I guess there is a market for the flowers and bunnies crowd as well
. Hopefully the next project will have a little something worth sinking teeth into.- Thread starter Insanepenguin91
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. Hopefully the next project will have a little something worth sinking teeth into.
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Way to throw this under the fucking bus. Nice insult by the way I'm sure you can find something for the psycho asshole crowd.I guess there is a market for the flowers and bunnies crowd as well
Big Amoretech-world fan but I really, really didn't like the early part of this.
Dreams are usually in the first person, not the third person. Big immersion breaker and awkward grammatically to do it otherwise.
Dreams are usually in the first person, not the third person. Big immersion breaker and awkward grammatically to do it otherwise.
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On a usage note, it's awkward in English to use would as a narrative construction. This either functions as a past tense of will ("He would only see you if you show up on time") or a conditional ("I would give it to you if I could afford it" or "If I hadn't missed the bus, I would've seen Camille about to leave the office.").
We don't use it in the way it's used in this demo ("The female would let out a smirk to herself" or "the woman would playfully turn her body away"). Those instances would more naturally be written as "The female let out a smirk to herself" and "the woman playfully turned her body away" instead, using past tense as the standard narrative form. This happened extremely often in this demo, something I was reminded of when I read your post.
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