VN Ren'Py Confessions of a Sassy Girl [v0.2 Beta] [Huninn]

[frogbert]

In that case I'd suggest telling the stories about Kevin in the present or flashbacks with more storytelling tension
and forward momentum as opposed to "dear journal this is a thing that happened omg my life sux /leftwrist /rightwrist"
(sorry, I'm just teasing)
When you tell the stories completely from her perspective it takes away the notion that we're supposed
to be thinking about Kevin as a character, too. Amy's diary is necessarily about her, after all, especially being such a
self-absorbed one.
Also maybe put in some hints of humanizing traits about Kevin even at first to signal to the reader that they shouldn't
totally dismiss him.

Good luck

 

[damnedfrog]

Who knows?

I also would like to know if you plan to add lesbian.
Even more, if a only lesbian route would be possible.

 

[Huninn]

I also would like to know if you plan to add lesbian.
Even more, if a only lesbian route would be possible.

I don't have any solid plans for an exclusive lesbian route right now—at least, not yet, depending on how we think about a 'route.' You know, like whether we're talking about a whole story branch leading to a unique ending, or more of a 'side-quest' kind of thing. But I do have plans for Ami to experiment with another female character who hasn't been introduced yet. I've got some story ideas mapped out in my manuscript, and I'm still figuring things out as I get your feedback.

 

[damnedfrog]

I don't have any solid plans for an exclusive lesbian route right now—at least, not yet, depending on how we think about a 'route.' You know, like whether we're talking about a whole story branch leading to a unique ending, or more of a 'side-quest' kind of thing. But I do have plans for Ami to experiment with another female character who hasn't been introduced yet. I've got some story ideas mapped out in my manuscript, and I'm still figuring things out as I get your feedback.

I understand a lesbian route in a whole story branch is a lot of work. And for a minority audience.
I was more thinking if all straight contents can be avoided. And I'm aware it will probably result of not seeing a majority of the lewd scenes. I don't care too much, if I could still enjoyed the story (meaning there is actually a story outside of the sex).

 

[awkward armadillo]

View attachment 4086679
THX for sharing...

Off topic, but Shimoneta is a GOATed anime and Fuwa is best girl. Really sucks that it never got a second season and the light novels were never translated to English.

 

[Huninn]

I understand a lesbian route in a whole story branch is a lot of work. And for a minority audience.
I was more thinking if all straight contents can be avoided. And I'm aware it will probably result of not seeing a majority of the lewd scenes. I don't care too much, if I could still enjoyed the story (meaning there is actually a story outside of the sex).

I've planned for a 'SFW' route where you can enjoy the story without excessive lewd content.

Just out of curiosity: Would a sudden appearance of a non-penetrative scene featuring nudity, such as a naked man, be acceptable in the story? Additionally, if the protagonist were to engage with straight pornography (or thinking of a male character) and masturbate, how would that impact your comfort level?

 

[damnedfrog]

I've planned for a 'SFW' route where you can enjoy the story without excessive lewd content.

Just out of curiosity: Would a sudden appearance of a non-penetrative scene featuring nudity, such as a naked man, be acceptable in the story? Additionally, if the protagonist were to engage with straight pornography (or thinking of a male character) and masturbate, how would that impact your comfort level?

First, I just want to be clear that I don't ask you to change you vision of your game or anything just to accommodate my liking.

I don't have an aversion about straight sex.
It just that I don't find it at all exciting to watch.
It's why I prefer Female Protagonist game with a lesbian route.
I enjoy some Male Protagonist games, because I will like the female LIs. After all, I love women
But in a Female Protagonist game I just don't have any interest in any male LI. I don't get it how a guy could be attractive. So I don't feel at all how the MC could think about a dude, masturbate thinking of him, and even more want to have sex with him.
For me, male bodies are just as appealing as... saucepans
Strangely, I have discover for some time now that I enjoy transgirls/futanaris if they are feminine enough.
So it's not even about vagina vs dick, it's really about male body as a whole.

I still could like a game with a straight female MC, if there are other things in the story that just romance and sex with men.

Anyway, I think I will still try your game.
I like the idea of a sassy teen.
It must be my masochist side, having already 2 teen girls at home .

 

[Huninn]

First, I just want to be clear that I don't ask you to change you vision of your game or anything just to accommodate my liking.

I don't have an aversion about straight sex.
It just that I don't find it at all exciting to watch.
It's why I prefer Female Protagonist game with a lesbian route.
I enjoy some Male Protagonist games, because I will like the female LIs. After all, I love women
But in a Female Protagonist game I just don't have any interest in any male LI. I don't get it how a guy could be attractive. So I don't feel at all how the MC could think about a dude, masturbate thinking of him, and even more want to have sex with him.
For me, male bodies are just as appealing as... saucepans
Strangely, I have discover for some time now that I enjoy transgirls/futanaris if they are feminine enough.
So it's not even about vagina vs dick, it's really about male body as a whole.

I still could like a game with a straight female MC, if there are other things in the story that just romance and sex with men.

Anyway, I think I will still try your game.
I like the idea of a sassy teen.
It must be my masochist side, having already 2 teen girls at home .

Thanks for your input! This is my first time writing a story from a female point of view for a mature audience, so I’m really open to any feedback.

And, seeing how Ami is literally "drooling" about Ms. Henderson, it wouldn't be completely outlandish to explore this one-sided "crush" (or admiration?) further down the line. You’ve given me some fresh ideas to think about, and I might just give them a shot (no promises, though!)

 

[vs2011xyz]

The game kinda reminds me of a movie called Sucker Punch. View attachment 4086673 Her vagina looks like testicles.

 

[damnedfrog]

Thanks for your input! This is my first time writing a story from a female point of view for a mature audience, so I’m really open to any feedback.

And, seeing how Ami is literally "drooling" about Ms. Henderson, it wouldn't be completely outlandish to explore this one-sided "crush" (or admiration?) further down the line. You’ve given me some fresh ideas to think about, and I might just give them a shot (no promises, though!)

I have give a shot to your game, and I like it so far.
I like the cynical humor and overall attitude of Ami.
I also like her "girl next-door" kind of beauty.

Spoiler: Anyway I can't not like a teenage girl who's listening to

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If I may allow myself a criticism, I'm just find that the render when she's laughing are odd

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[Huninn]

I have give a shot to your game, and I like it so far.
I like the cynical humor and overall attitude of Ami.
I also like her "girl next-door" kind of beauty.

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If I may allow myself a criticism, I'm just find that the render when she's laughing are odd

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Thanks for your feedback! I really appreciate it. Just to clarify, her "charming" million-dollar smile is meant to be exaggerated and a bit out of proportion. The goal is to create a comedic effect, so I totally understand if it feels a bit odd! However, I’m open to changing her "charming" smile if my kind of humor doesn’t resonate with a lot of people.

 

[pisstaker]

The premise and 3d models caught my eye, but I will just watch this thread and wait for updates to pile up.

The whole reason I prefer Fem MCs is because I'm guaranteed to get the most scenes with one girl instead of a game that is spread thin with 1-5 scenes with multiple chicks, and based on the previews, it seems her colleagues are already getting in more action than her.

 

[King Thanos]

add pregnancy

 

[AnyName'llDo]

Jessica is attractive, but I have no interest in seeing her with Ami. She's all over Ami, and many of Ami's imaginings, if you allow her mind to wander, involve focusing on seeing other women naked, and even with her. I found my willpower stat going up as I played. This game seems best aimed at those who are interested in lesbian content. Not my kind of corruption game, but I am sure there's an audience for it. Nice renders. Interesting narration perspective. Good luck to the dev with your game.

 

[R1k0]

I'd like a game about a cute schoolgirl as MC. Games like this are rarely seen here. And it seemed really cute at first, and the beginning of getting to know Jessica and these thoughts of the main character. Although I hate it when everything interesting happens in thought instead of in reality. But the further I played the less interesting this story becomes, I have a feeling. I would like a game about corrupting an innocent girl, but it looks like it won't happen here.

 

[Disco-Inferno]

Jessica is great and all, but, I want 0.1 back Had I known there would be an overhaul I would have permanently saved some of those renders before I deleted the game from my hard drive.
Do any kind souls still have it? Can it be put up on the main page please?

 

[EdPokol]

Simply have to love Ami... cute, funny and even in her oversized sweater not ugly at all. Looking forward to see how her story develops. Nice game

 

[Huninn]

Jessica is attractive, but I have no interest in seeing her with Ami. She's all over Ami, and many of Ami's imaginings, if you allow her mind to wander, involve focusing on seeing other women naked, and even with her. I found my willpower stat going up as I played. This game seems best aimed at those who are interested in lesbian content. Not my kind of corruption game, but I am sure there's an audience for it. Nice renders. Interesting narration perspective. Good luck to the dev with your game.

Thanks for the feedback! Just to clarify, the game isn’t really meant to be a lesbian romance. It’s more about offering that as one of several options (not the main focus). My main goal is to have Jessica slowly draw/corrupt Ami into heterosexual encounters. I’m not sure if I’ve done a good job of showing that in the game so far.

 

[Machete]

I've read the concept of the game. I usually don't play female protagonists games, but this one sounds like fun, i might try it.

 

[Huninn]

I'd like a game about a cute schoolgirl as MC. Games like this are rarely seen here. And it seemed really cute at first, and the beginning of getting to know Jessica and these thoughts of the main character. Although I hate it when everything interesting happens in thought instead of in reality. But the further I played the less interesting this story becomes, I have a feeling. I would like a game about corrupting an innocent girl, but it looks like it won't happen here.

Thanks for the feedback! The game is all about "corrupting" an "innocent" girl (Ami) . I'm just taking my time to build the story toward that. Plus, there will definitely be more scenes happening outside of the main character's mind!