VN Ren'Py Being a DIK [v0.11.1] [DrPinkCake]

[phill_leotardo]

out of curiosity: can you give me some examples of better writers?

my experience is very limited

Its good money to bet on DPC at the current momment being the best writter, or whoever writes for him, if he has a team.
I think its reasonable to say the characteristics you'd look for to judge a writting skill would be things like: story immersion, how very distinct each character is and how memorable they are, and at last, but just as important how dialogs are written, metrics (how much meaningful content per frame/paragraph), whether its necessary or not.

I think if you keep in mind these aspects you'll have a good feeling i suppose. But to put it simply, in pratical terms, how many times did you prefer the sex scene over the dialogs and you will know.

 

[Reaurt]

in reality it always depends on how it is written.

this 3-way relationship is very fragile. we are at the beginning (the moment in which relationships are full of passion) and the dominant feeling is fear (of being the excluded ones) which is counterbalanced by the hope that everything works. but fear is real, hope is always controlled by will.

then it could also go as you say: a moment of crisis which is then reassembled or not (this same dynamic could be repeated in the case of "just friendship")

the triangle of AL was heaven on earth, 2 girls who loved MC so much that they were ready to share it, and who loved each other so well that they forgive without problem the worst of betrayals. compared to the Mayan-Josy-MC triangle it was bombproof (but not fireproof ...), too good to be true.

instead considering only the scenario of "only friendship", also in this case the crisis between the two girls is almost mandatory, to put everything back into play, otherwise they would disappear from the radar

True. It's possible that this fragile beginning could bloom into something more solid, with careful attention to both the girls needs, and their own attentiveness to you (the MC) and each other so that no one feels left out. Real poly relationships that last do it that way. But that depends on whether DPC gives the players the option to thread that needle. He definitely could pull it off with his character writing, but it's up to him to give us that option to pursue.

 

[felicemastronzo]

I agree he does. See for me there was no feeling, no choice even, didn't even have to think about it. Sorry Megs...

My opinion of DPC's writing is no secret here, he isn't the best, there are far better written VN's on this site and better games (in my personal opinion). Compared to a lot of the crap made though, I can see why people are so easily impressed and will admit, this is a huge improvement over his last (like a day and night improvement).

for me DPC is really good in 2 aspects:
to create identification with his characters, even the secondary ones
in the use of the soundtrack, that 99 games out of 100 is just a nuisance

on writing in absolute I also have doubts

it is still much above the average of the genre, even if I don't know if it can be considered a boast .. it is full of junk

 

[Wiso232]

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[SPACE_BOOOOOST]

for me DPC is really good in 2 aspects:
to create identification with his characters, even the secondary ones
in the use of the soundtrack, that 99 games out of 100 is just a nuisance

on writing in absolute I also have doubts

it is still much above the average of the genre, even if I don't know if it can be considered a boast .. it is full of junk

This is why I often bring up the first Life Is Strange as a comparison to BaDIK. That game has fairly decent writing but someone who has experience with similar stories (especially with the material the game was influenced by) will see most if not all plot twists from a mile away. Even so, the characters are so relatable and lovable despite (and sometimes because of) their flaws that it more than compensates for the weaker aspects. The music is really just icing on the cake, every song is so well selected and fits the theme.

BaDIK has been a very similar experience for me. Sometimes I forget that I'm playing an adult game until a pair of titties suddenly pop out, the characters just draw me in completely. Even the ones that are largely ignored in most other VNs like the "male best friend" who almost always ends up being a nuisance more than anything else; Derek is the bro I wish I had during my college years. A lot of them seem stereotypical at first but that never bothered me for some reason and it's pretty clear most of them will be fleshed out more as the story progresses. As for the soundtrack, a bunch of them are still on my playlist after listening to them hundreds of times already, DPC sure knows how to pick them.

 

[ThePresident451]

Affinity system sucks, plot holes here, plot holes there, and now DPC is a bad writer too. I wonder why do you guys even bother playing this game, then. It's so bad!

You're criticising a dev who, with his writing, managed to gain 8k (!) patrons and created a job out of porn.

Everyone is here because they're invested in the story, they want to know what's behind Bella's door, what's the deal with Chad, all the remaining questions, and how the story will unfold (not to forget the plot twists that DPC likes to throw).
If this is not good writing then I don't know what it is.

I'm not saying that DPC is perfect because he's not, but saying that he isn't a good writer... man, that's pure heresy.

PS Felice, PinkCake è uno dei migliori a mani basse, su...

 

[Warped77]

After spending a bit more time than I should have in the cesspool... um... I mean 'forum'...of another game where things went REALLY wrong this weekend, holy shit, I'm just gonna say it (no matter how weird it looks): I love you all, DIK brothers. You're all awesome.

Note: Self-edited to not spark off another off-topic firestorm

 

[Cabin Fever]

Its good money to bet on DPC at the current momment being the best writter, or whoever writes for him, if he has a team.
I think its reasonable to say the characteristics you'd look for to judge a writting skill would be things like: story immersion, how very distinct each character is and how memorable they are, and at last, but just as important how dialogs are written, metrics (how much meaningful content per frame/paragraph), whether its necessary or not.

I think if you keep in mind these aspects you'll have a good feeling i suppose. But to put it simply, in pratical terms, how many times did you prefer the sex scene over the dialogs and you will know.

2 things.

1) DPC is a 1-man team. No separate writer. If I recall correctly, the only thing he doesn't do himself is create the music. He licenses those.

2) In my opinion, DPC is well above average but is not the best writer, even by those judging criteria mentioned by you. Just off the top of my head, I'd consider Philly & Tlareo well above DPC in terms of writing, with Drifty & Hopes on par with DPC as well. And it wouldn't surprise me if I'm not the only one willing to take that bet of yours.

 

[der123fer]

Affinity system sucks, plot holes here, plot holes there, and now DPC is a bad writer too. I wonder why do you guys even bother playing this game, then. It's so bad!

You're criticising a dev who, with his writing, managed to gain 8k (!) patrons and created a job out of porn.

Everyone is here because they're invested in the story, they want to know what's behind Bella's door, what's the deal with Chad, all the remaining questions, and how the story will unfold (not to forget the plot twists that DPC likes to throw).
If this is not good writing then I don't know what it is.

I'm not saying that DPC is perfect because he's not, but saying that he isn't a good writer... man, that's pure heresy.

PS Felice, PinkCake è uno dei migliori a mani basse, su...

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[nuthingz]

Hi just started , BTW Thanks

 

[ExDeath730]

2 things.

1) DPC is a 1-man team. No separate writer. If I recall correctly, the only thing he doesn't do himself is create the music. He licenses those.

2) In my opinion, DPC is well above average but is not the best writer, even by those judging criteria mentioned by you. Just off the top of my head, I'd consider Philly & Tlareo well above DPC in terms of writing, with Drifty & Hopes on par with DPC as well. And it wouldn't surprise me if I'm not the only one willing to take that bet of yours.

That's a reasonable post, i agree with you on Philly being above, but i think Drifty is a little bit better, from what i'm seeing in LoF.

DPC, at least for me is doing a lot better in this than he was on AL, so he improved a lot. You can even imagine people saying the dialogue in this game, it isn't like Mr.Dots that is long-winded as fuck, and the dialogue is just atrocious most of the time.

But i think that the test of how good of a writer DPC is, will be when the answers start pouring into the game. There's a reason people started to dislike JJ Abrams nowadays. Because he is really good at setting up stories and creating an air of mystery, but he sucks at delivering the conclusion.

So, i'm curious if DPC will stick the landing in BaDIK.

 

[phill_leotardo]

But i think that the test of how good of a writer DPC is, will be when the answers start pouring into the game. There's a reason people started to dislike JJ Abrams nowadays. Because he is really good at setting up stories and creating an air of mystery, but he sucks at delivering the conclusion.

I think this is a good thought.

 

[lemonfreak]

That's a reasonable post, i agree with you on Philly being above, but i think Drifty is a little bit better, from what i'm seeing in LoF.

DPC, at least for me is doing a lot better in this than he was on AL, so he improved a lot. You can even imagine people saying the dialogue in this game, it isn't like Mr.Dots that is long-winded as fuck, and the dialogue is just atrocious most of the time.

But i think that the test of how good of a writer DPC is, will be when the answers start pouring into the game. There's a reason people started to dislike JJ Abrams nowadays. Because he is really good at setting up stories and creating an air of mystery, but he sucks at delivering the conclusion.

So, i'm curious if DPC will stick the landing in BaDIK.

I've said this a number of times but I believe the story of the game will likely take place over no more than 3 months, based on the amount of time which has passed within the first 5 chapters.

For that reason I don't believe the conclusion to the story will be the MC finding his soul mate, I think it'll be something much smaller like him introducing his girlfried to his dad, something he probably didn't do with Zoey, demonstrating that he's beginning to mature into an adult but is far from the finished article.

 

[xsssssssss]

I've said this a number of times but I believe the story of the game will likely take place over no more than 3 months, based on the amount of time which has passed within the first 5 chapters.

For that reason I don't believe the conclusion to the story will be the MC finding his soul mate, I think it'll be something much smaller like him introducing his girlfried to his dad, something he probably didn't do with Zoey, demonstrating that he's beginning to mature into an adult but is far from the finished article.

Is it just me chuckling at the image of the dad's jaw dropping as MC comes in seriously telling him how he's matured and is in a serious relationship and then goes on to present both Josy and Maya

 

[AchedCroissant]

I've said this a number of times but I believe the story of the game will likely take place over no more than 3 months, based on the amount of time which has passed within the first 5 chapters.

For that reason I don't believe the conclusion to the story will be the MC finding his soul mate, I think it'll be something much smaller like him introducing his girlfried to his dad, something he probably didn't do with Zoey, demonstrating that he's beginning to mature into an adult but is far from the finished article.

For a man to grow up he needs the right woman and I think Jill is the right one even though I love Maya

But in my case I want a Maya since I think that with someone like that my life would be better

 

[lemonfreak]

Is it just me chucking at the image of the dad's jaw dropping as MC comes in seriously telling him how he's matured and is in a serious relationship and then goes on to present both Josy and Maya

I think Neil would take that in his stride, it'd be Bella that would be a what the fuck moment, imo.

 

[AchedCroissant]

Found Maya irl.

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[felicemastronzo]

I've said this a number of times but I believe the story of the game will likely take place over no more than 3 months, based on the amount of time which has passed within the first 5 chapters.

For that reason I don't believe the conclusion to the story will be the MC finding his soul mate, I think it'll be something much smaller like him introducing his girlfried to his dad, something he probably didn't do with Zoey, demonstrating that he's beginning to mature into an adult but is far from the finished article.

it doesn't change much whether the game spans a year of college or three months.

and finally MC will find himself with his soulmate at that moment, not forever. it will always be a new couple, not consolidated (with many LI I think it will be a victory on the last lap or almost)

even if it is unlikely the ending will not give us some glimpses of their future (and in case of the other characters)

personally I would prefer it cover the whole year, but only because narratively it would seem a more complete arc
but, again, it's not that important

 

[SPACE_BOOOOOST]

Is it just me chuckling at the image of the dad's jaw dropping as MC comes in seriously telling him how he's matured and is in a serious relationship and then goes on to present both Josy and Maya

As someone who has been disowned by his father on multiple occasions, I can say with absolute certainty that this exact scenario would've been the only thing capable of fixing our relationship.

If going home with two hotties like Josy and Maya doesn't make Neil proud I don't know what will.

 

[lemonfreak]

it doesn't change much whether the game spans a year of college or three months.

and finally MC will find himself with his soulmate at that moment, not forever. it will always be a new couple, not consolidated (with many LI I think it will be a victory on the last lap or almost)

even if it is unlikely the ending will not give us some glimpses of their future (and in case of the other characters)

personally I would prefer it cover the whole year, but only because narratively it would seem a more complete arc
but, again, it's not that important

????????????????

Are you actually arguing that a soulmate might only be a temporary thing, thereby completely changing the meaning of the word?