This is promising, but I feel like it would be better to be given the choice of whether or not the Player wants to go down the sharing path. There was no inclination the MC was into sharing his GF with others until it was basically forced on him. That lack of agency is annoying.
I know it's a kinetic novel style, but it feels too forced. I think the story would be better if it wasn't kinetic and a choice was there. There's a unique story here that has a perfect setup already: NTR with "edited" photos. It feels like a missed opportunity.
The way I would do it is have the MC make a deliberate choice between actually wanting to share and keeping it as a fantasy. If the MC chooses to keep it as a fantasy, then Dan and/or others could send him edited photos with the MC's permission, but the catch is that they're actually real. The FMC would be trying to hide her cheating and lying to the MC, and the MC would think his "friends" are doing him a solid by fueling his fantasy.
I haven't seen any other stories do anything like that before, and it has a chance to set this story apart in that way. And all the building blocks are already in place.
I share the same point!
It all depends on the creator whether they want to spend time creating various possible path.
This could add more choice and maque the game more interactive.
This could lend to different intensity (more NTS or NTR)/ reaction of the MC (more or less engaged in fantasy, through reaction).
Like : he want to keep it more casual, flirt kiss etc. Or hard where he desire his gf to get impregnated by BBC! Or something in between.
EX : The choice of keeping the rule or not could be what we see, or can has more reactiontion, debate, leading to emphasize the fact that the MC didn't use it with Cloe and Tiff. And Evelyn already had sex with Jeff without it.
- Twist/kink the rule: OK with Jeff and BBC, but absolutely not with one smaller than the MC (for more freedom), or approve the bull every time.
The game has a lot of potential, and I love it!
I adore where is going so far: Evelyn's reaction/ teasing MC with Jeff!