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In that case I'd suggest telling the stories about Kevin in the present or flashbacks with more storytelling tension
and forward momentum as opposed to "dear journal this is a thing that happened omg my life sux /leftwrist /rightwrist"
(sorry, I'm just teasing)
When you tell the stories completely from her perspective it takes away the notion that we're supposed
to be thinking about Kevin as a character, too. Amy's diary is necessarily about her, after all, especially being such a
self-absorbed one.
Also maybe put in some hints of humanizing traits about Kevin even at first to signal to the reader that they shouldn't
totally dismiss him.
Good luck
and forward momentum as opposed to "dear journal this is a thing that happened omg my life sux /leftwrist /rightwrist"
(sorry, I'm just teasing)
When you tell the stories completely from her perspective it takes away the notion that we're supposed
to be thinking about Kevin as a character, too. Amy's diary is necessarily about her, after all, especially being such a
self-absorbed one.
Also maybe put in some hints of humanizing traits about Kevin even at first to signal to the reader that they shouldn't
totally dismiss him.
Good luck
