OFT
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I'd say the 'slurp slurp, lick lick' he puts as alternative dialogue for BJ are even worse. I mean, I don't need to read words to imagine the sounds, but since there are words there, I can only hear those instead of actual sounds. Kills any... 'momentum', for me.
Be happy he didn’t use sound effects. Imagine watching a lewd scene and wondering if the noises were recorded personally.
This is quite a standard phrase of praise for a girl who gives you a blowjob. They love to be praised and encouraged in the process.
That may be the case, but that’s nine times he used that shtick.
He’s halfway through the story. I thought his overuse of “intense” was getting bad. If he keeps walking the “Good Job!” road, it’s going to be a boner killer.