Good enough for a start. I can see the improvements as the game progresses. Not sure if English is your first language due to some grammatical/spelling errors where "you" is used for "your" and some verbs left out of the conversation. Would have to play all over to note the particular instances. Something that's glaring though, you said in the story that he "bought" the apartment, yet in once instance Jane "owns" the building. So, I'm confused. Can someone buy an apartment as part of a multi-complex or it's leased/rented out? Not sure of the culture or locale of the setting of the game. Another thing, why are the hackers sleeping on what looked like bunk beds or wooden beds with a mattress thrown on it like one you'd find in a jail cell yet the sofas in their computer room look so posh?