The story is actually pretty good. The whole going back to your hometown after everything has changed is super cliche, however the twist of it being after you've become really successful makes it bearable. I really do like the sketch book mechanic, which is the saving grace. It a nice touch that makes it go from being mediocre to pretty good.
The grammar is alright, better then most on the site, but there are issues. For example during the sit down conversation with Lindsey "[name] I hear somebody writing to you, thank you for staying focused. But now you better answer the text. This sounds are very distracting," should read something like "[name] I hear somebody writing to you, thank you for staying focused, but now you should answer the text. The sounds are very distracting." Also how did Lindsey not hear her leaving the room? If you want a proofreader I can recommend you one.
The UI actually looks good better then it normally does, although its missing a lot of things native to RenPy. The skip feature doesn't always work, in fact it seems to not work more then it does, please fix.
Choices are actually important here, but they might be a bit too vague in the outcome. Please relay outcomes a bit more with the player. Save scumming to exhaust every option isn't fun.
The characters though are the fucking worst. Now these are my opinions, but it seems a lot of people have issue with the characters, not just me.
Kelly is a absolute bitch that has zero redeeming qualities. During the texting with her at the table with lindsey I thought she was going to be this cute quirky character, but no, shes just a bitch. A real bitchy bitch. I just cant stand the shift from half quirky to half straight up bitch. its infuriating and I wish I could just snap her out of existence
Kiara and Jen are equally bad. Kiara is a terrible partner, and Jen just comes off as a misandrist. Kiara is Bi and is obviously open to adding men to their relationship, and brings it up to her partner at seemingly every chance she can get, which is probably the reason why, Jen, an actual lesbian seems to hate men. I wouldn't even enjoy corrupting them they are both so bad.
Kevin is the only character who's guts I don't fucking hate, but in games like this I don't know how long he'll stay our bro. Of course I don't like him as a character either, hes literally one of those annoying little shits that are the main character of every other mom son incest game, but hes a homey little shit.
Lindsey while seemingly is a gold digger, its suggested Nancy no longer gives her money because she would spend it on her boyfriend. So I don't know if its a plot hole, or if she really did steal money from him. If the latter is the case, double fuck her. Also very convenient that shes living with the MC because she had a fight with her boyfriend, I already see where this is going and I already hate it. Shes weak, easily manipulated and is blinded by money. Once the friend is mentioned she instantly asks how much he makes, and then once its known that hes not employed "Oh, i'm not ready for a new relationship". For real, fuck her. Not literally, shes a disgusting person.
Stacy, well theres not much to say, but I hate the way she was introduced.
Shelia, I really liked her at first till she started talking about how she want to fuck you while in the house with her husband and son there. Nope, I'm a fan of netori, but I had to nope out after that.
Somehow the dev managed to make almost EVERY female character insanely unlikable, and the thing is that I don't usually care too much how character act in games, but these characters I just hate all around.
The renders are absolutely fantastic, the dev clearly know his was around daz. All the characters outside of Jen, Shelly, and maybe Shelia are stunning, and even those three are still great.
For people worrying about NTR, there isnt any yet, the scene with Jen and the old man isn't meant to cause jealousy, but is instead used to punish her. However I'm not sure if that how its going to stay, even with NTR not being in the planned genres, i'm getting heavy vibes from it.