VN Ren'Py Away from Home [Ep.1-24] [vatosgames]

[dumbass55]

"We got the best pancake in the town!" > *brings out a cake*

 

[humanstickobserver]

OK, I'm almost done with the game thus far, so....
time for nit-picking, because I seem to do that a lot.

I can't get a read on the MC. Is he mature and wants to be responsible? Is he careless and someone who whines constantly if he doesn't get his way?
I don't know. He's written both ways.
Is he someone who actually care about the people around him, or is he someone who thinks with his dick and will lie and manipulate to get people to let him fuck them? I don't know, he's written both ways.

One thing that frustrates me with MCs in games like this is the "oh no, I have a hard on, and I must either masturbate or fuck something, now, or else it will never go away and I will be in agonizing pain!" scenarios.
We get it. He wants to get laid. A lot. By everyone. And it's a porn game, so obviously that's the point. But it's over the top to the point of annoying.

I'm also not a fan of the fact that according to the walkthrough and walkthrough mod, the way to play towards a harem is to... lie to your cousin about lying to her, and despite the fact I'm supposed to actually care about her, and the fact that I know she had idealized kiss, dating, and losing her virginity to someone she loves, using that to my advantage to fuck her and talk her into being OK with me also fucking her friend. It makes it seem like the only way to pursue her is to act like that. And considering how cute she is, I wish there was a lot more interaction with her.
Or, with most characters.
Character development is really limited.

But, saving my biggest nitpick for last..., Janet, her husband, medical issues, and the fact that the dev apparently can't do math.
Janet is complaining that she is worried that she is getting older, and losing her chance to be a mother. It is very established, now, that this is her 10th anniversary with her husband, not from marriage, but from dating.
They started dating when she was in highschool.
She is 34.
This means, they started dating while she was a 24 year old highschool student.
The oldest she should be is 29. And, assuming she and her husband are the same age, so dating as a minor isn't creepy, they could have been together since their early teens and she could be 23.
This isn't down to minor translation oddities. This is just an inconstant script.

Now, as for his medical issues? The idea that He can not make his wife pregnant because he has a micro-penis, and low T levels, and there is no treatment is just stupid. Even with low T levels, your body still makes sperm. If he didn't have viable sperm, or had such a low sperm count that pregnancy was unlikely, those are separate medical issues. His micro-penis might mean that, when it comes to PiV intercourse, she isn't going to get off on being fucked alone, but he can still ejaculate. And testosterone boosters and supplements are common and available, some even over the counter. If you want to add a side story of a very much in love couple that are dealing with the strain of being unable to have kids together, at least google "medical causes for male infertility" and insert in game a better reason, because this entire plot line is so poorly written that it makes the player inclined to wonder if the dev themselves even has a working idea on how babies are made

OK, bitching and nitpicking aisde?
The models are gorgeous. And the plot is intriguing. I enjoyed myself enough that I am sure I will come back and continue to play as more is released.

But I have to nitpick. I don't write many stories, and certainly don't write games, but I've tried both. I'm just not very satisfied with the outcome. One thing I was always told, though, to make a story successful, was that I had to follow an outline and make sure things matched up, because a world has to be internally consistent, and that when you have the choice to do research, or just make shit up, you should generally do at least minimal research, because when a reader who knows better hits a section where you make shit up, they'll know it.
And these rules should apply even when someone is making porn.
Especially if the dev is, in other regards, putting in the effort to make the game as amazing as possible.
A game that looks this good shouldn't suffer from the poor writing it is occasionally inflicted with.

 

[rahkshi01]

OK, I'm almost done with the game thus far, so....
time for nit-picking, because I seem to do that a lot.

I can't get a read on the MC. Is he mature and wants to be responsible? Is he careless and someone who whines constantly if he doesn't get his way?
I don't know. He's written both ways.
Is he someone who actually care about the people around him, or is he someone who thinks with his dick and will lie and manipulate to get people to let him fuck them? I don't know, he's written both ways.

One thing that frustrates me with MCs in games like this is the "oh no, I have a hard on, and I must either masturbate or fuck something, now, or else it will never go away and I will be in agonizing pain!" scenarios.
We get it. He wants to get laid. A lot. By everyone. And it's a porn game, so obviously that's the point. But it's over the top to the point of annoying.

I'm also not a fan of the fact that according to the walkthrough and walkthrough mod, the way to play towards a harem is to... lie to your cousin about lying to her, and despite the fact I'm supposed to actually care about her, and the fact that I know she had idealized kiss, dating, and losing her virginity to someone she loves, using that to my advantage to fuck her and talk her into being OK with me also fucking her friend. It makes it seem like the only way to pursue her is to act like that. And considering how cute she is, I wish there was a lot more interaction with her.
Or, with most characters.
Character development is really limited.

But, saving my biggest nitpick for last..., Janet, her husband, medical issues, and the fact that the dev apparently can't do math.
Janet is complaining that she is worried that she is getting older, and losing her chance to be a mother. It is very established, now, that this is her 10th anniversary with her husband, not from marriage, but from dating.
They started dating when she was in highschool.
She is 34.
This means, they started dating while she was a 24 year old highschool student.
The oldest she should be is 29. And, assuming she and her husband are the same age, so dating as a minor isn't creepy, they could have been together since their early teens and she could be 23.
This isn't down to minor translation oddities. This is just an inconstant script.

Now, as for his medical issues? The idea that He can not make his wife pregnant because he has a micro-penis, and low T levels, and there is no treatment is just stupid. Even with low T levels, your body still makes sperm. If he didn't have viable sperm, or had such a low sperm count that pregnancy was unlikely, those are separate medical issues. His micro-penis might mean that, when it comes to PiV intercourse, she isn't going to get off on being fucked alone, but he can still ejaculate. And testosterone boosters and supplements are common and available, some even over the counter. If you want to add a side story of a very much in love couple that are dealing with the strain of being unable to have kids together, at least google "medical causes for male infertility" and insert in game a better reason, because this entire plot line is so poorly written that it makes the player inclined to wonder if the dev themselves even has a working idea on how babies are made

OK, bitching and nitpicking aisde?
The models are gorgeous. And the plot is intriguing. I enjoyed myself enough that I am sure I will come back and continue to play as more is released.

But I have to nitpick. I don't write many stories, and certainly don't write games, but I've tried both. I'm just not very satisfied with the outcome. One thing I was always told, though, to make a story successful, was that I had to follow an outline and make sure things matched up, because a world has to be internally consistent, and that when you have the choice to do research, or just make shit up, you should generally do at least minimal research, because when a reader who knows better hits a section where you make shit up, they'll know it.
And these rules should apply even when someone is making porn.
Especially if the dev is, in other regards, putting in the effort to make the game as amazing as possible.
A game that looks this good shouldn't suffer from the poor writing it is occasionally inflicted with.

I mostly agree with these sentiments as well, especially some of the inconsistencies in the story. However one thing I should point out though/ask did it really say in the walkthrough that you had to lie to your cousin for harem route or was that just for one of her stats? Because in the walkthrough it said LillyNoLove+1. That kinda seems to imply a bed route later on rather than a harem route. You would think that for a harem route saying that you love her would make sense. If I am wrong in that regard then it totally makes no sense to lie about it.

 

[humanstickobserver]

I mostly agree with these sentiments as well, especially some of the inconsistencies in the story. However one thing I should point out though/ask did it really say in the walkthrough that you had to lie to your cousin for harem route or was that just for one of her stats? Because in the walkthrough it said LillyNoLove+1. That kinda seems to imply a bed route later on rather than a harem route. You would think that for a harem route saying that you love her would make sense. If I am wrong in that regard then it totally makes no sense to lie about it.

Using Zoey Raven's walkthrough mod, she says her mod is for the harem route, you are guided to lie. According to the text walkthrough, lying is what continues the scene.
It's entirely possible that telling her you love her, no lie, might be better in the long run, but that isn't the route the walkthroughs suggest.

 

[rahkshi01]

Using Zoey Raven's walkthrough mod, she says her mod is for the harem route, you are guided to lie. According to the text walkthrough, lying is what continues the scene.
It's entirely possible that telling her you love her, no lie, might be better in the long run, but that isn't the route the walkthroughs suggest.

Hmmm well just gonna have to have saves for both routes then just in case, but not gonna lie, lying to her just feels wrong for a harem route.

 

[Felix100]

The game is one of the very best game right now. Updates are regular, renders are nicely done. I hope we can see high quality renders in the coming times. Milfs are hot as Fuck. We already have many milf fucking scenes. Worthy of supporting in Patreon.

 

[Sesinho]

Butts look nice, milfs look like milfs, most of them supermodel milfs, but its ok.
The importan part its the booty. I liked the first part of Lily, cause i can relate to that incest teasing, and seems pretty accurate to me. Teasing was over too quickly though.

Theres some inconsistencies, like having to tell Lily that chloe was just sex, twice. Like end of chapter telling im not helping cody resulting in helping cody after copntinuing the relationship with Chloe. The anniversary afternoon with ms watson.
Overall is good.

 

[PandaLoverGames]

With all due respect to the author, but very strange style of characters. Like a wax doll.

 

[Wicked Garden]

I'm really loving this game. Cody is still upset I can't say I blame him, it was hilarious how MC basically said "I'm gonna keep fucking your Mom and that's final", he practically sounded like his dad. The build up between Nora and MC has been perfect so far, It's not like the Dev is blueballing us seeing as how MC is still getting his dick wet every update. There's SO MANY great asses in this game, round, juicy, succulent asses appearing on my screen left and right I can't keep up. There's Lily, Chloe, Sophia, Eva, Nora, Janet and now a new addition his been made the team in Lydia.. now I'm all giddy inside.

 

[Queen Daenerys]

Hmmm well just gonna have to have saves for both routes then just in case, but not gonna lie, lying to her just feels wrong for a harem route.

I chose not to lie also

 

[Queen Daenerys]

OK, I'm almost done with the game thus far, so....
time for nit-picking, because I seem to do that a lot.

I can't get a read on the MC. Is he mature and wants to be responsible? Is he careless and someone who whines constantly if he doesn't get his way?
I don't know. He's written both ways.
Is he someone who actually care about the people around him, or is he someone who thinks with his dick and will lie and manipulate to get people to let him fuck them? I don't know, he's written both ways.

One thing that frustrates me with MCs in games like this is the "oh no, I have a hard on, and I must either masturbate or fuck something, now, or else it will never go away and I will be in agonizing pain!" scenarios.
We get it. He wants to get laid. A lot. By everyone. And it's a porn game, so obviously that's the point. But it's over the top to the point of annoying.

I'm also not a fan of the fact that according to the walkthrough and walkthrough mod, the way to play towards a harem is to... lie to your cousin about lying to her, and despite the fact I'm supposed to actually care about her, and the fact that I know she had idealized kiss, dating, and losing her virginity to someone she loves, using that to my advantage to fuck her and talk her into being OK with me also fucking her friend. It makes it seem like the only way to pursue her is to act like that. And considering how cute she is, I wish there was a lot more interaction with her.
Or, with most characters.
Character development is really limited.

But, saving my biggest nitpick for last..., Janet, her husband, medical issues, and the fact that the dev apparently can't do math.
Janet is complaining that she is worried that she is getting older, and losing her chance to be a mother. It is very established, now, that this is her 10th anniversary with her husband, not from marriage, but from dating.
They started dating when she was in highschool.
She is 34.
This means, they started dating while she was a 24 year old highschool student.
The oldest she should be is 29. And, assuming she and her husband are the same age, so dating as a minor isn't creepy, they could have been together since their early teens and she could be 23.
This isn't down to minor translation oddities. This is just an inconstant script.

Now, as for his medical issues? The idea that He can not make his wife pregnant because he has a micro-penis, and low T levels, and there is no treatment is just stupid. Even with low T levels, your body still makes sperm. If he didn't have viable sperm, or had such a low sperm count that pregnancy was unlikely, those are separate medical issues. His micro-penis might mean that, when it comes to PiV intercourse, she isn't going to get off on being fucked alone, but he can still ejaculate. And testosterone boosters and supplements are common and available, some even over the counter. If you want to add a side story of a very much in love couple that are dealing with the strain of being unable to have kids together, at least google "medical causes for male infertility" and insert in game a better reason, because this entire plot line is so poorly written that it makes the player inclined to wonder if the dev themselves even has a working idea on how babies are made

OK, bitching and nitpicking aisde?
The models are gorgeous. And the plot is intriguing. I enjoyed myself enough that I am sure I will come back and continue to play as more is released.

But I have to nitpick. I don't write many stories, and certainly don't write games, but I've tried both. I'm just not very satisfied with the outcome. One thing I was always told, though, to make a story successful, was that I had to follow an outline and make sure things matched up, because a world has to be internally consistent, and that when you have the choice to do research, or just make shit up, you should generally do at least minimal research, because when a reader who knows better hits a section where you make shit up, they'll know it.
And these rules should apply even when someone is making porn.
Especially if the dev is, in other regards, putting in the effort to make the game as amazing as possible.
A game that looks this good shouldn't suffer from the poor writing it is occasionally inflicted with.

"Not nitpicking" *Proceeds to nitpick*

 

[humanstickobserver]

"Not nitpicking" *Proceeds to nitpick*

when did I say "not nitpicking?"
I'm pretty sure I made it clear that what I was doing was entirely nitpicking.

 

[Tragic Princess]

In this game I prefer, and I hope, that "main"/mafia story is "on-hold" as long as possible, as I see it as a secondary/background thing.
The main thing here, imo, is the everyday suburbans life, where our dear mc can fuck and fool around with all those gorgeous milfs&girls, both those already in the game, and those waiting to make the appearance.

Şo, once again, Im not in this particular game for its mafia story or whatever (though it could be good), yet for its simple, though nicely built, milfs fuck-fests

You have so much fun fucking these gorgeous hotties that you forget that there's a main story lol

 

[worstform]

O K - the premise is .. E r a s e r -witness protection program - hit men are coming kind of shenanigans ... watch out for Terminator 3000 !

whats the third gif in your signature ? cantoforte ?

 

[Canto Forte]

She is still Victoria from those broken dreamers very much away from home if you ask me ...

whats the third gif

 

[worstform]

She is still Victoria from those broken dreamers very much away from home if you ask me ...

Thank you!

 

[Funkhole88]

is anyone else getting a virus warning when attempting to download the mod? Zoey Raven just wanted to double check and make sure the file is still ok. I get the same issue when trying to download from your patreon as well.

 

[Zoey Raven]

is anyone else getting a virus warning when attempting to download the mod? Zoey Raven just wanted to double check and make sure the file is still ok. I get the same issue when trying to download from your patreon as well.

Someone said this the other night, but myself nor the staff have. It is only a script file that is archived in there. I assure you it's safe. It's been downloaded hundreds of times. Sometimes for whatever reason it downloads here will show up as that on antivirus programs, but I assure you it's safe. I'll stake my reputation on it. Plus you are only the second person I've heard it from. Can you tell me what antivirus you are running. bet it was the same as the other persons, cause It's been up for a good 2 weeks or more now.

 

[ropershy]

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And I'm not happy when you keep refusing us and rejecting us, you don't want to surrender to us and be happy.

In earlier EPs, there was a feeling between MC and Nora. Now the longer it goes on, this refusal, Nora wants us to find a girlfriend, she doesn't accept that she wants to be with MC.. It feels like everything is slowly fading out. At least I feel that way.

MC has to try and get Nora, break through her barrier and let the talks about "crossing the line" finally end.

Besides, I'm curious what will happen next with Janet. Because after sex she cried. And what she's going to do about what the MC told her about Adam's gift.

I'm going to get yelled at for saying this! But Nora is just being female! She wants MC but tells herself she shouldn't have him. I still want to know what she did to MC that one night they slept together. She did something while he was asleep she feels guilty about.

Janet - I believe Adams plan to get her pregnant didnt work. So Janet will get MC to impregnant her so Adam believe his plan did work. now will adam find out about janet & MC. We will have to see what the dev comes up with

 

[ropershy]

Yep, that has gaming sense for sure - getting power&closure, yet as Ive said above, perhaps in this first game chapter (consisting of 10-15 episodes, lets say), the focus could be on the mc being just kid who got lucky (many times, neverminding cliche) in that milfs-suburbs, regardless of his power and similar "adult" stuff...
Then later, in the second chapter/part he could start to unfold the mystery, to get more power, and to rise in the mafias world (a cliche again, yet who cares), getting more and more different ladies along the way...
Either way, this is one of my favorite games for sure, kudos to the dev and his rookie-work!

i agree with you about the mafia story being held off. i'm not sure MC has meet "The Hermiit" yet. A lot of post believ it is Cody, but Jasmine's story killed that line of thinking. So it can't be any of the "teenager" they would have all been too young to be "the hermit" when jasmine & her mom were taken from jasmine's Dad.

Jeff Davis maybe ? no he is an ass/big wig but more like a Lt. for "the hermit"
Bob too much a lap dog for jeff Davis

hmmmmm Eva, Sophia or Janet maybe after all what do the do all day while the kids are out?

Adam i don't recall it mentioning what he did for work but with that house he has money!

jasmine introduced MC to a new girl. Don't remember her name but he Dad was a Pastor. being a Pastor would be a really good cover for "the hermit"

MC's dad would also be a shocking twist. Maybe Jeff & Bob have been skimming money from "the hermit". Maybe Dad knows how MC & Nora really feel about each other . So Dad is getting all his enemies in 1 area and feeling safe before he tries to remove him

just some idea still leaning towards the 3 wives, adam and the Pastor