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The example iamcomming makes thou works well enough, and I mean the cliffanger with Rio, to be honest considering how Game of Thrones ended also a Darth Vader cameo could have improved it.as important is might be, how you execute it, is way more important. What has not been the strongest suit of DPC writing.
He certainly can shine during comedic scenes, or lewd scenes, or scenes that lead to lewd. like the whole scene with Rio and MC in Rio room, where MC is messing with her stuff, it is a well crafted and build up scene, the same way as it has a nice build up to an eventual Sally sex scenes
However, when it's come to drama, think about the whole Josy/maya thing. In the whole episode MC constantly bitching about how he was " betrayed ". .Literally the whole narrative tells you it is better for him to stay away from them.
Even before you get the choice to decide what as a player you want, HE ranting about, how dating with others was good for him, and need to focus on himself etc etc, and Derek was there for him and opened his eye etc, it's kind of a whole mess of a speech, and then " HEy I want more with both of you "
and then we get the tip of iceberg with the shity affinity system, because uh-huh , all the major decision you made up until this point that has nothing to do with the girls, will gonna determine whether you succed or not.
I would gladly like to talk about all of this with DPC in a serious conversation, but we know how that goes
I think DPC can write drama, with one exception, when said drama is directly related to the affinity system.
I chug it up to that specifically, having to rely on an affinity system makes the whole sitation "gamey" and it's hard (if not impossible) to create believable drama when the strings are out in the open.
