VN Ren'Py Abandoned Broken Stones Saga [v1.0] [kiyankris]

[somebodynobody]

Yes, it will be a plot point.
Think - Buckingham Palace. They've only just arrived there. It's supposed to be an old villa, with a backstory I'll hopefully add in the future.

Again, thanks for the constructive feedback.

Best,
Kris

Final piece of feedback.

An intro image with your title.

The coloration/looks of the Ren'Py UI (save/load/settings/etc.) The harsh light grey is a bit hard on the eyes and doesn't push the theme of your game.


Between Alarm and Stash, maybe throw in a getting dressed point?

The jumping of the mouse when you click on inventory/quests. I get it is useful, but it may throw people off.

Basement a bit too hidden.

MC's shorts the non finished stripe, or a more detailed pocket would be nice.

I would like Katie's badge to stand out a bit more. Maybe some pant details stand out a bit more.

Text box and names a bit bigger and stand out a bit better.

A little better standing out on hover of icons on top GUI

The Modern Art lacks a pop over text.

Not really a problem, just an observation, Most things have pop over of what they are, but 4 things have actions instead. Bed has sleep, Calendar has look, Computer has use, window has look.

Aesthetically, the dining room ceiling light is way too huge.

To save game size for the future. Don't use MP3 or WAV files, use OPUS

You must be registered to see the links

You don't have much yet, but this will make sure you stay small but still great quality.

For images. Keep the PNG on your PC as the originals, but for what you ship out, you might want to use WEBP/WEBM or in the future AVIF/AV1, again you will have to look into it, but it may save you size on what you ship.

Other than that good luck with your game.

 

[jolann]

This game need incest patch!

 

[realkiyankris]

Final piece of feedback.

An intro image with your title.

The coloration/looks of the Ren'Py UI (save/load/settings/etc.) The harsh light grey is a bit hard on the eyes and doesn't push the theme of your game.


Between Alarm and Stash, maybe throw in a getting dressed point?

The jumping of the mouse when you click on inventory/quests. I get it is useful, but it may throw people off.

Basement a bit too hidden.

MC's shorts the non finished stripe, or a more detailed pocket would be nice.

I would like Katie's badge to stand out a bit more. Maybe some pant details stand out a bit more.

Text box and names a bit bigger and stand out a bit better.

A little better standing out on hover of icons on top GUI

The Modern Art lacks a pop over text.

Not really a problem, just an observation, Most things have pop over of what they are, but 4 things have actions instead. Bed has sleep, Calendar has look, Computer has use, window has look.

Aesthetically, the dining room ceiling light is way too huge.

To save game size for the future. Don't use MP3 or WAV files, use OPUS

You must be registered to see the links

You don't have much yet, but this will make sure you stay small but still great quality.

For images. Keep the PNG on your PC as the originals, but for what you ship out, you might want to use WEBP/WEBM or in the future AVIF/AV1, again you will have to look into it, but it may save you size on what you ship.

Other than that good luck with your game.

Great constructive stuff in there. Thanks again somebodynobody.

 

[zektamor]

realkiyankris

 

[Jarul]

so, I tried it and all you can do right now is talk to topless milf? Nothing after that?

 

[somebodynobody]

so, I tried it and all you can do right now is talk to topless milf? Nothing after that?

Correct.

 

[sir_legend]

Great art style it makes me miss summertime saga. I hope developer continue hes great work. Thank you

 

[hectorvartor]

 

[TokyoRoaster]

my honest opinion: NAT best caharacter and I would love to have a decente, slow and LONG STORY between her and the MC. Something that intensify step by step and with a huge amount of scenes. Of course differently from the other titles in this forum, would be great to have an affair with a normal girl and nothing more out of it.

 

[Wildbill5150]

Hi I have to ask it says Amber and Jason scenes in Villa does that mean this game is going to have ntr? And if so will it be avoidable? If the Amber/Jason scenes are sex scenes then out of curiosity why would you spend time making sex scene renders that don't have the mc? Are they for story reasons? Love the art, game looks good, hoping no ntr or at least it being avoidable?

 

[realkiyankris]

Hi I have to ask it says Amber and Jason scenes in Villa does that mean this game is going to have ntr? And if so will it be avoidable? If the Amber/Jason scenes are sex scenes then out of curiosity why would you spend time making sex scene renders that don't have the mc? Are they for story reasons? Love the art, game looks good, hoping no ntr or at least it being avoidable?

I have to admit I had to google ntr. There definitely won't be any of that.

Perhaps it's for the best that I outline now what kind of 18+ content you can expect in this game:

- no hurting (emotional or physical), except for certain female characters who'll ask mc to be a little rougher,
- no rape whatsoever, every sexual scene will be consensual,
- some fetishes will be present, think foot fetishes, definitely some fem dominance (maybe a scene with Katie in leather and with handcuffs, will see),

I mean it's logical, and it only occurred to me now that it's not very apparent (from the amount of content that's currently present in the game) of what kind of game this will be.
The main idea was to borrow heavily from many many adventure games that I've personally played and love, fantasy shows and books, but with logical sexual encounters, and with a fair amount of fantasy elements (think GOT fantasy kinda style). When I say 'borrow' I mean influential-wise, not stealing. For example, MC going to the downstairs hall and talking casually to Katie who's just enjoying her morning coffee, was inspired by the first scene in Dreamfall: The Longest Journey, when Zoe wakes up in the morning, goes downstairs and talks to her father, then goes on about her daily routine. And the character of Ruby being a ----- (people who've played the v0.11 know what I'm talking about) was inspired by Neil Gaiman's American Gods, when Shadow goes to that little town, and the good-natured old man that he meets there (forgot his name) turns out to be, well, something else. That kinda stuff. I was also thinking of making certain scenes where you're switched to playing Katie; maybe going to a crime scene that has to do something with the story (like in the Broken Sword games where you switch between Nico and George).

The main point is, that I'm really trying to make something special here. Flesh out real characters, with feelings and views of their own (+ sex scenes). We'll see If I'll succeed in that. That's why I'm trying to make the art look as good-as-possible, and why I spend an irrational amount of time on some small details or scenes.

One last thing - like everyone, I juggle real life with everything else. I'm currently very busy with some stuff that's taking a huge chunk of the time I'd otherwise spend drawing, but I'll definitely keep working on this.

Again, thanks to everyone for their feedback, it's much appreciated.

Best,
Kris

 

[somebodynobody]

Just as a heads up. Your twitter link goes to nowhere, your Ko-fi and tumblr pages feels like they need serious updates, or might as well remove them.

I would also mention look at the more prevalent games and how they set up the look of their patron pages, progress bar, etc. So that you can draw more eyes.

 

[realkiyankris]

Just as a heads up. Your twitter link goes to nowhere, your Ko-fi and tumblr pages feels like they need serious updates, or might as well remove them.

I would also mention look at the more prevalent games and how they set up the look of their patron pages, progress bar, etc. So that you can draw more eyes.

If this Patreon business picks up, I'm hiring you as my agent for social media.
As always, thanks a lot for the feedback!

Best,
Kris

 

[somebodynobody]

If this Patreon business picks up, I'm hiring you as my agent for social media.
As always, thanks a lot for the feedback!

Best,
Kris

You may want to hit up a mod and ask to take control of the thread so you can edit the images to be about this version and the social media links.

 

[TokyoRoaster]

If this Patreon business picks up, I'm hiring you as my agent for social media.
As always, thanks a lot for the feedback!

Best,
Kris

Your patreon will never "picks up" without a proper communication with your fanbase. People need contents, informations and a feedback exchange process. Honestly, considering your game's potential, a discord server would be great!

 

[TokyoRoaster]

realkiyankris any news?

 

[realkiyankris]

realkiyankris any news?

Well I'm very sick atm, only today I've managed to even take my phone and check on stuff. Once I recover, I'll be making a discord and everything, but for now everything's on hold. I'll also be putting patreon pledges on pause, since I'm unable to put out any content like this.

Best,
Kris

 

[somebodynobody]

Well I'm very sick atm, only today I've managed to even take my phone and check on stuff. Once I recover, I'll be making a discord and everything, but for now everything's on hold. I'll also be putting patreon pledges on pause, since I'm unable to put out any content like this.

Best,
Kris

Take care of yourself, we will see you and your game when you are better.

 

[TokyoRoaster]

Well I'm very sick atm, only today I've managed to even take my phone and check on stuff. Once I recover, I'll be making a discord and everything, but for now everything's on hold. I'll also be putting patreon pledges on pause, since I'm unable to put out any content like this.

Best,
Kris

How are you doing?

 

[edscorp]

Need help! I'm stuck in the topless woman, what should I do? where do i click?