I just want to remind you that Jill is the only girl MC explicitly admits he's in love with. And yes he did it at a picnic. If he didn't say all that crap about love, I might believe it, but now all he's saying sounds like the usual lies to get Jill into bed. He didn't even say as many words of love to Josy as he did to Jill.
At that time, the mc is possibly getting serious with a bunch of girls (his thoughts right after the picnic):
mc: "(I told her I'm falling for her...)"
mc: "(That's pretty damn big...)"
mc: "(Am I really?)"
mc: "(I mean, I chose Jill over Sage today...)"
mc: "(We said that there were no strings attached, but what about Maya and Josy?)"
mc: "(Bella...)"
mc: "(I've done things with Bella... Jill's best friend...)"
mc: "(What kind of piece of shit am I?)"
mc: "(How can I say that to Jill when she's not the only one?)"
mc: "(I'm lost... Is that how I feel?)"
mc: "(I've played the field without realizing I'm getting close to more than one girl...)"
mc: "(I need to figure myself out before this leads to anyone getting hurt...)"
mc: "(I hope I'm not past that point already.)"
So his behaviour and the various main girls are on his conscience; Jill isn't the only one. So on the same day that he's done a stocktake of his relationships, it would be ridiculous if he went into a threesome a few hours later.
But a week later, given what's been going on in his life, it isn't hard to believe he's slipped into his old (or relatively recent) ways. You don't have to completely agree with it to acknowledge it's feasible. You don't have to personally identify with that behaviour to see that the kind of person the mc is, a recently shy guy, is now potentially swimming in pussy and isn't always thinking with his head, the one on his shoulders I mean.
DIK should have been rejected by Jill even earlier. In general, there should not have been such a situation when player DIK runs to the date of Tybalt and Jill, it is stupid and not typical of DIK in general. In fact, if I were DPC, I would make the player's decision to go or not to go to the picnic to Jill's affection. DIK automatically skips that meeting and goes to Sage, whereas Chick automatically rejects Sage.
Not a typical DIK behaviour by whose standards? Maybe Tommy wouldn't lift a finger for someone he liked, but even as a DIK, the mc still has feelings, he's still introspective, and he still cares about these girls.
That decision between Sage and Jill was the first really big decision in the game, when it happened I was like, "Oh shit, this feels serious". And it was. I'd have hated for that to have been just an automatic decision made by the character, and I think I'd not be alone: If people were still playing the field and when Jill rocked up with the picnic basket the mc automatically turned her away, people would be certainly criticising it.
Having the relationship with Jill still continue for 2 more episodes only to have Jill end it was harsh, but the good kind of harsh. It gave us more fodder for all the Jill hate posts!
So, to summarize.
MC knows that Quinn is pimping out girls and forcing them to sell their bodies. He certainly doesn't have proof yet that prostitution and free tuition are directly related, but still he tells Maya as vague a phrase as possible that Maya will forget in an hour? All it took was one line of dialog:
("I don't want to get in trouble with Quinn."). It was enough to understand MC's motivation for not telling the whole truth. And it seems to be that motivation that makes the MC not tell the whole truth to Maya if you look at the context of the story. This scene as a whole is poorly done. The entire narrative in the game is built on understatements and character innuendos. I have nothing against this type of narrative, but there are too many of these innuendos.
Definitely, a single thought that justified the mc not saying more could have helped. But at the same time, since Maya suggested talking to Sage, the mc possibly didn't feel he needed to elaborate and was happy with that direction; no need for him to worry anymore.
This scene could have been done in the middle of the episode. The player has no such attachment to Melanie and Sarah unlike Lily, Envy and Quinn.
Which player? You? You can't speak for all the other players who adored that scene. Fucking them at the party would have been fine, but going home with them is a whole new ballgame. How many people were disappointed that when the mc said his goodbyes to Cammy and Riona they didn't invite him?
Nah, and ending with those two girls was great. But after that night I hope they don't ask the mc for money for sex anymore.
Actually at this point, none of the Restaurant girls should expect the mc to pay.
If that were true, DPC wouldn't be spending two weeks each just to figure out its block diagram. He himself admits in his own status updates that he is confused about his own scenario structure because of the large branching and spends a lot of time separating the wheat from the chaff.
I don't imagine he needs to start creating a block diagram now, he would have been working with something like that from the beginning. Plus really how many serious variables are there that need to factor into ever scene?
DPC's deliberately transferred every single variable from season 1 & 2 into season 3, but that's because he knows people are looking into the code and he doesn't want to show his hand as to what will matter later, but really there aren't that many variables.
All he'd need to do is consider his core variables for each scene. It isn't hard (there are less than 300 variables that are not just statistics, pet names or the like). I work with software that has thousands of variables, 300 is not hard to manage at all.
On the contrary, I don't think it's a big plot problem. Maya is presented as a girl who was deceived by her own father. Maya seems to be really afraid of her own father and lives in real fear. No wonder why she is so unselfish and cowardly. The turn with the loan shows this nature of Maya.
The idea that Maya's dad is blackmailing her is not a plot problem. The idea that Maya was duped by her dad is not a plot problem. The mechanics of the loan is the problem. Maya's exact words:
Maya: "He prepared a student loan application where I was a cosigner."
That's not possible. Maya could not be a cosigner on a loan. It would mean it's someone else's loan (her father's?), and she signs to guarantee payments will be made in the event that the debtor (her dad?) can't do it. That doesn't make any sense. No bank would accept a broke student as a cosigner.
The loan is for
her tuition. In the real world the loan would be in her name and her dad would co-sign or be a guarantor (if a guarantor was even required for a student loan).
But DPC wrote it the wrong way around so that her dad could have control of the money and lord it over her.
The only way DPC can get out of this is to have it that the dad was bluffing, and Maya is too naive to understand that her dad doesn't actually have any control over her loan at all. This would make Maya look pretty stupid if all she had to do was look at the loan contract to realise her dad has no control at all. So DPC has painted himself into a corner here: Either the loan doesn't make sense or Maya has been freaking out and doing whatever it takes (other than work) to get her tuition paid, rather than just look at the loan details...
