Nice game. I like that there are consequences for how you act, but at the same time, it makes you so that you can only on focus on on character per play.
Some typos
I could feel Tori's wet warmth pressed against my crouch (crotch)
Sophia: You're(Your) surprise is waiting for you Mr. N
With that she goes in side (inside) the room
Dr. Brown (whisper): When I dug deeper I realized a huge sum of money and resources is being funneled out at a consistent (constant?) base (rate?) without any oversite(oversight?)
Sophia: you mean when she cooked her self (herself)
Mike: What(,) you wouldn't if you got the chance(?)
Nate: Ohh right(,) I forgot about that(.) (G)good luck and call me if you need me.
Nate: Hmm this doesn't seem right(.) (W)why are we operating with in (within) our borders??
Nate: Yea(h,) with in (within) our own city where we have no legal right to operate
Tori: Like who(?) Lily(?)
Sophia: You embarrassed your self(yourself)...
Nate: So(,) have you talked to the prof lately(?)
Mike: Have you been in contact with him(?)
Nate:Yea(h,) remember the convo we had on your birthday (can't remember if because of the context this was a question or him telling her to remember)
Lily: Yeaa(h,) I guess you're right(,) I'll have to think about it though
Mike: How come(?) (W)what are you going to do here??
Nate: May be (Maybe) I can hel you with that
Tori(whisper): Hehe... what ever (whatever) you want
Nate: What does that mean(?)
Lily: Yea(h,) I'm going upstairs to change(. B)bye Nate
Sophia: Baby(,) you coming to bed(?)
Lily: It('s) nice Nate... I like it
Nate: Don(')t be so quick to dsmiss(dismiss) it, it might be (the) best option(,) especaily (especially) for tanning
Nate: Why would I lie(?) (Y)you're gorgeous
Tori: You think I'm gorgeous(?)
Tori: How about now(? D)do you think I'm beautiful or sexy(?)
I can't keep my eyes off her top less (topless) body
