VN Ren'Py Bodycount Vol.1 – A Visual Novel Based on the Book [v0.1] [PleasurePixels]

[PleasurePixels]

Android version pleasee

Hi, Android version is coming at the end of the month with the Chapter 1 release. I already made some modifications and upgrades to the Prologue (the version of the game that you can find in this thread) so basically this version does not exist anymore

 

[Allenebs]

Isn't enough here atm for me to form an opinion.

MC really needs money and if she chooses to not make east money, she will be forced to make them the hard way.

This is a problem bc, right now, that's all there is to this. One sentence describing the plot of what is supposed to be an entire book. I should come away wanting more, but in this case the question is, more of what? I'm a huge fan of the premise, but I need a lot more than a plot description out of the initial release. What in the game atm should bring me back for future updates? You're promising to deliver on things that other games currently do, but you didn't actually show that YOU ARE capable of delivering. I don't just mean sex, not a single character is given enough time for me to become invested in them. Why should I invest myself in any way in your game either along side or instead of those other games doing what you promise your game will?

I don't want an answer from you. If I have access to your game, I want it to be able to answer more than 95% of the questions I could ask you. I want you to be absorbing praise and reflecting on the feedback you're receiving right now. At most, I want you answering questions about renders per day, the intended size of your updates and questions like the one you received about animations. That way any conversations you have with the community you're building around your game is productive. When you're repeatedly stating that line I quoted, our interactions with each other quickly lose all value. When that happens, that's a really good way to lose motivation.

Your MC's motivation is relatable, but too generic. GoFundMe is full of tens of thousands of people in the same situation. If you ask the MC why she's doing this for her grandma, we need to feel compelled to help her in a way similar to her granddaughter. Instead, I'm wondering why in the fuck she's helping her grandma at all. In your one interaction with her, she insults and demeans you. She has money to give to your sister, but you're the one paying for her meds? Nah, grandma doesn't deserve our empathy, game over. That's how this should play out. Whether your wrote this or someone else did, THAT has to get fixed.

 

[PleasurePixels]

Isn't enough here atm for me to form an opinion.

This is a problem bc, right now, that's all there is to this. One sentence describing the plot of what is supposed to be an entire book. I should come away wanting more, but in this case the question is, more of what? I'm a huge fan of the premise, but I need a lot more than a plot description out of the initial release. What in the game atm should bring me back for future updates? You're promising to deliver on things that other games currently do, but you didn't actually show that YOU ARE capable of delivering. I don't just mean sex, not a single character is given enough time for me to become invested in them. Why should I invest myself in any way in your game either along side or instead of those other games doing what you promise your game will?

I don't want an answer from you. If I have access to your game, I want it to be able to answer more than 95% of the questions I could ask you. I want you to be absorbing praise and reflecting on the feedback you're receiving right now. At most, I want you answering questions about renders per day, the intended size of your updates and questions like the one you received about animations. That way any conversations you have with the community you're building around your game is productive. When you're repeatedly stating that line I quoted, our interactions with each other quickly lose all value. When that happens, that's a really good way to lose motivation.

Your MC's motivation is relatable, but too generic. GoFundMe is full of tens of thousands of people in the same situation. If you ask the MC why she's doing this for her grandma, we need to feel compelled to help her in a way similar to her granddaughter. Instead, I'm wondering why in the fuck she's helping her grandma at all. In your one interaction with her, she insults and demeans you. She has money to give to your sister, but you're the one paying for her meds? Nah, grandma doesn't deserve our empathy, game over. That's how this should play out. Whether your wrote this or someone else did, THAT has to get fixed.

Thank you so much for the detailed feedback, that's exactly what I need to get better. I won't start overexplaining or justifying things, I will answer the other questions, but you're right about the flaws of the prologue. Hopefully future updates will fill in the gaps.

Currently, I receive about 8 renders per day from the artist. Based on how the chapters are structured right now, each one requires approximately 270 renders. This means the plan is to release a new chapter every 4–5 weeks.

Regarding animations, I plan to introduce them with updates to the prologue and Chapter 1 at the end of this month. Based on the feedback I receive, I’ll decide whether to continue including them. I’ll admit, I’m not very experienced with animations yet, but I’m willing to give it a shot and see how it goes.

If you have any other questions, feel free to ask. I’m happy to assist however I can. Thanks again for your feedback and patience as I work to improve the game!