VN Ren'Py Between Us [v0.1] [Serpenthy]

[TonyMurray]

Oh look... another NTR kinetic novel without choices.

Yes, but this one aint AI generated, at least.

Nor is it a kinetic novel without choices...

 

[Assman_6969]

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Husband returns from a 2 year mission abroad, and finally meets his 2 months old baby. lol

THX for sharing...

And then you wonder why those coming back home can easily fly off the hinges and fuck around and catch a murder case or a couple in this example! The bitches that really do this cheating deserve some of the worse karma someone can end up getting and I hope it is even more worse than it originally sounds stupid trash whores that cannot stay loyal deserve 2 in chest one in head if they go this far to sneak behind someone's back just for a fuck! Fuck you cunt you get what coming haha

 

[EnTeeArrr]

The dialogue is not fine. It is either AI generated - or the dev is ESL and using a bad translator without understanding how sentences and grammar work at a basic level.

No it's fine, get over yourself.

 

[TonyMurray]

The dialogue isn't perfect, but you also have to factor in that it is presented to us via text messages, and those are often full of shortcuts (textspeak) and typos. There are a few occasions here where there's a typo and it's corrected on the next line, which is realistic. I've always thought that this type of game presents a choice for the dev - do you try for perfect dialogue, which will probably not look realistic for quick phone messages, or do you make it more realistic by including little mistakes here and there and have people wonder whether it's intentional or whether you just have poor English...

Here, I do agree that it goes beyond the "realistic text messaging by a native English speaker", but the dev is not a native English speaker, so that's understandable. What else is understandable though, is the dialogue - those issues aren't bad enough to not understand what's being said. If it wasn't a phone-based game, and the actual spoken dialogue was like this, I wouldn't be happy with it, but because it is a phone-based game, my tolerance is a bit higher, so it gets a pass at the moment.

 

[Ᏸ ᏞᎯ ᏨᏦ_ᎻᏫᏞᎬ]

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Overview:
You are a soldier currently deployed. Months of service are behind you, but the separation is far from over. Back home, your wife Grace spends her days working as a barista, living for your next phone call.
The rhythm of her quiet life is shattered when a charismatic photographer enters the cafe. Seeing her as his new muse, he invites her to a photo shoot.
Will you trust in your love and grant her freedom, or will jealousy take over as you try to shield her from other men while being thousands of miles away?​

Thread Updated: 2025-12-25
Release Date: 2025-12-25
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Language: English
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[Ronny8888]

Guys, let me clarify something to help you better understand the "lore" of this story, if I can put it that way.
The main character is in the military, that's true, but I never specified anywhere that he's on a life-threatening mission or deployed overseas. I didn't even mention the country where this is taking place, okay? From the dialogues, you should have noticed that he's not carrying out extremely difficult or dangerous operations - instead, he's mostly confused about why they even sent him on this assignment in the first place. Most of his time is spent on physical training, not in mortal danger.
In this story, the army is presented primarily as a source of distance—an obstacle that keeps the couple apart—rather than a real threat that something bad might happen to the protagonist. You could argue that this makes him a "bad" soldier who's basically getting paid for nothing - fair enough. But I wouldn't want that to be the main thing you focus on.
Why do I see it this way? Guys, we're all from different corners of the world, with different life circumstances, and real life is often complicated enough on its own. We already have plenty of challenges in reality, and I don't want to touch a raw nerve or upset any particular group of people. Whether that's good or bad is up to you to decide, but if the hero were truly in extreme danger, having the NTR tag from the start would feel like a terrible choice right off the bat.
Just keep in mind that this particular guy isn't out there completing the toughest missions around the globe - he simply wants to get back to his beloved wife as soon as possible, while she's waiting and hoping he'll change his line of work so he can stay by her side.
Now, about the language: English isn't my native language, so some of my phrasing might seem awkward, silly, or funny to you. You can cut me some slack for that, or consider it a serious flaw that's not worth your time - it's entirely up to you. However, I think it's important to remember that I'm the one using a translator to get my thoughts across to you, not the other way around, so maybe it's not as bad as it could be.

First of all, a soldier in the American armed forces, whether in training or just in camp, is always on constant alert, considering everything they do in the world, and here you are already wrong, then you made FMC write that the photographer reminds him of Mc but nicer, oh dear, this is more serious than everything FMC materially does, the lies and the sex compared to that sentence, it is harmful, a bunch of flowers and two compliments are enough, and you go to a fashion show in lingerie, I repeat, it is porn, but don't try to make a logical argument, write your game, but don't come and tell us that this girl is not a serial cheater, I repeat, porn and cheating are fine with us, but with logic, here you skipped 10 sections in two days, if you then make Mc write pissed off, you can't make him apologize afterwards like any idiot, this means you don't know the military, maybe you should coordinate the routes first, then determine them, but not you can make it so that there are only a few dialogue differences between the two paths, because these games are all about dialogue, which is the main substance

 

[Serpenthy]

First of all, a soldier in the American armed forces, whether in training or just in camp, is always on constant alert, considering everything they do in the world, and here you are already wrong, then you made FMC write that the photographer reminds him of Mc but nicer, oh dear, this is more serious than everything FMC materially does, the lies and the sex compared to that sentence, it is harmful, a bunch of flowers and two compliments are enough, and you go to a fashion show in lingerie, I repeat, it is porn, but don't try to make a logical argument, write your game, but don't come and tell us that this girl is not a serial cheater, I repeat, porn and cheating are fine with us, but with logic, here you skipped 10 sections in two days, if you then make Mc write pissed off, you can't make him apologize afterwards like any idiot, this means you don't know the military, maybe you should coordinate the routes first, then determine them, but not you can make it so that there are only a few dialogue differences between the two paths, because these games are all about dialogue, which is the main substance

Dude, relax. If you don’t like my game, you can just not play it, right?
I find it funny to read that I supposedly don’t understand military matters, considering I spent five years in the armed forces of my country. And once again, you didn’t read my post carefully, even though you quoted it. I said that I never specified the country where the events take place, yet you immediately refer to the fact that in the U.S. Army he wouldn’t be able to have free time.
As for the claim that his behavior is, in your opinion, not typical for a soldier - dude, soldiers are not machines. Behind every one of them is a living person, with their own feelings and emotions, their own pain and joy. They can be creative people: artists, poets, video bloggers. But when you try to be strong, resilient, and brave 24/7, sometimes you just want to feel human, relax, and watch some damn cartoons.
So I see nothing unrealistic in the main character showing weakness in front of his wife and apologizing.
I honestly don’t understand why you’re so fixated on my game if you dislike it so much and consider some of its flaws, quote, “gross” You gave it one star and wrote a review that has already been disputed by several people. I hope it was truly important for you to damage my game’s rating and people’s opinion of it, considering how much effort you put into doing so in just one day.
P.S. I hope I don't have to reply to your posts anymore.

 

[fbass]

Dude, relax. If you don’t like my game, you can just not play it, right?
I find it funny to read that I supposedly don’t understand military matters, considering I spent five years in the armed forces of my country. And once again, you didn’t read my post carefully, even though you quoted it. I said that I never specified the country where the events take place, yet you immediately refer to the fact that in the U.S. Army he wouldn’t be able to have free time.
As for the claim that his behavior is, in your opinion, not typical for a soldier - dude, soldiers are not machines. Behind every one of them is a living person, with their own feelings and emotions, their own pain and joy. They can be creative people: artists, poets, video bloggers. But when you try to be strong, resilient, and brave 24/7, sometimes you just want to feel human, relax, and watch some damn cartoons.
So I see nothing unrealistic in the main character showing weakness in front of his wife and apologizing.
I honestly don’t understand why you’re so fixated on my game if you dislike it so much and consider some of its flaws, quote, “gross” You gave it one star and wrote a review that has already been disputed by several people. I hope it was truly important for you to damage my game’s rating and people’s opinion of it, considering how much effort you put into doing so in just one day.
P.S. I hope I don't have to reply to your posts anymore.

There's no point in replying to someone that gives a 1 star rating on a .01. They'll never be happy with this game. Personally, I enjoyed it.

 

[grossegon]

thx

 

[Amin_sun]

nice game

 

[LJsecret]

Nice beginning
I'm curious to discover how the husband will figure for the photos
Hope to play soon with the update !!!
PS : don't listen to the haters

 

[Guszti242]

you who beat your dicks here and the writer who invented this was never a soldier. because if he was, he was never a soldier, then he's a real nobody. I wouldn't even tell a beta. if a soldier would allow this, then only in person when they meet. (you go on a mission for half a year, leave for ten days, go for a year, then twenty days, and when you go home in six months for those ten days or twenty days, it's not up to you, it's up to the officers. even if it's a simple practical task. but then you still perform a military task, protecting the country where you live. but you still look down on a person who can't be one. and I hate all the bastards who enjoy humiliating a soldier.) my life is lucky because my wife is also a soldier and a senior officer, just like I am a senior officer.