So Alexandra is at a minimum 48 according to the story line. She says she was 30 when she found out she was pregnant with the MC. Yet she looks like she's 30-35 now. This makes zero sense. The Dev should rewrite this to say that she was 19-24 when she got preggers with the MC; it would flow a lot better and make her story more believable. If her parents really pawned her off on some old rich dude when she was young and naive as she said, then marrying her off for money would make sense between the ages of 16 and 18, maybe 19-20 even. Then she'd get knocked up with Kate, then Elena back to back because her husband is old and wants a son as soon as possible. According to the story Elena was born sickly and then he started treating her like crap. It wasn't long before she left him but found out she was having another kid. That would mean that the MC is roughly a year younger than Elena. So if she married some old rich guy young as stated, it'd make little sense to go 6-7 years or so without having kids. That's why the older dude married her. Plus, this makes it more understandable about why she still looks so good and is a stripper. She should be between 37-40 at most. That's pushing it for a high class stripper in the first place. Women that age are usually running ads and/or standing on street corners. Plus they're run down.
For a rework there's still quite a few mistakes. When you first meet Alexandra, her eyes are brown during the animation, yet silvery blue before and after. The whole Phimosis thing is just plain dumb and would never be caused by lying in a coma. It's usually a birth defect or can be caused by an STD/infection. It's a horrible plot device to get him masturbating. The graphics are amazing though. I like the coma angle part of the story but again, the age thing and real father versus the missing step father is needlessly complicated. Just have one father who either went missing, died or left. Pick one and run with it. There's quite a few grammatical errors.