This is your resident weeb fox lover speaking, ehhh, Takahiro is finish so I'll need some beta reader haha. So please tear this thing to shred because it's very bad. Thank you and out.
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'You enter the den and walking down the road'
Okay, so, it should be 'present perfect', not 'present simple', just because I said so. Otherwise it implies that
'you' do all aforementioned actions (entering and walking) at the same time.
'You
have enter
ed the den and walk
s down the road
.'
Break on different sentences required to keep 'present simple' form.
With that in mind, next sentence should be like
'Kiyoko said she
in need of you for some errands
, thats why you’re heading to the shrine
.(Too long sentence, english dont like too long sentences)
On the usual spot of a
road, towards the shrine, certain drunken fox
was occupied with the yet another bottle of liquor.
- “Still busy as always eh? Why don’t you stop to go drink with me eh?”
Takahiro
moved bottle away from his lips to call out to you.'
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