Arassei

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The girl relationship is not the plot here.
Heya,

You can admit there is no plot here, nobody will blame you. That's the privilege when you make a porn game.

But I can see two possible endings for that kind game :

1) The MC is pissed off, after 50 updates, and tell the Bright lord :
MC - I'm pissed off ! I won't listen to you ever again !
Bright lord - Aaarrg, I'm just a weak shit with no goal ! That's my weakness ! I'm dying ! AArrrrg !
Glorious family orgy, end.

2) The MC is still pissed off, and tell the Bright lord :
MC - I'm pissed off ! I won't listen to you ever again !
Bright lord - How dare you ! I'm a big shot ! I made you rape your family all this time for no reason and you dare to turn against me just because this is the end of the game ? I will possess your body forever !
MC - aaaaarrrrgg nooooooooo !
Glorious... whatever it will be.
 
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Well, it's finally here... I really hope you like it. Don't be afraid to criticize the game(as much as I hate criticism, but without it you cant progress further). I had so much fun doing this project and I have a lot planned for the future. Please if you find some spelling error don't be afraid to say it... I actually paid for proofreading, but that dude did nothing tbh :mad:...

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Can you fix the grammatical errors for the next version? Hate to be the grammar nazi, but the difference between your (possessive) and you're (you are) is the most basic of grammatical errors.
 

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Heya,

You can admit there is no plot here, nobody will blame you. That's the privilege when you make a porn game.

But I can see two possible endings for that kind game :

1) The MC is pissed off, after 50 updates, and tell the Bright lord :
MC - I'm pissed off ! I won't listen to you ever again !
Bright lord - Aaarrg, I'm just a weak shit with no goal ! That's my weakness ! I'm dying ! AArrrrg !
Glorious family orgy, end.

2) The MC is still pissed off, and tell the Bright lord :
MC - I'm pissed off ! I won't listen to you ever again !
Bright lord - How dare you ! I'm a big shot ! I made you rape your family all this time for no reason and you dare to turn against me just because this is the end of the game ? I will possess your body forever !
MC - aaaaarrrrgg nooooooooo !
Glorious... whatever it will be.
Probably you are right on this one :D Sorry, I am not a writer, I would love to have somebody write a story for me for my second game. Right now I am just trying to get used to hating and criticism. For now, I want to go for Brazzers porn style there is a plot but not so deep you know. I am sorry i didn't meet your expectations :(
 
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Can you fix the grammatical errors for the next version? Hate to be the grammar nazi, but the difference between your (possessive) and you're (you are) is the most basic of grammatical errors.
Probably I will. I used two diff proofreaders already still searching for the one and only. TY for the insight!
 
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anedwcan

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Can I ask that the first post gives at least some indications as to what kinds of "horror" the game contains.

I'm reading the description, I'm looking at the supplied screenshots, I'm looking at the latest reviews, nothing. I have no clue as to what the author means by "horror".

I mean, "erotic horror" can mean many things, some (much) darker and profound than others. Would be nice if the OP gave at least a hint if it's "light" or "heavy" horror elements...

For some, watching a girl involuntarily fuck a demon (say) counts as horror. For other, more depraved souls, that would be considered vanilla...
 

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Can I ask that the first post gives at least some indications as to what kinds of "horror" the game contains.

I'm reading the description, I'm looking at the supplied screenshots, I'm looking at the latest reviews, nothing. I have no clue as to what the author means by "horror".

I mean, "erotic horror" can mean many things, some (much) darker and profound than others. Would be nice if the OP gave at least a hint if it's "light" or "heavy" horror elements...

For some, watching a girl involuntarily fuck a demon (say) counts as horror. For other, more depraved souls, that would be considered vanilla...
Well If you put it that way it's light horror game. I don't think anyone can make VN scary
 

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Heya,

The first update was good and intriguing. Some "normal" family and a paranormal presence in the end. I had faith in it.

This update was just stupid... The dev didn't think twice about the story, heh ?
Now we're going with mind control story shit, again. The easy solution when you have no idea for a plot.
The choices are " Give in " or " Resist ", so, either you become a beta and have sex, controled by this " bright lord " who looks like the son of a mummy and a gargoyle, or you do nothing.
The "normal" family became suddently the "annoying" family, with the famous first cliché : " the bitch rebellious sister who likes to party and comes home drunk ", and the famous second cliché : " the fragile sister who can't stand a little pressure and cry for nothing".
And I don't talk about the useless event : the shopping, when you see a woman who irritate the mother and you return home without buying anything, and without the slightest explanation.


I would suggest the dev stop this massacre and think about another story before reaching the point of no return and giving up on his own game.

Good luck.
All of that that's great to me it's a porn game why are you so hung up on the plot.
 

Arassei

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Probably you are right on this one :D Sorry, I am not a writer, I would love to have somebody write a story for me for my second game. Right now I am just trying to get used to hating and criticism. For now, I want to for Brazzers porn style there is a plot but not so deep you know. I am sorry i didn't meet your expectations :(
Heya,

It's not so hard to make a story. It's doesn't need to be a best seller, but just something you can fellow and believe in it.
Some free tips :
- Be carefull of clichés (the bitch sister is the worse, you can't do anything with that, and she is in every game already)
- All the characters have a background (not necessarily a goal for the futur, but they have a past, who influence their personality), don't make them do something that don't fit them for no reason.
- Keep in mind the kind of player you want to attract to your game.
- It's a porn game, so, some scenes are for the show of course, but be carefull at pointless scenes.
Exemple : the shopping scene. If you wanted to make the mother furious and leave the mall, you could did something with the new woman, like a dispute or something. But here, the mother just saw the woman, and leave in anger. In a "complete" story, that could be good because the player would have the answer pretty soon, but ... (next tip)
- Don't forget your game is released little by little. With that point of view, it would be good to satisfy the curiosity of the player a little more, like, the MC ask the mom an explanation about that woman, and the mom, at least, gives him something to think about. If that explanation comes in 5 updates, the player will forget what happened. It's not like a show with " Previously, on... "
- Heavy drama and tragedies don't fit porn games. It's not exciting. At all. If you make the choice to insert it in the game, put it at a good distance of a sex scene, or it will be wasted.

For your game, and if you have really no idea, maybe the MC can be pissed off veeeeery soon (in the next update), and start to use his brain. Maybe he can find some kind of diary of a previous owner of the house, and find information about that bright lord, and some clues about his goal. Maybe he can talk about that night with the bitch sister and she can realise something and starting to help the MC and be closer to him. Maybe the mummy-gargoyle bastard is just an illusion in MC's mind and later, he found that the bright lord is a hot stuff (it's still a porn game) who have a "good" reason to force the MC to have sex with his family, it will lighten the drama plot. Maybe she is a succubus, and need the sexual atmosphere to stay "alive" because she is very weak and about to die, and she use the mummy-gargoyle illusion to scare MC and make him obey but, as she very weak, the illusion fade away a little bit and the MC sees for a second the real apparence of the monster.

Soooo much things you can do with paranormal plot.
 

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Heya,

It's not so hard to make a story. It's doesn't need to be a best seller, but just something you can fellow and believe in it.
Some free tips :
- Be carefull of clichés (the bitch sister is the worse, you can't do anything with that, and she is in every game already)
- All the characters have a background (not necessarily a goal for the futur, but they have a past, who influence their personality), don't make them do something that don't fit them for no reason.
- Keep in mind the kind of player you want to attract to your game.
- It's a porn game, so, some scenes are for the show of course, but be carefull at pointless scenes.
Exemple : the shopping scene. If you wanted to make the mother furious and leave the mall, you could did something with the new woman, like a dispute or something. But here, the mother just saw the woman, and leave in anger. In a "complete" story, that could be good because the player would have the answer pretty soon, but ... (next tip)
- Don't forget your game is released little by little. With that point of view, it would be good to satisfy the curiosity of the player a little more, like, the MC ask the mom an explanation about that woman, and the mom, at least, gives him something to think about. If that explanation comes in 5 updates, the player will forget what happened. It's not like a show with " Previously, on... "
- Heavy drama and tragedies don't fit porn games. It's not exciting. At all. If you make the choice to insert it in the game, put it at a good distance of a sex scene, or it will be wasted.

For your game, and if you have really no idea, maybe the MC can be pissed off veeeeery soon (in the next update), and start to use his brain. Maybe he can find some kind of diary of a previous owner of the house, and find information about that bright lord, and some clues about his goal. Maybe he can talk about that night with the bitch sister and she can realise something and starting to help the MC and be closer to him. Maybe the mummy-gargoyle bastard is just an illusion in MC's mind and later, he found that the bright lord is a hot stuff (it's still a porn game) who have a "good" reason to force the MC to have sex with his family, it will lighten the drama plot. Maybe she is a succubus, and need the sexual atmosphere to stay "alive" because she is very weak and about to die, and she use the mummy-gargoyle illusion to scare MC and make him obey but, as she very weak, the illusion fade away a little bit and the MC sees for a second the real apparence of the monster.

Soooo much things you can do with paranormal plot.
Good shit i like it. I agree with the partial release thing i need to explain some bits. About the plot my idea that the story is about mc and bright. But yeah I agree with you. I cant expect my first project go full 5 stars. Ty for your help that really helps!
 
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Arassei

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All of that that's great to me it's a porn game why are you so hung up on the plot.
Heya,

Because a game has 4 things : graphics, sound, gameplay, and STORY.
If you don't put a story in your game, then why do you want to make it ? Just go to see porn on internet.
Don't forget the dev has a patreon and need money. If you want money, make something good, and not something that you already saw 5000 times, or nobody will pay you.

That's why.
 

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Well If you put it that way it's light horror game. I don't think anyone can make VN scary
Could you expand upon that? Could you take an example of what happens in the game, that made you add the "horror" tag?

Or perhaps the horror element is just a final twist and you don't want to spoil it?
 

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Could you expand upon that? Could you take an example of what happens in the game, that made you add the "horror" tag?

Or perhaps the horror element is just a final twist and you don't want to spoil it?
I think you will know my horror idea when you play the game.
 

anedwcan

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I think you will know my horror idea when you play the game.
I will assume that means "I don't want to tell you".

I hope it has been obvious that I'm asking if it's possible to understand the horror tag just from reading the OP for readers, so they don't have to download, install and play a game just to learn if it interests them...
 
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I will assume that means "I don't want to tell you".

I hope it has been obvious that I'm asking if it's possible to understand the horror tag just from reading the OP for readers, so they don't have to download, install and play a game just to learn if it interests them...
The thing is i don't know how to tell you? there is no gore in it just some parts that maybe would give some horror felling
 
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