Well, it's a promising start, I think.
Looking at the characters, Oliver looks... weird. But the rest of his family seems alright. Hailey is super cute, and I'm curious to learn more about Riley.
The script has been proofread, but only a little. There are still plenty of times the word 'I' and names are not capitalized, including the Morrison family name. A few lines still miss a period at the end. And a few spoken lines are still labeled with the wrong name, I think.
On a less objective note, the MC might be a bit too much for me. I was pretty okay with his behavior until he outright started groping Hailey, and essentially preparing her for anal, right on day one. Like, dude, slow down. Anything can happen with enough buildup, but MC is trying to go for some sort of speed record here. Anyway, that's just my opinion. You do what you feel is right, Mr/Ms Dev.