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VN Others Completed Bitchgal's rock-hard orgasm ～Falling for the private tutor's huge virgin dick～[Final] [Appetite]
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Hey, its a legitimate question. Why approach something that your mind fear? But since this is a hentai plot, why not create a girl (or something)? I'm questioning because I'm sure someone actually plays the game, and knows if it has actually good plot or shitty plot. And since you didn't quote my entire comment, I thought you didn't catch this. So I ask, why does he wants a girlfriend?
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Welp, picked this out of my backlog randomly. Appetite slop is nice now and then, and I don't remember if I've poked my nose into any of this dude's translations.
I'll address that first. The translation is... tolerable, but still has some rather major issues that indicate that it wasn't very thoroughly edited. Like the fact that Nagisa's dialog calls the MC "Age" for some reason, but there's no indication anywhere in the rest of the text that she's not using his actual name, so it seems like an MTL fuck-up. Either that or there's some other kind of fuck-up going on.
Then there's stuff like this...
Pretty sure we're not dealing with any snuff in this VN... This is the most blatant mistake I've seen, but there are others.
The MTL was probably somewhat edited, because it's not poetry and whatnot, but it wasn't done very carefully tbh and could use another pass or two to iron out the sheer stupid in some places.
I suppose it's... tolerable for an Appetite VN with barely any story and whatnot, but as always, I think anything deserves better.
Moving on. This is typical Appetite slop of potentially amusing idea with poor execution. Barely any set-up, jumps into sex right away, relies on time-skips to explain things, hardly any characterization and in this case, exactly one choice and that's it. Basically, the only reason to pick this up is because Nagisa looks hot and you wanna fap/schlick to her sexy antics with the loser MC. That's it.
Good enough to waste a couple of hours or some such, but not much else. Oh well.
I'll address that first. The translation is... tolerable, but still has some rather major issues that indicate that it wasn't very thoroughly edited. Like the fact that Nagisa's dialog calls the MC "Age" for some reason, but there's no indication anywhere in the rest of the text that she's not using his actual name, so it seems like an MTL fuck-up. Either that or there's some other kind of fuck-up going on.
Then there's stuff like this...
Pretty sure we're not dealing with any snuff in this VN... This is the most blatant mistake I've seen, but there are others.
The MTL was probably somewhat edited, because it's not poetry and whatnot, but it wasn't done very carefully tbh and could use another pass or two to iron out the sheer stupid in some places.
I suppose it's... tolerable for an Appetite VN with barely any story and whatnot, but as always, I think anything deserves better.
Moving on. This is typical Appetite slop of potentially amusing idea with poor execution. Barely any set-up, jumps into sex right away, relies on time-skips to explain things, hardly any characterization and in this case, exactly one choice and that's it. Basically, the only reason to pick this up is because Nagisa looks hot and you wanna fap/schlick to her sexy antics with the loser MC. That's it.
Good enough to waste a couple of hours or some such, but not much else. Oh well.