VN Ren'Py Astreon [Ch.2 v0.4] [NoGlory]

[Ashira13]

The Dev is using ChatGTP, right?

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The dialogue is still rubbish.
Most of it still looks like the kind of pretentious crap that AI shits out.
Aside from being pretentious, the above isn't even true, actresses do what they're told by the director in accordance with the script.

That's just an example, one of many.
I just can't believe the writing is still this bad, overly verbose, totally pretentious and saying so much without actually saying anything useful.

It's just so tiring to slog through, yap yap yap yap yap and then you still don't really know anything new anyway.

maybe, or maybe not, but could use some english proofreading. not seen that many "errors", but i may miss some from time to time,
i guess, the dev meant to write : "Forgive my boldness, but... Why did you save us?"
disregarding spelling errors. and maybe a bit too much overuse of contractions, the story is pretty well written in an overall sense. so, not complaining too much

 

[Zanny@$7]

maybe, or maybe not, but could use some english proofreading. not seen that many "errors", but i may miss some from time to time, View attachment 5643090
i guess, the dev meant to write : "Forgive my boldness, but... Why did you save us?"
disregarding spelling errors. and maybe a bit too much overuse of contractions, the story is pretty well written in an overall sense. so, not complaining too much

For Me it's not the spelling..or other English errors(i can handle that)...it's just the characters blab a lot..to the point I lose the sense of what's going on