VN Ren'Py Anna Exciting Affection [Ch.2 Ep.16] [DeepSleep]

[88stanford88]

Zara Scarlet how you can be sure about what DeepSleep is thinking when you can't even understand what he wrote in the game already published?
I have also posted the start of CH2 just for you to make understand that Anna is fucking everyone to save her boyfriend!
she feels responsible...
Do you remember the ending of the first chapter right? (I'm not sure at this point IF YOU ARE ABLE TO READ)

Andrew was shot because he was involved in the kidnapping of Rebecca (Anna's sister)
Anna isn't sure why Andrew was at the place where Rebecca was restricted... she still hasn't been able to talk to Andrew since HE IS IN A COMA

There is an important suspended story....
it is not sure why Andrew kinapped Rebecca!

AND PLEASE DO NOT SPOILER THE STORYLINE PROGRESSION!

 

[88stanford88]

Where does it actually say she was abandoned?

PROBABLE ANNA NEVER KNEW HER REAL MOTHER... Perhaps Rebecca knows Anna's mother...
Anna never talks about her mother because she was abandoned when she was less than 3 years old ... Anna do not rememver her mother at all
she can't talk about something she never know

She is motherless like the majority of the porn stars

 

[LochRaven]

This thread has officially made jerking off boring now. I hope you're all happy.

 

[DD3DD]

Fuck TikTok

I know, but YouTube Shorts was not working here so I tracked down the original TTK for you

 

[DD3DD]

Oh I probably know who can become Anna's next partner after Andrew, we need to introduce a new character into the game, an old lesbian who can be called for example Zara and Anna will be completely satisfied because no one eats pussy better than Zara Scarlet

I don't agree with the whole personal Zara attack , but an elderly, still hot, experienced lesbian would be a cool character to add to the game and balance having Alfred in the game.

 

[DD3DD]

She is motherless like the majority of the porn stars

Is this actually true or from your imaginary statistics library?

 

[DD3DD]

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this means that during her school years Anna lived with her alcoholic father
(because her mother abandoned her before the school days

One could draw the conclusion that her Dad became an alcoholic because of his wife (Anna's Mum) leaving vs him being an alcoholic prior as Anna stayed with her Dad vs leaving with her Mum.

And to be fair,

The timeline as to when her Mum abandoned them is not clear, as this this could have happened before/early/ mid/ or late school years as the impact of the abandonment and subsequent alcoholism by her Dad would have been a challenge to her successful studies and her decision rationale made in Hard Exams & Christmas Gift, in all possibilities.

 

[khantus]

I don't agree with the whole personal Zara attack , but an elderly, still hot, experienced lesbian would be a cool character to add to the game and balance having Alfred in the game.

I understand that many people didn't like the last short novel (I did) and that they don't agree with Zara's opinions, but starting with personal attacks doesn't seem right.
Zara is not to blame that Deep likes most of her ideas, in fact it was her idea to add the scene with the prostitute in the park bathrooms, many in discord agreed and Deep added that scene.
So, if someone doesn't agree with Deep taking into consideration Zara's ideas you can tell him in his Discord.

 

[88stanford88]

the timeline as to when her Mum abandoned them is not clear

Maybe you're right or maybe I'm the one who have it.. who knows
but using logic I deduce that....

...a good writer like Deeo is, doesn't make every event clear especially in introducing the main character to the readers at the CHAPTER ONE start!
It is clear that it was before the school years because the order of the 3 phrases are not causal

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this this could have happened before/early/ mid/ or late school years as the impact of the abandonment and subsequent alcoholism by her Dad would have been a challenge to her successful studies

Non sense because the last phrase explain with no doubt
that nevertheless Anna having lived with her alcoholic father she managed to graduate
she fucks at 18 with the professors to get the scholarship without which she would not have been able to graduate at the college because her always drunk daddy never paid a cent for her studies... he spent all the money on alcohol

This is pure writting skill with just three sentences Deep explained everything without doubt!
As i said maybe Rebecca knows this mystery... but since her old sister also gets into it with sex (Rebecca is whore that fucks with multiple BBC)... it can be assumed that Rebecca mothered Anna until before she married with Carl

it is possIble that Rebecca abduction has something to do with their mother---

I do not want to spoiler but I'M SURE that this story will be part of CH2 and everything will be revealed only when Andrew returns to consciousness
I also think that Deepsleep knowing Zara's propensity to talk too much in all the forums... is teasing her to avoid revealing THE REAL Anna's story before it's published.

One could draw the conclusion that her Dad became an alcoholic because of his wife (Anna's Mum) leaving vs him being an alcoholic prior as Anna stayed with her Dad vs leaving with her Mum.

this was not written in the introduction so Anna and her dad were both abandoned by their /mom/wife this is logic!
because the mom decided to go abroad this means: to avoid any further contact with them!

 

[88stanford88]

on so Anna and her dad were abandoned by their /mom/wife

I understand that many people didn't like the last short novel (I did) and that they don't agree with Zara's opinions, but starting with personal attacks doesn't seem right.

yeah it is not that bad.... but it is out of the canon of the main game
I would have liked it more if it had at least some of the tags.... should be posted in a different thread with the romance tag
as I wrote previously the story of Anna's First Time without Andrew doesn't work

Spoiler: This is HOW THE SHORT NOVEL WOULD BE WRITTEN TO BE PERFECT

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This is the perfect short novel that fits with all tags in this thread

 

[Zara Scarlet]

I don't agree with the whole personal Zara attack , but an elderly, still hot, experienced lesbian would be a cool character to add to the game and balance having Alfred in the game.

Yeah, I think that would be cool too. They wouldn't even have to be a lesbian, just an older 40 something female. The oldest woman in the game at the moment is Rebecca, who is 29.

 

[xapican]

I didn't even try the Minigame, although I love the whole Anna character and story, the ruckus all around scared me a bit off tbh.
so, I'll wait till Deep, and Awake have the Update for the Mainstory and Play.
before someone says my loss or similar coment I know it.
That was a conscious choice Kudos, and big thank's to Zara and those members who keep us updated about the progress of the game
abrazo.

 

[khantus]

on so Anna and her dad were abandoned by their /mom/wife

yeah it is not that bad.... but it is out of the canon of the main game
I would have liked it more if it had at least some of the tags.... should be posted in a different thread with the romance tag
as I wrote previously the story of Anna's First Time without Andrew doesn't work

Spoiler: This is HOW THE SHORT NOVEL WOULD BE WRITTEN TO BE PERFECT

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This is the perfect short novel that fits with all tags in this thread

on so Anna and her dad were abandoned by their /mom/wife

yeah it is not that bad.... but it is out of the canon of the main game
I would have liked it more if it had at least some of the tags.... should be posted in a different thread with the romance tag
as I wrote previously the story of Anna's First Time without Andrew doesn't work

Spoiler: This is HOW THE SHORT NOVEL WOULD BE WRITTEN TO BE PERFECT

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This is the perfect short novel that fits with all tags in this thread

The final fate of Anna's mother is known only to Deep and it wouldn't be a bad idea to ask her.
As for your version of the last short novel, I find it interesting until the part where you mention that Anna goes to the doctor to have her hymen sewn, I don't see any sense in it but it's your story and I respect it .
For me, the best thing would have been for the player to choose if he wanted Anna to have rough sex in her first time or not.
For example:
In the scene where the bikers arrive with Rebecca and ask Anna if she wants to go with them you could have given the option to stay with grandpa or go with them, choosing the second option everything happens the same as in novel currently.
But if you choose to stay with grandpa, Anna has rough sex on her first time, I don't know, it occurs to me that in the course of the day Anna's grandfather's best friend arrives and brings along beers and snacks so they can spend the evening drinking and telling funny anecdotes, at some point grandpa falls asleep but grandpa's friend and Anna continue chatting and at some point they start flirting, as she is a bit drunk and also secretly, she has been attracted to grandpa's best friend for a long time, that's why she doesn't find the provocative comments he says unpleasant and so without her expecting it, he kisses her and then fucks her hard, with grandpa asleep next to them and in the middle of the session Anna receives a call from Andrew to talk to her, Anna does everything possible to contain her moans and screams of pleasure.
Anyway, everyone has their own stories and I still don't understand why the last short novella was placed here, it should be in the other thread with the other novels.

 

[Zara Scarlet]

it is possIble that Rebecca abduction has something to do with their mother---

Where do you get this from at all? Since we don't know anything about her mother, apart from her divorcing and moving abroad. How could you possibly come up with that kind of scenario? There is nothing whatsoever to suggest anything like that. Rebecca was abducted by Fitzgerald's gang, as part of his gang war with Sergey. She was going to be leverage, to force Sergey to make concessions. To suggest it had anything to do with her mother, is just crazy.

 

[88stanford88]

Where do you get this from at all?

because I know how to write a great story
I'm a professional writer!

Rebecca was abducted by Fitzgerald's gang, as part of his gang war with Sergey.

Maybe the real boss of Fitzgerald gang is Anna Mom!

If you know how to write a story... everything is possible!
And Deep knows very well how to write!

Edit: mine are only logical hypotheses and therefore it is not sure that what I have written will happen but you will never find explicitly written what surprise Deep has foreseen before the release ... but for sure a similar surprise will happen

 

[88stanford88]

a story without unexpected surprises is just BORING!
Deep know how to avoid to reveal everything before the last release will be published!
specially in a story that involves police, detective, mafia bosses and drugs selling.
THE ONLY SURE THING IS THAT ANNA WILL BE THE WINNER!

 

[Zara Scarlet]

because I know how to write a great story
I'm a professional writer!

Finally you admit that you invented all that rubbish about Anna's mother. You claim you can write a great story, but then come up with an absolutely insane theory that Anna's mum is the real leader of Fitzgerald's gang. There is absolutely nothing in the storyline that suggests that in any way. The only thing we do know about her, is that she lives in another country. And that fact alone should tell you that she couldn't be the 'real' leader of Fitzgerald's gang. In any case, why does Fitzgerald's gang have to be led by anyone but Fitzgerald?

 

[88stanford88]

Finally you admit that you invented all that rubbish about Anna's mother.

I don't see your point
I have already write ton of times to be a song/book writer and a producer
mine are only logical deduction based on the already written Anna games where Anna was abandoned by her mom before the school days and this is confirmed in the start of CH1 and Andrew is her boyfriend in all releases and the prequel

Finally you admit that you invented all that rubbish about Anna's mother. You claim you can write a great story, but then come up with an absolutely insane theory that Anna's mum is the real leader of Fitzgerald's gang. There is absolutely nothing in the storyline that suggests that in any way. The only thing we do know about her, is that she lives in another country. And that fact alone should tell you that she couldn't be the 'real' leader of Fitzgerald's gang. In any case, why does Fitzgerald's gang have to be led by anyone but Fitzgerald?

yes but we also know that Fitzgerald kidnapped Rebecca at the end of CH1
and yes I confirm it is possible that in some way the mum may be involved in Rebecca's kidnapping

why kidnaping Anna sister?

how did Fitzgerald know that Rebecca was Anna's sister?... it was Anna who screwed Fitzgerald selling low quality drug
If the mum is the boss of that gang this makes sense
Also when Fitzgerald spoke to Anna in the car in CH2 he didn't seem to be as threatening to Anna as if he had orders by the mum boss to treat her well

I'm not sure of course but this can be a possible reason and Andrew know that her mum is back
but he can't speak because he's in a coma
Andrew had tried to tell Anna something when he was coming to… maybe he wanted to tell her that he saw her mum and was forced to kidnap Rebecca but passed out again before he could say it

 

[LochRaven]

 

[khantus]

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Weekly update

Hello, dear Patrons!

A quick weekly update on the progress of the next release!

We have done a lot of renders till now and I'm happy with the progress.

Here you can see the scene with Earl. As you know, he's quite a cunning character and will use all of his traits if Anna decides to do business with him.

I have done the better half of the renders, and Awake is already working on some nice custom animations for scenes to make them even spicier.

I added the office scene to the list. Other ones still stay the same as I wrote in the last update.

Office scene, where some recent characters will appear and make things more interesting. Alfred's fashion show scene, Earl's paths. A scene with Rebecca only. Ashley is finally back. Anna at the beach and some other smaller scenes.

Thank you again for your fantastic support!

Sincerely yours,

Deep

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