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The MC’s wife, after only five minutes of interacting with a man she’s speaking to for the first time:
This waifu belongs on the streets; she’s a five-dollar whore, not fit for sharing
OGloc_420
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That dialogue is absolutely dogshit.
This is what I was referring to, the logic, I could even put a screenshot where to choose the lingerie, she takes advice from her friend, to dress like a slut, but no, it's just a photo shoot, second date lingerie, third date sex, but as FMC said, the photographer reminds him of MC, for the better, so the photographer is the best and kindest copy of MC, if this one isn't a traitor, in both paths, you tell me.
Keep reading to see just how dogshit it is:
The MC is the type who ends up apologizing no matter what his wife pulls.
The life story of a five-dollar whore and her brain-dead husband
dexterousgecko
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So she's an idiot AND nasty, okay. Great combo. Wow. This writing is insulting for everyone involved LOLKeep reading to see just how dogshit it is:
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The MC is the type who ends up apologizing no matter what his wife pulls.
The life story of a five-dollar whore and her brain-dead husband
Serpenthy
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Guys, when you watch a TV show - for example Game of Thrones - you can admire characters like Cersei or Joffrey, empathize with them, or hate them with all your heart. The fact that you feel strong emotions toward a character doesn’t mean the show is bad, right?
I’m not putting this story on the same level as George Martin’s work - it’s just an example.
I see your criticism and I take it into account, because this is my first project and I’m still a beginner. In the controversial dialogue, I simply felt it was appropriate to add a negative reaction from the heroine to the main character’s attempt at control. Conflicts can arise in any relationship for many different reasons.
And if you can’t understand why, for various reasons, the heroine agrees to the photoshoot - in the end, please reread the game’s tags. Thank you
I’m not putting this story on the same level as George Martin’s work - it’s just an example.
I see your criticism and I take it into account, because this is my first project and I’m still a beginner. In the controversial dialogue, I simply felt it was appropriate to add a negative reaction from the heroine to the main character’s attempt at control. Conflicts can arise in any relationship for many different reasons.
And if you can’t understand why, for various reasons, the heroine agrees to the photoshoot - in the end, please reread the game’s tags. Thank you
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EnTeeArrr
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So is it that you have trouble reading and understanding? Or are just lying to sow misinformation as a NTR hater? Because none of that happened.
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It's alright. Dev isn't trying to break any new ground so who gives a shit. Good set up for some decent NTR down the road. Just hope the NTR/NTS don't end up being the same shit with slightly different dialogue and then bleed into each other. Nothing worse than fappin' my lil fapbert to some good cheating whore shit and then the MC finds out and is cool with it, demolishing all angst and anxiety I got built up in my lil balls. Devs need to stop doing that shit.
Anyway, a couple points. When the FMC is talking to her bestie and talks about boundaries and not betraying MC, she's already lied to him about the photoshoot so a lil betrayal is ok I guess? And the lighting in the photoshoot pics is ass. This actually works if dude isn't a real photographer and just trying to get some lonely military wifey poontang.
Anyway, a couple points. When the FMC is talking to her bestie and talks about boundaries and not betraying MC, she's already lied to him about the photoshoot so a lil betrayal is ok I guess? And the lighting in the photoshoot pics is ass. This actually works if dude isn't a real photographer and just trying to get some lonely military wifey poontang.
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hmm! another game where the MC is a helpless loser. I wouldn't have a problem with that, except that a MC who is a soldier and is on a mission abroad. (Iraq, Afghanistan or Kosovo or anywhere in the world) MC kills people protecting his loved ones and then a little dick photographer comes along who wants to fuck the MC's wife. you know, I'm a soldier to this day. and I've been to all three countries. there was one among my fellow soldiers who was cheated on and abandoned, but it's safe to say that neither the wife nor the guy who surrounded him escaped. The MC needs a little backbone and dominance so that neither the wife nor the loser photographer sees the MC as a loser. I know that six months or even a year on a mission is a lot, especially since he puts his life at risk. The photographer should be a little wary of the MC.
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The dialogue is not fine. It is either AI generated - or the dev is ESL and using a bad translator without understanding how sentences and grammar work at a basic level.
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Guys, let me clarify something to help you better understand the "lore" of this story, if I can put it that way.
The main character is in the military, that's true, but I never specified anywhere that he's on a life-threatening mission or deployed overseas. I didn't even mention the country where this is taking place, okay? From the dialogues, you should have noticed that he's not carrying out extremely difficult or dangerous operations - instead, he's mostly confused about why they even sent him on this assignment in the first place. Most of his time is spent on physical training, not in mortal danger.
In this story, the army is presented primarily as a source of distance—an obstacle that keeps the couple apart—rather than a real threat that something bad might happen to the protagonist. You could argue that this makes him a "bad" soldier who's basically getting paid for nothing - fair enough. But I wouldn't want that to be the main thing you focus on.
Why do I see it this way? Guys, we're all from different corners of the world, with different life circumstances, and real life is often complicated enough on its own. We already have plenty of challenges in reality, and I don't want to touch a raw nerve or upset any particular group of people. Whether that's good or bad is up to you to decide, but if the hero were truly in extreme danger, having the NTR tag from the start would feel like a terrible choice right off the bat.
Just keep in mind that this particular guy isn't out there completing the toughest missions around the globe - he simply wants to get back to his beloved wife as soon as possible, while she's waiting and hoping he'll change his line of work so he can stay by her side.
Now, about the language: English isn't my native language, so some of my phrasing might seem awkward, silly, or funny to you. You can cut me some slack for that, or consider it a serious flaw that's not worth your time - it's entirely up to you. However, I think it's important to remember that I'm the one using a translator to get my thoughts across to you, not the other way around, so maybe it's not as bad as it could be.
The main character is in the military, that's true, but I never specified anywhere that he's on a life-threatening mission or deployed overseas. I didn't even mention the country where this is taking place, okay? From the dialogues, you should have noticed that he's not carrying out extremely difficult or dangerous operations - instead, he's mostly confused about why they even sent him on this assignment in the first place. Most of his time is spent on physical training, not in mortal danger.
In this story, the army is presented primarily as a source of distance—an obstacle that keeps the couple apart—rather than a real threat that something bad might happen to the protagonist. You could argue that this makes him a "bad" soldier who's basically getting paid for nothing - fair enough. But I wouldn't want that to be the main thing you focus on.
Why do I see it this way? Guys, we're all from different corners of the world, with different life circumstances, and real life is often complicated enough on its own. We already have plenty of challenges in reality, and I don't want to touch a raw nerve or upset any particular group of people. Whether that's good or bad is up to you to decide, but if the hero were truly in extreme danger, having the NTR tag from the start would feel like a terrible choice right off the bat.
Just keep in mind that this particular guy isn't out there completing the toughest missions around the globe - he simply wants to get back to his beloved wife as soon as possible, while she's waiting and hoping he'll change his line of work so he can stay by her side.
Now, about the language: English isn't my native language, so some of my phrasing might seem awkward, silly, or funny to you. You can cut me some slack for that, or consider it a serious flaw that's not worth your time - it's entirely up to you. However, I think it's important to remember that I'm the one using a translator to get my thoughts across to you, not the other way around, so maybe it's not as bad as it could be.
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mans dieing of cancer, wife cheats with a rando photographer ( example of a bad start )
let me guess, "He's never around, I'm so lonely, its your fault for not being there"
the usual Cheater complaints instead of what i assume really happened
he is serving his country (regardless as to how you thought you was portraying the soldier,) he's still a soldier and i don't know about most of the other country's but in USA, i assume this is an American tale, you can't just be a soldier you train hard for it so he's not just a lazy slouch who sits around even if that's his assignment. as for him not being around enough, i would assume he's doing this for them to have a future, it just tastes bad.. and i haven't even played it yet just reading the synopsis and comments here.
let me guess, "He's never around, I'm so lonely, its your fault for not being there"
the usual Cheater complaints instead of what i assume really happened
he is serving his country (regardless as to how you thought you was portraying the soldier,) he's still a soldier and i don't know about most of the other country's but in USA, i assume this is an American tale, you can't just be a soldier you train hard for it so he's not just a lazy slouch who sits around even if that's his assignment. as for him not being around enough, i would assume he's doing this for them to have a future, it just tastes bad.. and i haven't even played it yet just reading the synopsis and comments here.
Serpenthy I would fix this bug asap - for some reason when interacting with saves (came up after a quickload), the second speaker isn't showing as message sender, it's as if one of the sayers has their id stripped:
Furthermore, this persists across game restarts (so must be something in the persistent save data)
Save and persistent data is attached.
Furthermore, this persists across game restarts (so must be something in the persistent save data)
Save and persistent data is attached.
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getting flowers from a stanger is a weird way to start an ntr route. feeling weird about it would be normal. thankfully im not into ntr and only here for the nts so its gravy. its a bit flimsy but ill allow it. i kinda hope her hoe girlfriend starts sending MC sexy pics. usually makes for a good time. decent enough start though.
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