VN Ren'Py Abandoned Broken Stones Saga [v1.0] [kiyankris]

SpikeZg

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Ok, first scene, i can't get out of the room, can't click on the clothes...
what to do? :)

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Queen_Of_Darkness

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I cant find Jason in the very beginning. WTF am i supposed to do?????

I've clicked on everything i can interact with. Not able to proceed. Please help.
 
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somebodynobody

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That startup asking if you are 18 is confusing. You agree and it pops up an "are you sure, you will lose everything". So you think oh the other one was the right choice to play, so you click no and auto closes.

Please get rid of that unsaved progress popup on if you want to even play the game.


has a more sounding name : (missing a word?) (I was using a single letter to name MC) Which is funny since you are going to meet with "J".

Referring to the "stash" as "it" makes players not realize which thing to click

And I'm not about to now. : (this comes after "I've never been inside", doesn't make sense as a follow up)


To Dev. You should probably ask for Dev Tag, and maybe ask for the thread, so you can update those images, being they are from the old version.
 
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realkiyankris said:
Thanks for the feedback, it's appreciated. I'll fix the startup asap.
The thing about "J" - it's supposed to be "Jay", for Jason, just like "Nat" is for Natalie when MC comments on the poster. Don't know why I kept writing just J. Omission on my part.
"It" is not referring to the "stash" but to the necklace.
An important thing to bear in mind - I am not trying to make a pixel-hunting game here, but a certain fashion of figuring simple things out, and interacting with various items on the screen, will remain in the game. I will, however, always try to make this kinda stuff logical.

Best,
Kris
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No problem.

The part about "J", was that when I tried to name the MC a single letter, I wasn't allowed to, but the error for it didn't make sense, as if it was missing some letters or words. Then in the game the MC mentions his friend "J" and I thought it was funny. Main point is yeah expand J's name and a better error on why single letters aren't allowed.

Slightly weird he had to get the necklace from his Stash, when he is supposed to always wear it. I guess it will be a plot point in the future.


I would say the Key icon for settings isn't a great choice. Being the "cog" symbol is universal for that. Maybe use the Key for "Key items" And the bag for useable inventory.


Only other thing might be "Preston Villa" I don't know if that is the name of the place, or the last name of the family, if the first then never mind, if the second, then wouldn't it be "The Preston's Villa"?
 
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realkiyankris said:
Yes, it will be a plot point.
Think - Buckingham Palace. They've only just arrived there. It's supposed to be an old villa, with a backstory I'll hopefully add in the future.

Again, thanks for the constructive feedback.

Best,
Kris
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Final piece of feedback.

An intro image with your title.

The coloration/looks of the Ren'Py UI (save/load/settings/etc.) The harsh light grey is a bit hard on the eyes and doesn't push the theme of your game.


Between Alarm and Stash, maybe throw in a getting dressed point?

The jumping of the mouse when you click on inventory/quests. I get it is useful, but it may throw people off.

Basement a bit too hidden.

MC's shorts the non finished stripe, or a more detailed pocket would be nice.

I would like Katie's badge to stand out a bit more. Maybe some pant details stand out a bit more.

Text box and names a bit bigger and stand out a bit better.

A little better standing out on hover of icons on top GUI

The Modern Art lacks a pop over text.

Not really a problem, just an observation, Most things have pop over of what they are, but 4 things have actions instead. Bed has sleep, Calendar has look, Computer has use, window has look.

Aesthetically, the dining room ceiling light is way too huge.

To save game size for the future. Don't use MP3 or WAV files, use OPUS
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You don't have much yet, but this will make sure you stay small but still great quality.

For images. Keep the PNG on your PC as the originals, but for what you ship out, you might want to use WEBP/WEBM or in the future AVIF/AV1, again you will have to look into it, but it may save you size on what you ship.

Other than that good luck with your game.
 
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so, I tried it and all you can do right now is talk to topless milf? Nothing after that?
 
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