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VN Ren'Py Breaking Ties [v0.5] [Secret Arcade]

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LWok

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Aug 24, 2016
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The story seems to jump around a bit now and not flow quite as well. The sex scene with a condom towards the end is jarring, no build up just "we banging now". Something seemed off with the "intruder" story line too, like it happens before he's in another apartment now. Needs a lot more proof reading and making sure scenes flow. Also the blowjob under the covers is really stupid, she's not a small woman and would be really obvious. At least make the lights be out or something. Probably make more sense if there was some reason the MC couldn't get in the room. Door blocked with boxes or something I don't know.

This is a great premise, a generally good story with some pacing and continuity issues. Keep it up fixing the issues and it can be something special.
 
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kevy

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Jun 19, 2017
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LWok said:
The story seems to jump around a bit now and not flow quite as well. The sex scene with a condom towards the end is jarring, no build up just "we banging now". Something seemed off with the "intruder" story line too, like it happens before he's in another apartment now. Needs a lot more proof reading and making sure scenes flow. Also the blowjob under the covers is really stupid, she's not a small woman and would be really obvious. At least make the lights be out or something. Probably make more sense if there was some reason the MC couldn't get in the room. Door blocked with boxes or something I don't know.

This is a great premise, a generally good story with some pacing and continuity issues. Keep it up fixing the issues and it can be something special.
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Completely agree with this, would have liked a bit of build up here instead of them automatically in bed having sex. Even if we got a bit of context where he seduced her a bit and she agrees but makes him wear the condom. Would like to see that scene added/ redone.

Really good game though enjoying it
 
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Pogo123

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still really damn hot milf. one of the best. everything else could be solid average a bit more choices dont hurt but still primarily jack content (which i don't want) so still waste of download for me...
 
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Adhdclassic

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Kind of confused she cheated how did this happen is there an error. And if it is not an error, shouldn't it be called Ending #1- didn't get caught.
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janitor555

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Oct 28, 2024
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Anyone know how Layla can see under the blanket?:FacePalm:
I’m just curious — it’s kind of weird!
Also, the childish dialogue and behavior feel really off, especially coming from adult characters.
Sorry, but I don’t really get it.
I know it’s just pure story writing, at least the nice cars are a plus! :)
 
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X GANG

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Aug 10, 2025
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I created a story from my imagination, for example, Layla is a married woman, her husband is a very bad person, Layla has never received love and respect from her husband, Layla wants to get rid of this hellish world and wants to divorce her husband, then after being alone for a few years, she started feeling very lonely and started looking for a good life partner and fortunately she found the life partner of her dreams and started getting married and living a family. Layla's life partner was a very handsome and successful man, any girl would like him, it's natural, from then on the story will take a turn, Layla's younger sister will fall in love with Layla's husband and have sex with him, and Layla's friend will want to take her husband away from Layla by force, but Layla's husband will be very loyal to Layla, and she will not disappoint Layla's sister or friend, this is how the story will go forward :giggle:
 
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