- Aug 14, 2021
- 48
- 172
I'll be honest in my review, so dont expect sugar in the tea i'm spilling. (Personal opinion btw)
While I couldn't bring myself through the whole game, I did play about halfway (If i were to guess. Spent a good 2 hours on it)
The idea is great, but the execution falls short in multiple places.
The Writing:
I'll be honest, the writing isn't good. It feels like it wasn't proofread.
And if it was, then i suggest bringing someone else or an extra proofreader on the team. In multiple places of the game, i got confused or taken out of the immersion of the story.
The story is alright, but it needs a rework in execution, as nearly everything seems to happen for the fap.
And it's okay to do stuff for the sake of fap, but it would be better executed as comedic relief, relationship events and such.
Don't do it as a character trait, thats just lazy.
Characters:
I'm not above saying the characters are endearing to a point, but there are some that just brings a certain amount of ''Yeah, I am not playing this.''
The protagonist is honestly a wimp, without anything other than ''Pervert with powers''. And while that's good for a sandbox game, it doesn't mesh well with a game trying to tell a story. And it only frustrated me more that the protagonist's personality is there, but there are no options to act on or shape said personality.
A lot of the characters have personalities, but they are overdone. They don't seem to have a real personality outside their work or titles.
Reactions to event's are overdone as well.
I never felt like ''Yeah, i understand how you feel, bud'' Simply because the reactions are too much.
Game:
The renders are stunning in some scenes, and in others it looks like a drawing from a 12 year old.
The animations are good, I have nothing to say there.
Sound design made my ears want to commit the act of unaliving. It is NOT GOOD.
Now, i'm not an asshole that just spews my load and leaves, so here is what i personally think could make it better.
You can have all the outlandish ideas you want, and you can make them fit the story if it's written well.
Everything has a reason, so give subtle hints in dialogue, actions or their ideology, maybe even in the environment.
The characters act in extreme reactions or move in urgency when it's not needed. Tone that down a bit, or give them a reason to act as such. Could be the way they grew up, experiences or something else.
The MC seems to have opinions on stuff, but there is no way to act on them or form a personality. Let people make rash decisions on characters they disagree with or agree with, and let it shape the consequences. Don't like Natalie? Alright, but she will start being more annoying or maybe she will actually be hurt by that decision.
As for the sound and game design.
Sound design shouldn't be top of the shelf VA's moaning and yelling in a mic, or a person adding foley in layers to make a certain sound. Just yoink some snippets from PH or another porn site, and for the envirnmental stuff YT is a good bet. Anything under 5 seconds isn't copyright eligible.
Game design.
Switch less between rendered animation and full animation. I can't say much here since I'm well versed in Music/Sounds, VA'ing and writing, not game making, rendering and photo edits.
NOTE: I wrote all this as a review of a story within a game, not for a game for the fap's. So if the game is meant to be a fapfest, then be free to tell me to go fuck myself.
While I couldn't bring myself through the whole game, I did play about halfway (If i were to guess. Spent a good 2 hours on it)
The idea is great, but the execution falls short in multiple places.
The Writing:
I'll be honest, the writing isn't good. It feels like it wasn't proofread.
And if it was, then i suggest bringing someone else or an extra proofreader on the team. In multiple places of the game, i got confused or taken out of the immersion of the story.
The story is alright, but it needs a rework in execution, as nearly everything seems to happen for the fap.
And it's okay to do stuff for the sake of fap, but it would be better executed as comedic relief, relationship events and such.
Don't do it as a character trait, thats just lazy.
Characters:
I'm not above saying the characters are endearing to a point, but there are some that just brings a certain amount of ''Yeah, I am not playing this.''
The protagonist is honestly a wimp, without anything other than ''Pervert with powers''. And while that's good for a sandbox game, it doesn't mesh well with a game trying to tell a story. And it only frustrated me more that the protagonist's personality is there, but there are no options to act on or shape said personality.
A lot of the characters have personalities, but they are overdone. They don't seem to have a real personality outside their work or titles.
Reactions to event's are overdone as well.
I never felt like ''Yeah, i understand how you feel, bud'' Simply because the reactions are too much.
Game:
The renders are stunning in some scenes, and in others it looks like a drawing from a 12 year old.
The animations are good, I have nothing to say there.
Sound design made my ears want to commit the act of unaliving. It is NOT GOOD.
Now, i'm not an asshole that just spews my load and leaves, so here is what i personally think could make it better.
You can have all the outlandish ideas you want, and you can make them fit the story if it's written well.
Everything has a reason, so give subtle hints in dialogue, actions or their ideology, maybe even in the environment.
The characters act in extreme reactions or move in urgency when it's not needed. Tone that down a bit, or give them a reason to act as such. Could be the way they grew up, experiences or something else.
The MC seems to have opinions on stuff, but there is no way to act on them or form a personality. Let people make rash decisions on characters they disagree with or agree with, and let it shape the consequences. Don't like Natalie? Alright, but she will start being more annoying or maybe she will actually be hurt by that decision.
As for the sound and game design.
Sound design shouldn't be top of the shelf VA's moaning and yelling in a mic, or a person adding foley in layers to make a certain sound. Just yoink some snippets from PH or another porn site, and for the envirnmental stuff YT is a good bet. Anything under 5 seconds isn't copyright eligible.
Game design.
Switch less between rendered animation and full animation. I can't say much here since I'm well versed in Music/Sounds, VA'ing and writing, not game making, rendering and photo edits.
NOTE: I wrote all this as a review of a story within a game, not for a game for the fap's. So if the game is meant to be a fapfest, then be free to tell me to go fuck myself.
