- Jun 12, 2017
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Glad you like it ! Can you elaborate on the Bibofication and changing our title ? I don't quite get it sorry.
Well for now we're only focusing on Indonesia as reference to our game setting so it doesn't looks like a messy bundles of cultures reference inside one simple small game, but later on I plan to add more from neighboring countries such as Malaysia or Singapore. The thing is we're using cultures as a characterization of our NPCs, still though with that many cultures in Indonesia alone I think that would make it a more common stuff inside our game stories.
I'm not sure if that's a good thing or not lol
- Jun 18, 2017
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It just looks like whoever is the writer for this plot has lived this reality himself...
So it seems some people from Indonesia have left their comments in here lol thank you so much btw for the feedbacks.
Sorry I miss on your post before, as you said it does looks better but I'm not sure if I can change the description post above as I'm not the one posting the thread.
Is that not a normal thing ? I mean some people around me have pretty much the same experience, especially if they're a late bloomer that just trying to do some new stuff in college. I don't know though, I just thought it would be an interesting plot and it would help the main character to develop throughout this game.
- Sep 15, 2017
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So, I played it and...
where is my immersion?! I like the setting, the art is fine for me, but... i don't get involved. There is too much that makes me feel like a watcher from the outside. It is not the indonesian setting, as I play asian or ever weirder SciFi Settings and get in just fine. The part from looking for a model to fuck in 5 seconds also is not a game breaker, considering that I found it here. Maybe the game tries too hard to explain some things (all the fact dropping about modern sensuality and Nayas background) and is a bit lazy in making me understand my place in it?! Or the feeling the choices are not really important?
I'll keep watching for this. I would like the game to overcome this.
Kudos for not being the 1001st brother fucks the whole (step)-family game!
where is my immersion?! I like the setting, the art is fine for me, but... i don't get involved. There is too much that makes me feel like a watcher from the outside. It is not the indonesian setting, as I play asian or ever weirder SciFi Settings and get in just fine. The part from looking for a model to fuck in 5 seconds also is not a game breaker, considering that I found it here. Maybe the game tries too hard to explain some things (all the fact dropping about modern sensuality and Nayas background) and is a bit lazy in making me understand my place in it?! Or the feeling the choices are not really important?
I'll keep watching for this. I would like the game to overcome this.
Kudos for not being the 1001st brother fucks the whole (step)-family game!
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- Aug 5, 2017
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Oh wow... And here I thought that's normal and it would makes people feels relatable in a way hahaha
Hey thank you so much for your feedback ! I'll try to explain why our demo currently feels that way :
1. Currently, our easiest way to makes player feels more engaged with our game is by using straight bad end / game over route and letting people keep retrying to find the right answer to proceed the events, this goes way much different than what we're planning to show to the players. Our goal is to makes players feel that they might be in the right answer / route because there's no game over screen but in reality it's leading them to different story conclusion (In this case, not being able to fuck Naya and mocked by the other guys), this goal is set to makes each player thinking on how to proceed with each event / problem they're going to encounter in this game with the reward being able to fuck Naya. We even tried to explain to the players if they're choosing the wrong route, with hope they'll adjust to how the logic of this game is working while also making it not being a meaningless "Boo, you choose the wrong answer ! Now replay and chose the other one".
2. Are there any other options than the point above ? Of course there is, unfortunately we're not exactly the talented and experienced individuals who're able to create great stuff without putting much efforts. Both me and ViChan developing this game in our free time from works, which mean we only have a little time each day to give progress in developing it and as you can see it's not so great but hey it's done and people can give us some feedback out of it. Our limited resources obviously stopping us to give more immersive experience to the players, but realistically we can't put too much effort on something that don't have enough support. Which is why we also put a low goal for our project, to give us some sort of reassurance that this project is going alright.
Now this is just daydreaming but, how I'll create our game if we have better resources and features in our game :
- Up until Bule and Asu meet with Naya is an intro to our game, after that players are free to choose what action they're going to do to help with Naya's problem.
- Library = to learn about Modern Sensual genre, Classroom = to accidentally meet with Ian or miss him if Bule takes too long to look for him (2 options, taking his equipment or not. If not, you need to ask it from Asu), Smoking Area = meet with Jon and Asu (If not, Bule might not have the equipment and more clues on how to help Naya), Naya's kosan = to progress the story. If the items or clues isn't enough, Bule won't be able to have the correct idea on how to help with Naya's problem which lead him to bad end route.
- After Naya reveals her goal is to be more open about her figures and clothing the gameplay would be like a trainer genres, in this case Bule started with asking Naya about to open her hijab - next few days she keeps getting complimented about her hair - she's unsure if her figures would be getting the same compliments - strip scenes - Naya's trying new kind of clothing - sex scene - conclusion.
- Stuff like Naya's background can be put in background assets in her room if players wanted to see it for themselves, so Bule can draw the conclusion of Naya being shy about her figures and finding more clues. Etc.
Now that would be a way better demo to show what kind of game we're planning to build, but for now we can only do with linear visual novel style.
- Nov 6, 2017
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Keep up the good work !! Good to see some different artwork & concept from most of other H-game in this forum. Waiting for next release with more content .. Maybe muslim lecturer MILF, anyone? :firstimekiss::firstimekiss:
There's a bit too much Bahasa for the international audience to make sense of. I'm not Indonesian, but I know a few words. Things like kosan, and stuff like that, it should be changed to English if possible, in that case it would be apartment. This will become an even bigger problem as the range of cultures increases in the game, as no one audience will be able to understand all the words.
Also, the game needs a back button. I tend to skim the text and go past things very quickly, but if I go too far I need to go backwards to see it again, but there's no ability to do that here.
In general, the plot seemed very easy. For being a religious girl, getting her in bed was not difficult at all. She's not living with her parents, which is kind of odd in the situation, and there's basically not even any pretext of actually taking pictures once the clothes come off.
Good start.
Also, the game needs a back button. I tend to skim the text and go past things very quickly, but if I go too far I need to go backwards to see it again, but there's no ability to do that here.
In general, the plot seemed very easy. For being a religious girl, getting her in bed was not difficult at all. She's not living with her parents, which is kind of odd in the situation, and there's basically not even any pretext of actually taking pictures once the clothes come off.
Good start.
A little advise from me :
--> Reduce the Arabic , Malays & Indonesian Words , unless you hope this game is made to be played by Indonesian / Malaysian / Muslim.
-->I know you are making visual novel but please reduce the text , and learn more from Game like Big Brother , Summertime Saga , or Dreams of Desire , Love and Submission , Dual Family , Ethan legacy.
I'm not a Fan to Japanese Eroge, too much reading Text. Have you play Telltale Walking Dead ?
-->You are making porn VN Games , Not Slice Of Life Visual Light Novel , too much male characters & few female characters.
If You Want to make porn VN / Games / Manga / Novel , or whatever , the formula to success always Taboo / Fetish (Incest , Harem , Slavery , Rape , Lolicon & Shotacon , MILF , Inter Racial , Netorare) & Ridiculous Fantasy (Monster , Hypnosis , Drugs , Robot , Alien , zombies Apocalypse , Time Machine , etc)
You already made quiet right decision to Exploiting Devout Muslim girl with its Hijab as the story plot (Taboo & Fetish) , eventhough the conversation is Bland.
--> because you made your character as a "Bule" , which is mean WHITE Foreigner , and the location in Indonesia , it would be better if the main character is a teenager , live in Indonesia because his Father married to Indonesian Widow , Main character Father died shortly after marry his Indonesian wife , leaving MC to live together in Indonesia together with his Step moms , step sister & his Indonesian MAID (theres abundant of Maid in Indonesia) , there ton of Poverty in third world countries , you should made good story exploiting poverty in third world countries (MC is Rich White boy just receive inheritance from his deceased father) , exploiting children prostitution in Southeast asia.
--> The art is Boring , No Emotion , No Characters , No Personality , If You want made good Porn , made a handsome regular main character + Harem of Beautiful girl.
Sorry if i'm giving a lot of critique , hopefully you can develope the game to be better in future
- Nov 30, 2017
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@wrong you are trying make a copy from other 50 games out there... The Muslim is a homerun, he just need to make other girls that are outside the box. The bule thing can be better sure but the same crap teenager boy fuck mother and the town... The rest you are right.
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Some Genre Never to be too much Saturated.
-->Superheroes Genre , Spiderman , Batman , Superman , X-man , all is about Superheroes against Monster
-->One Piece , Naruto , Dragon Balls , all about teens adventure, having friends , character growth & always meet more powerful opponent
-->Walking Dead , Dawn Of The Dead , Zombieland , Shaun Of The Dead, Resident Evil , all about the same zombies apocalypse.
Fanboys always want their same genre , Incest & Harem
Dream of Desires is not the same crap as Big Brother , My New Life is not the same crap to Milf City , The Twist is not the same crap to summertime saga.
You can still be creative without trying to avoid Incest genre
I tried the game and what I can say is that coming from "a third world country" myself I can perfectly understand the local terms perfectly. But i doubt that people from Europe or US can understand the concept of and what is kosan. Some localization would be better.
Just out of curiosity is Naya going to be the only heroine in the game?
also it may sound a bit harsh but are you sure with the visual design and artstyle of the characters? speaking from personal experience, almost 90% of the visual novels (nukige) that I choose to play are influenced by the artstyle....
Keep it up
Just out of curiosity is Naya going to be the only heroine in the game?
also it may sound a bit harsh but are you sure with the visual design and artstyle of the characters? speaking from personal experience, almost 90% of the visual novels (nukige) that I choose to play are influenced by the artstyle....
Keep it up
