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If you're looking for a name change, why not try "Avalonia"? It's one letter and it keeps the spirit of the concept alive.
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Also, don't cater to anyone's demands. Make the game YOU want to make, tell the story YOU want to tell. If someone doesn't want to play it because of one scene, it's their loss. There are plenty more who will play it regardless.
- Aug 19, 2018
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ty for taking one for the team
i saw that same pic and went straight to the comment section. sad it's unavoidable
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Putting this down due to the english dialogue. If it gets fixed later I'll come back, but i found myself not understanding what a line of dialogue was supposed to say pretty often.
- Feb 14, 2018
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It looks promising, has some graphical details, but nothing serious, good luck.
I hope you mean that there are "problems in some graphical details" (maybe quickly ountline them so they can be fixed!It looks promising, has some graphical details, but nothing serious, good luck.
) and you do *not* mean that there are details in the graphics of a visual novel. e-d
- Feb 14, 2018
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Yes, I mean that there are some details in the renders but they are understandable since it is his first project and surely over time they will be solved.I hope you mean that there are "problems in some graphical details" (maybe quickly ountline them so they can be fixed!
e-d
I actually thought the TM was a meta reference within the narrative, given that Avalon is a corporation in the game. In the same way that Amazon, Netflix, or PepsiCo would have a TM. I would have preferred you keep it.
I received the following exception error after meeting Richard and Frida and selecting 'Go with them'. The conversation continued a little while before the exception occurred.
And after using 'ignore' I received the next exception.
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- Jun 30, 2018
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dear dev: if you can read this, please considere the following:
i know that this game is a WIP and is translated and all but, there is some things that could use a fix or 2.
(and also i apologize if this rings the wrong bell. because i know is not that easy to make a game)
the introduccion of characters: i have a hard time guessing wich one is each one, and in some point, they where all at the same time, can i recomend you to use sprites to highlight them more?.
the consistency of the story: in some point of the story 3 armed guys come into a plaza and attack a pair of childrends, moments and is like.
"oh, so you all were in the midle of an atack in a public place with bullets and all, even this guys special ops hunters from god know where apear, and also your mo...this woman ( why you live in a society that frunce upon to a wolf-guy call mom to his owner?? lots of owners of dog call them "baby" or my "son", it shouldt be that weird) kill another guy with guns SHE IS CARRING WITH HER, also your wolf-guy pet kill another one (no one ask for the third one at this point)... the cops are...ok you can leave"
and the less we talk about why 2 of the top tier assasins can be recognized by a police agent, the better. (because thats will mean that this girls are not that clever)
the title: this game is about the laboratory/factory? i though it was about the lesbians, and then i though it was about the wolf-guy, fix your mind dude.
the translation: i higly recomend you to keep some words and mannerism from the original language, its make the story fresh. make it understable yes, but also keep it autentic. portuguese is a cool language with lots to offer to this story.
this is just a humble opinion from a random citizen of the internet.
i root for your game, best of luck.
psdt: the music is on point.
i know that this game is a WIP and is translated and all but, there is some things that could use a fix or 2.
(and also i apologize if this rings the wrong bell. because i know is not that easy to make a game)
the introduccion of characters: i have a hard time guessing wich one is each one, and in some point, they where all at the same time, can i recomend you to use sprites to highlight them more?.
the consistency of the story: in some point of the story 3 armed guys come into a plaza and attack a pair of childrends, moments and is like.
"oh, so you all were in the midle of an atack in a public place with bullets and all, even this guys special ops hunters from god know where apear, and also your mo...this woman ( why you live in a society that frunce upon to a wolf-guy call mom to his owner?? lots of owners of dog call them "baby" or my "son", it shouldt be that weird) kill another guy with guns SHE IS CARRING WITH HER, also your wolf-guy pet kill another one (no one ask for the third one at this point)... the cops are...ok you can leave"
and the less we talk about why 2 of the top tier assasins can be recognized by a police agent, the better. (because thats will mean that this girls are not that clever)
the title: this game is about the laboratory/factory? i though it was about the lesbians, and then i though it was about the wolf-guy, fix your mind dude.
the translation: i higly recomend you to keep some words and mannerism from the original language, its make the story fresh. make it understable yes, but also keep it autentic. portuguese is a cool language with lots to offer to this story.
this is just a humble opinion from a random citizen of the internet.
i root for your game, best of luck.
psdt: the music is on point.
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