko and I'm NOT a fan of Asian models in Daz, as they all end up looking generic and not very pleasing to me. Very few devs have pulled it off for my tastes and I'm an extremely picky fucker. Anyway, I haven't finished this yet, but decided to give my 2¢.

I am currently working on rewriting on the first few chapters to help them flow better and maybe explain something a little better, I don't plan on changing anything story related. (Thanks to Enigemm who was kind enough to already provide some corrections)
Along with redone new animations for chapter1-6, this should all roll out with the next update.

Mr.J_Dev · Aug 28, 2025

Woodstock_1983 said:
i like girls with makeup but this is too much makeup lol. I can't even look at her face anymore, i just mostly keep my eyes down and read the words when she shows up lol. View attachment 5193166

Yeah I started toning it down recently I plan going back and adjusting in earlier version at a later date.

Mr.J_Dev · Aug 28, 2025

Woodstock_1983 said:
Um, what happened to the headboard in picture 1 for picture 2 lol?

He was sitting on the opposite side of the bed, so when sandra pushes him down. They lay down on the opposite side of the bed away from the headboard.

Trikus · Aug 29, 2025

I just gave this a go. It is clear the developer has thought hard on the game and the backstory, but the game feels very disjointed and has pacing issues. The backstory is interesting and probably a lot better than the story of things happening in the "present". I like the idea of him being altered to give off pheramones and that is why the ladies let him make out with them, but he the times he goes full out perv and molests them (players choice) feel out of character for him. He comes across as a protector in most of the story and doing that with ladies he knows are being influenced doesn't feel right. It isn't bad, it just feels like something in need of a story revision to iron things out.

Mr.J_Dev · Aug 30, 2025

Trikus said:
I just gave this a go. It is clear the developer has thought hard on the game and the backstory, but the game feels very disjointed and has pacing issues. The backstory is interesting and probably a lot better than the story of things happening in the "present". I like the idea of him being altered to give off pheramones and that is why the ladies let him make out with them, but he the times he goes full out perv and molests them (players choice) feel out of character for him. He comes across as a protector in most of the story and doing that with ladies he knows are being influenced doesn't feel right. It isn't bad, it just feels like something in need of a story revision to iron things out.

To answer the first part, it's as simple as I don't have any writing experience prior to this so I really have no idea how to give a story pacing or feel less disjointed. I'm simply writing the story how it comes to me(Having a little more understanding now though I do intend on trying to fix most of those issues). I do get the backstory is more interesting then what's happening in the present(It's a good thing I wanted his backstory to be the hook for the first half of the story), but without giving too much away 'eventually his past is going to catch up.' While he has basically become their protector, he doesn't do it out of sense of duty to them. I can't really explain it now, but it will be brought up later. As for the perverted scenes, It is for the most part left to the player. I get that most devs usually plan out specific scenes at certain points through the story to show how relationships have advanced. To an extent I do limit how far the M.C goes as well, but I prefer to leave options open for the player choose from. If a player doesn't think the M.C should do a certain sexual kink with a certain girl or any of the girls. Then it's for the player to choose.(Honestly it sort of bugs me in some V.Ns where I have a favorite girl, but the dev decided not to give her any sexual content with kink I would've liked to see. or give them kink I would not like to see them do.)
Lastly, I do agree that the early chapters need a revision, and I am currently on rewriting most of them. Unfortunately, I don't have the time to fix everything, I am mainly focusing on the things that desperately need it.
Sorry if for the long response.
Thanks for reading and I hope you stick with the story

TKdropemoff · Aug 30, 2025

This game is good so far man! really enjoying it!

katabasi · Sep 6, 2025

Justbrian74 said:
Ok, I have to point out how huge her head is here... View attachment 4153654

yep
delilah head is too big and hands too it seems
not only that pic, its less noticeable but in other parts of the game also

waldo404 · Sep 29, 2025

Mr.J_Dev returning to the game, I'm kinda lost in the characters - would you have a characters' primer/cheatsheet on hand by any chance? thanks!

Mr.J_Dev · Sep 29, 2025

waldo404 said:
Mr.J_Dev returning to the game, I'm kinda lost in the characters - would you have a characters' primer/cheatsheet on hand by any chance? thanks!

Unfortunately, no.
Tell me what you would like to know specifically and I'll see if I can come up with something for you.

waldo404 · Sep 29, 2025

Mr.J_Dev said:
Unfortunately, no.
Tell me what you would like to know specifically and I'll see if I can come up with something for you.

just a who's who, for the MC. there are a lot of characters (/li) that were introduced in the previous episode (and that's good*), but I'm kinda lost between mom/sisters/aunts/friends/police/... something like a list of pîc - name - relationship to the MC or other characters would be awesome.
WVM did a very nice job at that sort of thing:

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*I have been without internet for a few weeks, but out of the avns I've missed on, it's yours that drew me first. For the story mainly, though the lewds are good too. Thank you dev!

Mr.J_Dev · Sep 30, 2025

I hope this is enough for now, I don't have a lot of free time to dedicate more to this for now. If you want to know anything more specifically (as long as it doesn't pertain to spoilers) I'll answer what I can and add it here. I did add some secrets here, but I can't answer any questions on those. So I leave you to speculate on those. I only did characters who are important to know or will pop soon.

Jay