VN Ren'Py Abandoned Between Floors [v0.0.2a] [Double Edge]

[arkhemis]

I'm not into femdom, I just hope that femdom not monopolize most scenes, because I see that the waifus is so great. So they must or need a unique variations of approaching and behavior.
Anyway that was just my thought tho, so I just can say good luck with the project
Just some suggestion, do not too formal with the dialogue except if there is a scene that need it...

 

[Sandstorm 99]

The game looks promising and the art looks great
(I really hope there won't be any sharing/ntr or "open relations" in the future)
Good luck

 

[Double Edge]

The English is spellchecked and technically correct but the dialogue feels very wooden and unnatural. It doesn't flow and makes it a chore to read. I'm guessing the sentence structure of the original language is used and the English was translated word for word. It's not the worst I've seen and still see that care was taken (as the spelling at least is correct).
Art style is good as is the customized UX (though I do speed up the text speed but that is personal preference)
Hope the dialogue improves because I do want to see more of this game.

Thanks for the comment!

Honestly, this is partly true. A considerable number of lines have retained original logic of sentence structure, but our translator genuinely tried to avoid any inconsistencies. In the future, we'll try to "revive" the text to make the story feel better, not only in mother tongue.

 

[HansDampf788]

Unfortunately, we can't say exactly at the moment, but not all sex scenes will be shown from the point of Alon's (main character) view. As an example, now there's a sex scene where he doesn't participate.

And with that, I'm out.

 

[Parrbapp]

This is short but quite nice. I like Jennifer already
Some spelling errors though. For example, right at the beginning, it should say "breathe" not "breath"

 

[Byczer]

Needs 32 bit bro and warning when this update ends

 

[Wildbill5150]

Thanks for the advice and wishes!

Unfortunately, we can't say exactly at the moment, but not all sex scenes will be shown from the point of Alon's (main character) view. As an example, now there's a sex scene where he doesn't participate.

I read the planned tags but this statement is worrying I don't want to spend my actual time playing the game trying to make all the right choices just to watch someone else have sex with my love interests sorry but not a fun way for me to play a game I like to be rewarded for the time I spend playing a game by not having other people having sex with my love interests so I would like some clarification please?

Will the mc be the only one having sex with his love interests? If not please tag the game properly so that people that don't like ntr content can avoid this game

Thank you for your time

 

[Double Edge]

I read the planned tags but this statement is worrying I don't want to spend my actual time playing the game trying to make all the right choices just to watch someone else have sex with my love interests sorry but not a fun way for me to play a game I like to be rewarded for the time I spend playing a game by not having other people having sex with my love interests so I would like some clarification please?

Will the mc be the only one having sex with his love interests? If not please tag the game properly so that people that don't like ntr content can avoid this game

Thank you for your time

Hello! Thank you for the comment.

I think some people have misunderstood my answer. What I meant is that all sex scenes (not on behalf of the main character) will not be associated with his girlfriends and cheating/kidnapping as a whole. Such scenes are needed only to complement the arc of some characters who Alon/MC don't care about. That's why the NTR tag is inappropriate here

 

[bulifun]

Double Edge Congratulation on your game. Art looks good.
I see the female domination tag and I like it. Any femdom scenes currently in the game or it's a future tag?

future tag

 

[Gamesstar]

future tag

Thanks

 

[EnZetsu]

Nice

 

[vlados24ru]

Guys, why isn't anyone saying about soundtrack?? I guess it's one of the strengths of this game (along with arts and ui). The unique soundtracks for each scenes are expensive (in my opinion of course ahah)

 

[Deleted member 3208170]

Oh, Boy! 0 Patrons. That's a shame, you deserved more. For the Art style alone.

 

[Deleted member 3208170]

Guys, why isn't anyone saying about soundtrack?? I guess it's one of the strengths of this game (along with arts and ui). The unique soundtracks for each scenes are expensive (in my opinion of course ahah)

It looks like they released a track on Patreon yesterday.

 

[Double Edge]

Guys, why isn't anyone saying about soundtrack?? I guess it's one of the strengths of this game (along with arts and ui). The unique soundtracks for each scenes are expensive (in my opinion of course ahah)

Hello. Our composer expresses gratitude to you! In the future, there'll be more unique soundtracks! Moreover, the composer is ready to share extended versions and MIDI files (for learning piano) of musical works on our Patreon.

 

[jdw6]

For me, it looks like an English Russian school or a Russian English school.

I was wondering if this is yet another Russian dev who has never set foot in the USA but thinks they can pull off a game that is supposed to be set here. I've at least been to Russia, but there's no way in hell I'd even try to write a story based there. Really wish these "devs" would do the same.

 

[astranabeat]

The game look good but it's super shot for first release. The first sex scene also with npc x npc. Hope so because if she was 1 of the heroine I'd delete the game.

The first release should have 3x or 5x amount of content and end with sex scene of mc with a girl. Maybe not sex yet but with at lease BJ or something. The art look decent. Need to see more of the game. Too little content to judge anything.

 

[Deleted member 3208170]

I was wondering if this is yet another Russian dev who has never set foot in the USA but thinks they can pull off a game that is supposed to be set here. I've at least been to Russia, but there's no way in hell I'd even try to write a story based there. Really wish these "devs" would do the same.

Hmm, I don't mind that. Especially in Fantasy.
I mean, I could write a Story about German Gymnasium, and the bitter truth is. That especially US Audiences don't like foreign media.
You see that at the Oscars, for example. There are Exceptions, but general. Something is not produced in English or play somewhere else in the world.
I think 90% of all people don't care in an Erotic game like this if this game look like a US collage.
In this, Game, it is an elite Collage. Which is not so different from Elite Collages in Germany or Britain or France, and I think US is the same.
I know I like 2D and Women in school uniforms. This is good.
What I don't like is Femdom and that's something I will see how this will unfold.
It is short, that's a problem too.

 

[Double Edge]

I was wondering if this is yet another Russian dev who has never set foot in the USA but thinks they can pull off a game that is supposed to be set here. I've at least been to Russia, but there's no way in hell I'd even try to write a story based there. Really wish these "devs" would do the same.

To some degree, I agree with this statement. Nevertheless, no one forbids to familiarize yourself with the United States, particularly the educational environment on the internet. In my opinion, you don't have to travel to another country to get the "right" to write a story. Furthermore, in our case, we're not going to use school location as the basis of the plot. This moment is only needed to answer the question "Where is the school?".

 

[Deleted member 1571565]

I'm not into maledom, I just hope that maledom not monopolize most scenes, because I see that the waifus is so great. So they must or need a unique variations of approaching and behavior.
Anyway that was just my thought tho, so I just can say good luck with the project