The Interlude
Loved to see where Tremolo was coming from and to see Zoey follow her dreams. So many people never do and end up bitter at what could have been. She learned and grew from it. She made sense and her behavior can be easily modified to be something Tremolo is chasing, or run from or hell even model himself upon. As a reader you can make it plausible either way based on how you are steering Tremolos affinity. Pretty good design in my opinion.
Theres only one problem and its a big one in the interlude, in my opinion that is, and it was what got me here to read and look for others impression of it. Namely the lack of a second relationship for Zoey. I was sure Zoey were at the very least date someone and hook up to some degree but it didn't happen and that felt weird to me that she didn't experiment, at all. Sure she saw Emma and Brent but that wasn't personal and it was from the outside and shit like that doesnt really stick unless its personal from what I've seen in people and myself. Its basically doesn't happen.
That was one of the reasons why i started reading shit here. Its what bent my suspension of disbelief too far too ignore, so it broke. I had to read what others though. Couldn't in my wildest dreams anticipate the hate of Zoey and the Interlude here. Shes literally what you want her to be to make your version of Tremolo to make sense.
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So, I started to read this forum, and really read it.
Page after page, gone through the last 120+ pages at least over the past week or two. Its been a real revelation. It never occurred to me that people self-inserted in the story and cared about cheating and infidelity and that was the reason its pretty a non-existent part in the story, except for the Fuckface himself (god i love this moniker, thank you!).
My suspension of disbelief have been broken by the revelation that DPCs patreon community abhors anything that even hints at the girls in the story having relations outside the Fuckface making such content taboo. Unless they are already unavailable by being in a couple like John Boy&Elena, or the community slut Arieth, god that character knows how to love and live her life. Kudos! Her behavior have sort of coloured the impression of the Hots as well as the restaurant girls and I just assumed they all fucked on the regular, we just didn't see it. Now... it feels like they don't and can't due to a patreon community. It have really tarnished the story for me.
To me this game is a book, we just happen to shape the story a bit to nudge what the characters we find more interesting/sexy does, but ultimately have no real control so no real emotional stake in the final outcome. Sure there is emotion in enjoying of the story and the sex scenes but its not... capital E emotional, like something personal, that you yourself have experienced. Its not like you go "we beat Thanos woo" when you saw the movie right? Right?!
So why would you self insert with Fuckface and care about cheating especially not until they only just now decided to become a couples in the story? It just doesn't make sense to me. I mean, we see the Fuckface's face, read his (not your own) internal monologue and get to see his family etc etc. To me this severs me from his feelings kinda, I can empathize sure but not self insert, how can you have an emotional "this is me" connection and by extension a territorial emotion over the girl(s)? Let alone all times we spy and get the disembodied view of other characters talking. Those that Fuckface have no idea about! Self insert how?! I really dont get it. Wish I did... or maybe not. For a moment perhaps.
tl;dr A real revelation and broken suspension of disbelief. At least its not shattered yet.
Bella, Maya for LIs. Quinn for being the most fucking interesting character in the game. Villains have to be after all to make a story engaging- pimping and drug peddling for sure and possibly embezzling, and maybe more.
