VN Ren'Py Between Two Fates [Prologue] [Twin_moons]

[Silentdeath8]

Honestly I believe you should ditch the entire beginning that starts in modern times and just make it a game set in a fantasy world. Maybe with your average isekai theme. People will not care about all of these characters you introduced in the modern timeline. They will skip everything until they reach that medieval part that actually will have gameplay.
At least in my opinion. Otherwise good use of AI I'd say.

If those said characters never show up again i have to agee.

Edit: the setting/preferences is missing at the start of your game Dev, forcing the player to start a playthrough with the risk of having unwanted sound or too loud sound in the ears, then to right clic to open the menu windows, also disalow to choose windows or fullscreen before to start a play.

 

[Twin_moons]

Honestly I believe you should ditch the entire beginning that starts in modern times and just make it a game set in a fantasy world. Maybe with your average isekai theme. People will not care about all of these characters you introduced in the modern timeline. They will skip everything until they reach that medieval part that actually will have gameplay.
At least in my opinion. Otherwise good use of AI I'd say.

I used the prologue to make the player feel like they really “lost” something. Because if I send them to the other world from the very first minute, the player hasn't really lost anything.

And yes, the game will mainly take place in the fantasy world, but there will come a time when you will return to the modern world. But of course, that will be after several updates. That's why this “modern world” is a prologue.

Thanks for your question!

 

[Twin_moons]

If those said characters never show up again i have to agee.

Edit: the setting/preferences is missing at the start of your game Dev, forcing the player to start a playthrough with the risk of having unwanted sound or too loud sound in the ears, then to right clic to open the menu windows, also disalow to choose windows or fullscreen before to start a play.

The menu is operated with the mouse wheel. If you scroll your wheel, the options move.

I added some arrows to indicate this, but if I see that many people don't notice them, in the next version I will look for a way to highlight them better.

Thank you for your question.

 

[Wilczurko]

I don't have an honest answer for this.

For example, the prologue was made two weeks ago, but I didn't publish it because I wanted to move forward with the development of v1.0.
When I finish v1.0 and have the basis of the game, I'll decide how often and how much content each update will bring.
Thanks for your curious question

Sure thing, take your time, keep the good work! Hope for great story in upcoming updates

 

[chiefkilic]

Am I really the only one who's noticed that the dev uses "he" and "she" incorrectly in the game? The male protagonist is often addressed as female, and the female characters are often addressed as male. So far, I like the story; the only criticism is above (translated with Google).

 

[Twin_moons]

Am I really the only one who's noticed that the dev uses "he" and "she" incorrectly in the game? The male protagonist is often addressed as female, and the female characters are often addressed as male. So far, I like the story; the only criticism is above (translated with Google).

The game is translated with Zenpy (the free plan). With the next update, I will have Zenpy Premium, which, according to many Spaniards and English speakers, provides the best automatic translations.

In fact, as a (Spanish) player, I translate games from English to Spanish with Zenpy, and the translations are almost perfect, with just a few minor details.

But if that was your only issue with the translation, I'm glad there are so few.

I'll try to make sure that doesn't happen next time.

Thank you very much for your opinion on the translation, it's really necessary!

 

[Bowlcutcultmember]

You seem aware of the Translation issues so I won't point them out like I have with other games but this is more a perspective issue and your translation software might miss these. I assume it's supposed to be "I" in this situation because it's not a omnipotent narrator but the recollection of the MC.

 

[Silentdeath8]

So, very long prologue, long enough to earn the KN tag imo, so have to ask Twin_moons will the next part of your game get choices ? if not better add the tag now.

 

[Bowlcutcultmember]

Just FYI if you hit enter, instead of it giving the MC a default name it just names him " " which makes it very awkward to read the dialogue. Not sure if that's a bug or intentional but it should either default to a name or not allow you to proceed without entering a name. I assume this applies to the name-able character later on too.

The UI is surprisingly popping for a VN like this. I like it.

Honestly you should strongly consider trimming down parts of the story if this is any indicator of what future updates will be like. The childhood section has no reason to be as long as it is. The academy should be the bulk majority of the content in the prologue, though it's probably worth a look through to see if there's anything else that can be trimmed.

 

[FatYoda]

I wish you could dislike reviews. I haven't even played yet and know that reviewer is a moron. It's a fuckin prologue dipshit. The fact that it even has any sexual acts of any kind is surprising. Get a grip.

 

[Twin_moons]

Just FYI if you hit enter, instead of it giving the MC a default name it just names him " " which makes it very awkward to read the dialogue. Not sure if that's a bug or intentional but it should either default to a name or not allow you to proceed without entering a name. I assume this applies to the name-able character later on too.

The UI is surprisingly popping for a VN like this. I like it.

Honestly you should strongly consider trimming down parts of the story if this is any indicator of what future updates will be like. The childhood section has no reason to be as long as it is. The academy should be the bulk majority of the content in the prologue, though it's probably worth a look through to see if there's anything else that can be trimmed.

What you say is true, but at least from my perspective, it was so that the MC would have more impact when he had to abandon his whole life for a new one.

Besides, after the academy there are six erotic animations in a very short time. Doing it before the academy could cause some problems.

But as a player, I love the story, but I also love the importance of erotic scenes and animations.

So v1.0 has less “filler” in the story, and will feature more than 10 animations, as there are extra characters for the player to enjoy the story, but at the same time, the game remains a porn game.

 

[Twin_moons]

I wish you could dislike reviews. I haven't even played yet and know that reviewer is a moron. It's a fuckin prologue dipshit. The fact that it even has any sexual acts of any kind is surprising. Get a grip.

I was very saddened by that review, but he's also right.
The problem is that I can't do erotic scenes before college for certain obvious reasons.
I mean, look at Alise at the beginning of the game...
That's why, once the MC finishes college, I quickly put in six animations, so that the player remembers that they're playing a porn game.

 

[Ali ibn Hassan]

" With no other choice, you accept her offer...
and step into your new fate. "

Thnks fr shrng

 

[Bowlcutcultmember]

I was very saddened by that review, but he's also right.
The problem is that I can't do erotic scenes before college for certain obvious reasons.
I mean, look at Alise at the beginning of the game...
That's why, once the MC finishes college, I quickly put in six animations, so that the player remembers that they're playing a porn game.

Yeah IMO while it is kinda cheesy to just go "here's all the scene now" sex and college makes sense and there's really not another way to do it. I actually do like when games follow the entire life of the MC but obviously it leads to some pacing/length issues at a certain point. The only real thing that maybe would make sense is if the sex scenes were optional and had choices that lead to them, but that would be a lot of work since the prologue seems set in stone.
I wouldn't worry too much about it and just focus on making content in the next addition more evenly spread out/choice-driven.

 

[FatYoda]

I was very saddened by that review, but he's also right.
The problem is that I can't do erotic scenes before college for certain obvious reasons.
I mean, look at Alise at the beginning of the game...
That's why, once the MC finishes college, I quickly put in six animations, so that the player remembers that they're playing a porn game.

if they're seniors in high school you can. 18 is all it takes. my cousin was 18 his junior year cause of some weird transfer problems he had in 3rd grade that forced him to repeat.

Edit: i say this having not played yet and no idea what grade they were in at the beginning.

Edit2: Just graduated academy and you COULD have started some scenes sooner. You showed Alise in the tub nude freshman year which means they were legal. It is actually pretty weird that they both made it through college without sex. Like REALLY weird. Yume is super shy that one makes sense, Alise is obviously in love so she's not fooling around, but MC and Zafira would have been fucking on the DL at the very least and Sabrina waiting years is weird as well. I still don't have a problem with the pacing though. I'm only like an hour in...and the story is sweet.

 

[Azsouth]

hope most of the women from the previous world are allowed into the new one, otherwise it seems the prologue was a waste of time.

 

[ecroose]

monster girls are not furry, fix the tags. i dont care how cute your dog girl is if no muzzle its a monster girl not a furry

 

[FatYoda]

I see a future twins tag...twins tags make me sad in games where i can't see incest

 

[Twin_moons]

hope most of the women from the previous world are allowed into the new one, otherwise it seems the prologue was a waste of time.

Of course

 

[FatYoda]

I like it. Quite a bit honestly. You need to get your pronouns sorted out though...and that better NOT be the last time he sees his friends. I have unfinished business with many of them....and i hope it doesn't take long to bring them back cause we've been teased by Alise, Yume, and Helena's hotness for long enough. I expect Yume will have something to do with figuring out where he is.